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Orange_Car_Slave
Orange_Car_SlaveLv131yr
2022-12-20 15:57

If you want the MC to be a Immortal Cultivator then play 'Immortal Taoist'. That will be op haha.

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Webnote
WebnoteLv5

Ok

Rimuru9Tempest
Rimuru9TempestLv4

Strong Daoist [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

Orange_Car_Slave
Orange_Car_SlaveLv13

Kamusta ka lodz?

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Honoured_Writer
Honoured_WriterLv4

Got to golden immortal and quit

breakage
breakageLv2

that's a good idea

Shey_Saints
Shey_SaintsLv2

Hi, You were one of my supporters for My Accidental Power and I am thankful for that. I have a new fiction called, "The New Hunger." Would love to get the same support and I'd appreciate some feedback as well. Feedback from readers will encourage me and help me decide whether Webnovel is the right platform to publish the complete episodes/chapters for "The New Hunger." Thank you in advance!

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Iceyunderground
IceyundergroundLv4

I'm not a professional reviewer or anything, just someone who thought to give his two-cents about what he thinks about this novel. I've read up to ch. 78, so this review will be based on that. Writing Quality: 4/5 - There are a few mistakes when using he/her or his/hers, nothing too major but it's enough to make you have to pause and re-read what just happened to 'Get it'. Stability of Updates: 4/5 - I started reading when there were already 78 chapters available, so I have yet to experience any wait time, so it'd be unfair to give a perfect for this. I also noticed that the release dates for most the chapters take place roughly every two days (-ish), so that's okay. Story Development: 4/5 - The pacing is fine as it is, especially once you get to the later chapters. Though there are parts that feel a bit ... draggy? Character Design: 5/5 - I'm really liking the MC (Robin is his name). He knows what he wants to do, he has a conscience that he won't cross easily (good on him), he grows as a person and yet still manages to stay himself. Again, I'm no expert or anything when it comes to reviewing and stuff but I like this. Not to mention all the other side/support characters, they're all fun to read about. Though I will say this, I will drop this to a 2/5 if my boy Gengar (spoilers, MC gets a Gengar) don't show up and get some of that spotlight soon... Jk author, jk ... no I'm not! ... nah, jk, jk ... or am I? World Background: 5/5 - The in-novel world is based upon our current real world (takes place in 2023) so expect a lot of current real world stuff in the novel. I be sincere here, I'm not 100% up to date on everything going on world-wide, but again I'm no expert, so I'm willing to believe ya for the sake of the enjoyment of the novel, hahaha! Yeah I probably could've been okay rating this 4/5, but I actually learned quite a bit about Indian culture through this novel so I figured, "eh, why not a 5?" Overview: Fact is, should you spend your precious time reading this novel or not? I'd say... yeah, give it a shot. I'll admit, it's not the greatest novel out there, but it's still a fun and entertaining novel to read. I guess I'll update this review once it gets to 100+ chapters to show any change in thought.

AsianLadyBoy
AsianLadyBoyLv12

This story had a great idea. But its life in my library was tragically cut short by poor execution, slow pace, and a lack of a relatable MC. It's hard to sympathize with an MC who has a mental breakdown over a POS taking his own life after he was caught ordering the death of many innocent people and ruining many students lives. Also, way too many chapters of his BS mental dilemma he was having with taking POS unfit to be called human garbage lives. I don't mind there being a chapter like this but this stuff was dragged on for way too long that it made me hate the MC even more. Now, I tend to put myself in the MCs place when I read a story, and a lot of his decisions to me just felt like were made by the author in order to slow the pace of the story down. He worries about Big bad guys coming to get him yet he does nothing to become stronger till later on when he's in danger and he wishes he was. So you know the whole wait till bad stuff happens to realize my mistakes to then decide to become stronger. Just another classic overused way to push a story that has an OP ability or character in a story forward. And those to me are the worst type of stories. The ones where it feels like they weaken the MC's brain compacity in order to think clearly so they can push some BS character development down the line. With the whole cliche "I do need to get stronger or I will die like I almost did today". We as readers are on the internet all the time. We know how the world works. Yet somehow he docent want to get stronger quickly for some reason. Even though he mentions a lot of bad people doing bad things or scenarios of bad people wanting the technology that he may bring to the world. So it becomes frustrating that the author makes the MC realize all of this yet he docent make him seek a way to truly make himself stronger in order to prevent any of those bad things from happening. As I said, he literally waits till he's in danger to realize that, It's so dumb. The only thing he does to help him early on is to get a pokemon to protect him. That he docent want anyone in the world to see. I say this because if he was in danger in the open. Surrounded by many eyes he would most likely hesitate to let his pokemon save his life. So he pretty much becomes useless in those scenarios. Oh, and he also got a charm that would stop some bullets. But it seemed like he forgot about that when people were pointing guns at him. Now, I did like some of the story. Loved the AI, loved the pokemon. Also enjoyed the choice of your first Android. But the second one was awful. She was so annoying and it became even more frustrating to read. She reminded me of those annoying system novels where the system never stops sh*ting on the MC and calling him dumb and weak. I hate those stories so much. So in conclusion like I said, this story had a great idea. But its life in my library was tragically cut short by poor execution, slow pace, and a lack of a relatable MC. You may like it but after 42 chapters I did not.

Cacakman
CacakmanLv5

I usually don't make review.. But this fanfict actually made me pulling my hair so hard. So I'll try to make my review as fair as possible without spoiling the stories.. The Good * The writing actually really good. Languange wise and how Author bring the story to the table. * The premise actually have potential. Dig deep and make it realistic as possible. You can do it Author! * The interaction between character and how Author describe thing felt so natural. Believe me, I write a lot as it is my job. It's hard to write as good as how Author write. The Bad * The premise itself is double-eged sword. It have potential, but can go wrong easily if Author don't know what is the goal. And that actually happened to this story. * The character dan interaction between them itself was really fun to read. But not their decision. Try to read it by yourself. If you don't like, then you won't. If you like, then it gonna be a decent reading material to past time. The Ugly * The story development is.... how to put it nicely... dumb. MC shouldn't be this irrational and clueless on every choices he made with his background. Seriously? I won't nitpick. But, really Author? He is adult for Godsake! Not a 5th grader. If you said he is gonna be realistic, stick with it. (Sorry for my rambling) I know Author write some fanfict in this platform. So maybe if you as reader wanna try this fict, give it a try... If you feel this stories not your cup of tea, try other fict made by Author. Godspeed for Author! Wish you all the best. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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