Tbh it's an alright story. Very cringy in places tho. At some points, it makes it seem a bit more real but then instead of learning from it. It happens again and again. The main thing that is making me drop is the whole heaven, bad luck thing. I mean I get it I really do but you don't have to mention it and go on and on about it every single chapter. Plus it's used in the most random ways just to make you remember again that it is there. Like when he was chasing the bandits, It was funny. He was having fun. He was heading to the city anyway, and this is just fun on the way. But then it is made out that it was heaven affecting him??? WTF how??? how will chasing bandits along the road you already have to walk affect his cultivation or will? As long as he remembers his goal and strives for it, he can do whatever tf he wants. Just because he isn't moaning and complaining about it and isn't focusing on breaking free 24/7 doesn't mean it will weaken his will... It's honestly annoying to read about every chapter. Then you have how can heaven even atk him like these situations... It was made out very clearly that all heaven would do is not give him luck. Okay so in random situations it is always the worst case. SO how is heaven making him chase bandits? It shouldn't be able to do that... Plus, how will heaven even affect the mc's luck? We call it luck but luck shouldn't be a concept to heaven. Also, if the mc always had no luck then he wouldn't survive at all. Bad luck is like when he is cultivating something can go wrong and die. Never find love etc It will be impossible for the mc to even live let alone cultivate. Also if heaven is fair why is it taking the luck of the family? It killing random people, animals etc trying to kill the mc. How would that be fair to the other people and animals???? It would be much better if heaven was made out to be a person. Cause then everyone saying heaven is fair is clearly lying cause it's not...
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LIKEThank you for the Review! I like constructive criticism the most and you have explained very well why you disliked my novel. That you still give it three stars, even though you aborted, also shows that you are writing from a critical point of view and not a "blindly hateful." Though, in my defense, most things you are complaining about are exactly the point. The story was meant to be written like that. Heaven basically is a "young master", who does things as it wishes. It shows an open and fair front, but hypocritically breaks all its own rules regularly when it wants. It's a spoiled, really smart kid with unending power. (At least in the lower world). That's why all the blinded people in the novel say "heaven is fair" even though it is very clearly not. Still, thank you for your criticism!
Guess the story wasn't for me then :/ I mean I would be fine if it was mentioned at key points just not every chapter or every other chapter. Maybe at significant points of the story that would affect it in some way. Gl for the future of the book thou ^^
It's alright. The constant suppression is supposed to feel frustrating at times. It makes it better when he MC finally gets one over Heaven. Have fun!
I slowly read this and compare this Heaven will to other novels and I gotta say it’s better than ‘normal’. This is because almost every other novels’ Heaven just gives them op luck or just rains down lighting for being to powerful. In this novel I think it’s not ‘bad luck’ it’s just ‘hardcore training’.
Wow i'm impressed by you, it's rare to find authors here who are willing to take and answer criticism instead of just deleting bad reviews.
I agree with this comment. His rant about heaven this and heaven that has gone past rationality and creeping into insane territory....and since its the author saying it he can make up a reason to justify it even when its absolutely unnecessary and take away from main story. Imagine a man is hungry because he havn't eaten any food but blame heaven for making him hungry. Not caring to find the cause and effect in normal situation. I think paragon of sin did a better job with karmic luck how it affect others around it.