Item: Fate Online: Shadow
Rating: 1
Author: GreatLeecher

GreatLeecherLv55yr

2019-11-18 22:37

Wow this author is really shameless, 3 times of deleted review already cause it was getting likes from the readers since they can relate to what I said that it was full of inconsistency and we,with the author, even argued about it but dude just said "go make your own novel and make one thats better than harry potter lmao. So here I am again to make a review to counter your shamelessness of deleting low rating reviews. ** Im gonna make one again if you delete this again so yah

Fate Online: Shadow

ApocalypseX

4.2

560 Chs

Liked by 178 people

Replies28

SungchulKimLv4

This is fate. FATE: TRASH ONLINE :V

4yr

dreamwithnogodLv10

When leaving a comment on a fan made novel please try to give the author constructive criticism. If you hate a novel please explain why you don’t like it. Just leaving a one star review and some insults or something of that nature is just annoying. It makes you look like you are just commenting for exp

4yr

GreatLeecherLv5

I actually did but the author deleted it

dreamwithnogod:When leaving a comment on a fan made novel please try to give the author constructive criticism. If you hate a novel please explain why you don’t like it. Just leaving a one star review and some insults or something of that nature is just annoying. It makes you look like you are just commenting for exp

4yr

KingGarudaLv5

Then do it again, I didn't see your review so I can't say if you did it or not, but making another ''review'' with one star without giving a constructive criticism is kinda childish.

GreatLeecher:I actually did but the author deleted it

4yr

CorruptedLLv12

Tell that to the author who's deleting low star reviews...

KingGaruda:Then do it again, I didn't see your review so I can't say if you did it or not, but making another ''review'' with one star without giving a constructive criticism is kinda childish.

4yr

Emanuel94Lv2

Very unbalanced fights, in one chapter you fight only against a super powerful guild and in another time using 10 chapters are entangled against three hunters of average level.

4yr

CharonTheSordidLv5

I just want to say thanks for your repeated efforts. It's hard to decide whether an original novel is worth starting on this site. Too many dishonest authors inflate their ratings by deleting reviews. It has gotten to the point that I won't start an 'original' works without scouring the comments in search of negative reviews. To clarify, I do this not because I am lemming who can't form an opinion of the novel for myself, but rather I wish to know the integrity of the author themselves. An author who refuses to take criticism, cannot honestly reflect on the quality of their own work. With the countless novels constantly entering this site alone, I have no desire to read anything from such an author. So once again, thank you, Leecher, for your perseverance.

4yr

laceremLv3

I actually stopped reading a story for a similar reason. The author plagiarize the cover pages of her novel. When I pointed out she change the pic and deleted my comment. Needless to say the new image was also plagiarized.

4yr

HiddenReaderLv3

4yr

Some_Random_O_OLv11

ho? Does this dao friend mind sharing with this penniless monk?

lacerem:I actually stopped reading a story for a similar reason. The author plagiarize the cover pages of her novel. When I pointed out she change the pic and deleted my comment. Needless to say the new image was also plagiarized.

4yr

laceremLv3

??? If you are asking the name of the novel it was emperor loves me or something like that

Some_Random_O_O:ho? Does this dao friend mind sharing with this penniless monk?

4yr

Some_Random_O_OLv11

Thank you.

lacerem:??? If you are asking the name of the novel it was emperor loves me or something like that

4yr

IlumieLv11

I recommend you just write down and copy your issues with the novel somewhere, that way you can just paste it back in once he deletes the review. I did this with one author who was particularly adamant about deleting bad reviews, though admittedly I gave up after being deleted for the 27th time. Frankly I don't quite get why WN even has a feature of letting author's delete the reviews they get, it just makes me as a reader suspicious of overwhelmingly good reviews.

GreatLeecher:I actually did but the author deleted it

4yr

RaiquiaArbiterLv6

WN in a money generating reading site were Various particularly shameless original authors have taken the site as home(of course not all). Yeah I understand you cause I myself have criticize too many novels here and shameless authors with their tarded fans just won't accept the reality, much more if WN babies that particular novel.

4yr

SusshiRollLv15

The author should also delete all other star reviews too because don't tell me why it is good.

dreamwithnogod:When leaving a comment on a fan made novel please try to give the author constructive criticism. If you hate a novel please explain why you don’t like it. Just leaving a one star review and some insults or something of that nature is just annoying. It makes you look like you are just commenting for exp

4yr

LizeLv13

This novel is actually pretty good.. Sadly tho.. there are a lot of inconsistency in the story.. Like at first mc dont know about the so called black skull or something gang.. But in later chapter.. it is actually that gang is the one wjo always hunt him down.. I like wtf man.. 😅😅😅 Then amanda.. Her personality is so different.. In in this life i only see strong woman.. with strong connection.. There is no way she will afraid of that jin guy.. Considering her connection with her friend.. But in prev life she like she afraid of jin guy.. And almost get raped by him.. Before mc save her.. Idk why.. she have strong personality.. but often get harrased.. in the first time mc meet her in this life.. she almost get harrased again.. Well.. dont make me start with how his game system work.. with author grade SSS math skill.. Conclusion.. This can be good.. just fix the godamn hole.. 😅😅😅😅😅

4yr

MwatamuLeLv6

I’m today years old when I know author could delete reviews. ... What’s the point of the review then?

4yr

SaltbergLv11

Same happend to me with ''Epic of Caterpillar'' .. wrote a 2.5 star review and got deleted multiple times lol ... I guess a Censorship feature is a musst for a chinese website smh

4yr

EroticEarwigLv13

This is why I hate how authors can delete any low review. Us readers go into the novel expecting it to be at least average in quality, but get served up a steaming pile of shit. The grammar is very broken, there is no logic in the game/plot.

4yr

ZerzuskanLv6

once an author decides to delete my review I immediately spam that he's deleting reviews in the comments of good reviews and in the paragraph comments of the first chapter. apparently those can't be deleted. also I grew extremely suspicious of novels that don't have a few bad reviews. if they don't, I'm definitely not reading the novel, because I won't believe it. also this function, which only serves to manipulate public opinion and ratings is extremely trash and I frequently stop reading any original works, just because its too bothersome

4yr

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ApocalypseXAuthor

Hey guys! ApocX here! If you didn't start reading this novel, I suggest you start right now. It is definitely something you will enjoy, especially for those VRMMO and Romance novel fans! ;) Don't mind the shameless 5 Star Rating. Update Schedule - Daily. I still have my main novel Stronghold In The Apocalypse to write so I can't write more. Enjoy reading! :) P.S If you leave a bad review for the story, then make sure it's something that would help in the improvement of the story, because I sure as hell would delete it.

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TFHLv6

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BravoEchoVictorLv4

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IbuprofenLv12

Needs a tonne of work, props to the author and I wish him/her the best of luck. I must say, the first chapter was imho, freaking terrible. It was all over the place, nonsensical mish mash of all the best stuff someone could think of for a modern day mc slapped together into an abomination called Michael. I seriously could not bring myself to read another chapter, I dont say this to discourage the author, it's hard to write! I understand that it isn't easy. This book needs some serious editing and the author needs to just sit and relax a bit, your mc never has to be the everything guy! The best things about characters in novels arent their perfections but their imperfections! All their flaws make them come alive and make your readers empathise with them through their journey! The best thing you can do for your audience is to make them always think about the qualities of our creations that resonate with them! Connecting with them makes your story stand out from the rest of the monotonous garbage that litters this app. You should (If you haven't already but suggesting by the hazardous writing that feels like its come straight from your head to being published) brain storm ideas, the direction you want to go, important antagonists and/or ideas for ones to come! Major turning points in your story that will affect your mc in major ways! These sort of plot points are needed so you can have some sort of direction to love in otherwise it becomes a mess, something that becomes harder to fix the longer you go. Never start the fillings before you've conquered your outline and outlook of where you want your story to go! You may not read this but I seriously hope this helps if you do kind regards

5yr

MilfHunter_KekyoinLv6

Asking for stones for this is an insult to all authors.You should try to write the plot on a piece of paper then see if what you write next actually fits with what is already there

5yr

Once_Upon_A_TimeLv4

It feels very fake and the quality is below average. Sorry, no offence. I read the first few chapters and it was very basic and the articulation was not smooth at all. Even the smallest of details and cause dislike and irritation to the reader. The plot was also not too in depth, it went into the story line so quick that it just doesn't feel right.

4yr

GodharemZLv13

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Hayato_ShinoharaLv10

So I know the author is extremely sensitive in hearing negative reviews, but I have to be honest. As much as the premise does to serve the fans with things they (including myself) would like (such as VRMMO concepts, Romance, Strong powers etc.) It has a very important issue of execution. From the first chapter, I can quote what others have been saying which boils down to it "being all over the place". It tells us what is going on rather than showing, but in a very loose method. It does not keep a focus and ultimately, becomes uncomfortable to read. Each chapter should have a purpose. The *flow* and *transitioning* of each sentence and paragraph should be strong and easy to follow through. What I would advise is for the author to look at *how* other authors write their books. Yes, I say "how" becasue I feel that the writing style needs to change. It can get exhausting, especially if a lot of chapters have been completed. Let's say you learned a lot from other books and finally came up with a better style – it'd take a long time to fix all of it. I understand. However, if that's the case I would get an editor to help you out. There's plenty of authors who would do that in the discord for Webnovel/RoyalRoad. For other works, I'd analyze how Sword Art Online, Rising of the Shield Hero or Library of Heaven's Path wrote their chapters and their style of conveying their messages to their audience. Plot wise, make sure when writing a scene to imagine how the readers will feel about that scene when comparing it to the *previous chapters*. For example, if the main cast fought and won against a guild of people but then suffers against several weaker hunters later on, there should be a reason *why* they are struggling in the very least, or else it will leave them confused. Overall, great job with nearly 3 million views and good luck with the rest! 👍🏻

4yr

Vayne_0688Lv2

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