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GodharemZ
GodharemZLv135yr
2019-06-24 16:15

OH MY GOD THANKS FOR UPDATING !!! IT WAS AWESOME IM REALLY THANKFULL !! PLZ UPDATE AGAIN!! CAN U MAKE HIM FIND SOMETHING OP AND GETS A HAREM??

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SerBlueom
SerBlueomLv5

Harem bad. Unless harem good. Hmmmmmm ... i must go into seclusion to find the answer

Rawr_Kitten
Rawr_KittenLv5

... just by you name alone and the 5 star rating I know the novel is trash thank you for showing me the light god of never being loyal and always treating people like haha toys and never as another person

GodharemZ
GodharemZLv13

Excuse me ? My name ? WAIT NANI ? URE NOT APART OF THE HAREM SECT ???

Rawr_Kitten:... just by you name alone and the 5 star rating I know the novel is trash thank you for showing me the light god of never being loyal and always treating people like haha toys and never as another person
MaxRead
MaxReadLv4

Honestly... the novel is very good. But it just depends on what sort of stuff you like. I would recommend that you read the first ten, maybe twenty, chapters so you can get a feel for it. The mc is very loyal to the woman he loves, well at least from my memory. There’s no harem if that’s what you’re worried about. It’s a good novel you should try reading it.

Rawr_Kitten:... just by you name alone and the 5 star rating I know the novel is trash thank you for showing me the light god of never being loyal and always treating people like haha toys and never as another person
Ibuprofen
IbuprofenLv12

Ok, this changed my mind but you better be telling the truth! Hope you ain't pulling a fast one on us 🤔

MaxRead:Honestly... the novel is very good. But it just depends on what sort of stuff you like. I would recommend that you read the first ten, maybe twenty, chapters so you can get a feel for it. The mc is very loyal to the woman he loves, well at least from my memory. There’s no harem if that’s what you’re worried about. It’s a good novel you should try reading it.
HansTheCool
HansTheCoolLv5

Bruh, where did that come from all the sudden?

Rawr_Kitten:... just by you name alone and the 5 star rating I know the novel is trash thank you for showing me the light god of never being loyal and always treating people like haha toys and never as another person
HansTheCool
HansTheCoolLv5

Bruh, where did that come from all the sudden?

Rawr_Kitten:... just by you name alone and the 5 star rating I know the novel is trash thank you for showing me the light god of never being loyal and always treating people like haha toys and never as another person
conan2366
conan2366Lv10

Amusing

HANSIN
HANSINLv2

lol op harem moment

hexalolaaa
hexalolaaaLv15

Harem always good

SerBlueom:Harem bad. Unless harem good. Hmmmmmm ... i must go into seclusion to find the answer
SerBlueom
SerBlueomLv5

I have concluded, harem is both.

hexalolaaa:Harem always good
Dataaera
DataaeraLv3

😂

SerBlueom:I have concluded, harem is both.
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Ibuprofen
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Needs a tonne of work, props to the author and I wish him/her the best of luck. I must say, the first chapter was imho, freaking terrible. It was all over the place, nonsensical mish mash of all the best stuff someone could think of for a modern day mc slapped together into an abomination called Michael. I seriously could not bring myself to read another chapter, I dont say this to discourage the author, it's hard to write! I understand that it isn't easy. This book needs some serious editing and the author needs to just sit and relax a bit, your mc never has to be the everything guy! The best things about characters in novels arent their perfections but their imperfections! All their flaws make them come alive and make your readers empathise with them through their journey! The best thing you can do for your audience is to make them always think about the qualities of our creations that resonate with them! Connecting with them makes your story stand out from the rest of the monotonous garbage that litters this app. You should (If you haven't already but suggesting by the hazardous writing that feels like its come straight from your head to being published) brain storm ideas, the direction you want to go, important antagonists and/or ideas for ones to come! Major turning points in your story that will affect your mc in major ways! These sort of plot points are needed so you can have some sort of direction to love in otherwise it becomes a mess, something that becomes harder to fix the longer you go. Never start the fillings before you've conquered your outline and outlook of where you want your story to go! You may not read this but I seriously hope this helps if you do kind regards

Hayato_Shinohara
Hayato_ShinoharaLv10

So I know the author is extremely sensitive in hearing negative reviews, but I have to be honest. As much as the premise does to serve the fans with things they (including myself) would like (such as VRMMO concepts, Romance, Strong powers etc.) It has a very important issue of execution. From the first chapter, I can quote what others have been saying which boils down to it "being all over the place". It tells us what is going on rather than showing, but in a very loose method. It does not keep a focus and ultimately, becomes uncomfortable to read. Each chapter should have a purpose. The *flow* and *transitioning* of each sentence and paragraph should be strong and easy to follow through. What I would advise is for the author to look at *how* other authors write their books. Yes, I say "how" becasue I feel that the writing style needs to change. It can get exhausting, especially if a lot of chapters have been completed. Let's say you learned a lot from other books and finally came up with a better style – it'd take a long time to fix all of it. I understand. However, if that's the case I would get an editor to help you out. There's plenty of authors who would do that in the discord for Webnovel/RoyalRoad. For other works, I'd analyze how Sword Art Online, Rising of the Shield Hero or Library of Heaven's Path wrote their chapters and their style of conveying their messages to their audience. Plot wise, make sure when writing a scene to imagine how the readers will feel about that scene when comparing it to the *previous chapters*. For example, if the main cast fought and won against a guild of people but then suffers against several weaker hunters later on, there should be a reason *why* they are struggling in the very least, or else it will leave them confused. Overall, great job with nearly 3 million views and good luck with the rest! 👍🏻

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