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BravoEchoVictor
BravoEchoVictorLv45yr
2019-09-09 16:27

Thank god for this story it made me regain some faith in the 'VRMMO' type its not the bull**** die because of betrayal in a game go back and do all of the secret quests. Its good because even though there is some bull in it there in no excess and it gives reasons for the stupid little things like the fact that he doesn't instantly adapt to his new weaker body or how he has to adapt to the game. Also thank god for no BS harem made out of tsundere famous rich girls just some slow romance. I love the romance aspect of this novel, just the little things that the woman remebers. The MC is alot more fresh than I expected, Being an assasin he doesn't shy away from murder outside of the game but still has enough character development to not just be the typical cold killer type. This novel is a lot of small details put together in weird ways to make strange thing that work very well. The MC isn't some diehard gamer that magicly gets an OP class then sudenly becomes rich and handsome he is a person who uses his skill to help him in the game but isn't constantly in the game, unlike most novels of this type the character spends a decent ammount of time out of the game.

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Endlez
EndlezLv4

"Thank god for this story it made me regain some faith in the 'VRMMO' type its not the bull**** die because of betrayal in a game go back and do all of the secret quests. " Hahahaha, this made me laugh. Can't agree more.

Felix_Neros
Felix_NerosLv13

god -> God

SparkTalon
SparkTalonLv6

This comment made me decide to give this story a chance. Cheers

Endlez:"Thank god for this story it made me regain some faith in the 'VRMMO' type its not the bull**** die because of betrayal in a game go back and do all of the secret quests. " Hahahaha, this made me laugh. Can't agree more.
Yeshey_No4bu
Yeshey_No4buLv2

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Adlet
AdletLv3

I will read this novel because of your review

Ichigo_Kudasaki
Ichigo_KudasakiLv2

I need help, a book aka a novel where the mage or whatever is the best and then one day when walking out of the office after a war he passes out and gets recarnarted as a kid, at age 15 he gets a thing called a lux and goes to military school but he has all his memory he had before so spells and all is fine, he meets a few people but during the exam he didn't take so he goes to rank F class where a teacher trys and uses magic because the kid wanted him to teach but before he does the recarnarted mage holds a gun to the teacher head the teacher stops and then he asked everyone to exit he then asked the teacher y he did that but the teacher trys to use magic and attack him so he shoots him in the leg and after the commotion the friend or aka Jake thanks him for saving him I NEED TO KNOW THE NAME PLS

Kaitoxp
KaitoxpLv4

Hmm I literally read this but I forgot the title cuz it's sh*t😒... I highly recommend it (not to read)😏. *"he died (no! He got murdered) then after that he reincarnated (then sh*t happened) his parents are the one who killed him in his past life🙄😅. . Oww about the lux its a S grade item (and literally he cheated it) I mean he got his memory in his past life so he know to use the lux and cheat it...and the world background is a shit

Ichigo_Kudasaki:I need help, a book aka a novel where the mage or whatever is the best and then one day when walking out of the office after a war he passes out and gets recarnarted as a kid, at age 15 he gets a thing called a lux and goes to military school but he has all his memory he had before so spells and all is fine, he meets a few people but during the exam he didn't take so he goes to rank F class where a teacher trys and uses magic because the kid wanted him to teach but before he does the recarnarted mage holds a gun to the teacher head the teacher stops and then he asked everyone to exit he then asked the teacher y he did that but the teacher trys to use magic and attack him so he shoots him in the leg and after the commotion the friend or aka Jake thanks him for saving him I NEED TO KNOW THE NAME PLS
Shadow1stUmbra
Shadow1stUmbraLv4

the title?

Kaitoxp:Hmm I literally read this but I forgot the title cuz it's sh*t😒... I highly recommend it (not to read)😏. *"he died (no! He got murdered) then after that he reincarnated (then sh*t happened) his parents are the one who killed him in his past life🙄😅. . Oww about the lux its a S grade item (and literally he cheated it) I mean he got his memory in his past life so he know to use the lux and cheat it...and the world background is a shit
Jay_Shah_7043
Jay_Shah_7043Lv2

If you want another vrmmo read supremacy games it's an amazing novel believe meh

LxZero
LxZeroLv2

what about the constant information gaps?

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Ibuprofen
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Needs a tonne of work, props to the author and I wish him/her the best of luck. I must say, the first chapter was imho, freaking terrible. It was all over the place, nonsensical mish mash of all the best stuff someone could think of for a modern day mc slapped together into an abomination called Michael. I seriously could not bring myself to read another chapter, I dont say this to discourage the author, it's hard to write! I understand that it isn't easy. This book needs some serious editing and the author needs to just sit and relax a bit, your mc never has to be the everything guy! The best things about characters in novels arent their perfections but their imperfections! All their flaws make them come alive and make your readers empathise with them through their journey! The best thing you can do for your audience is to make them always think about the qualities of our creations that resonate with them! Connecting with them makes your story stand out from the rest of the monotonous garbage that litters this app. You should (If you haven't already but suggesting by the hazardous writing that feels like its come straight from your head to being published) brain storm ideas, the direction you want to go, important antagonists and/or ideas for ones to come! Major turning points in your story that will affect your mc in major ways! These sort of plot points are needed so you can have some sort of direction to love in otherwise it becomes a mess, something that becomes harder to fix the longer you go. Never start the fillings before you've conquered your outline and outlook of where you want your story to go! You may not read this but I seriously hope this helps if you do kind regards

GodharemZ
GodharemZLv13
Hayato_Shinohara
Hayato_ShinoharaLv10

So I know the author is extremely sensitive in hearing negative reviews, but I have to be honest. As much as the premise does to serve the fans with things they (including myself) would like (such as VRMMO concepts, Romance, Strong powers etc.) It has a very important issue of execution. From the first chapter, I can quote what others have been saying which boils down to it "being all over the place". It tells us what is going on rather than showing, but in a very loose method. It does not keep a focus and ultimately, becomes uncomfortable to read. Each chapter should have a purpose. The *flow* and *transitioning* of each sentence and paragraph should be strong and easy to follow through. What I would advise is for the author to look at *how* other authors write their books. Yes, I say "how" becasue I feel that the writing style needs to change. It can get exhausting, especially if a lot of chapters have been completed. Let's say you learned a lot from other books and finally came up with a better style – it'd take a long time to fix all of it. I understand. However, if that's the case I would get an editor to help you out. There's plenty of authors who would do that in the discord for Webnovel/RoyalRoad. For other works, I'd analyze how Sword Art Online, Rising of the Shield Hero or Library of Heaven's Path wrote their chapters and their style of conveying their messages to their audience. Plot wise, make sure when writing a scene to imagine how the readers will feel about that scene when comparing it to the *previous chapters*. For example, if the main cast fought and won against a guild of people but then suffers against several weaker hunters later on, there should be a reason *why* they are struggling in the very least, or else it will leave them confused. Overall, great job with nearly 3 million views and good luck with the rest! 👍🏻

Vayne_0688
Vayne_0688Lv2
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