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MajestyGloxinia
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2019-02-07 00:35

Hello there fellow Author! I like the premise of your book! There are some grammatical errors in your writing ( past tense to present tense fallacy, misplaced apostrophes next to 's' ending nouns ). However, the thoughts you want to convey are crystal clear! The story is very descriptive ( though need some editing, try adding more onomatopoeia and make sure to separate it from the dialogue ), and I can see good development with your MC! ( Despite reading only 5 chapters ) Keep writing! I hope you improve more, I can totally see your passion for writing and for the story! Good luck!

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Thank you very much! :) i'll make sure to fix the grammar soon!

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