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2019-01-27 02:53

After reading 25+ chapters of this story I can finally get a proper review of it. it starts of quite well, slowly building up towards the peak at around the dungeon part. I love how to story flows and how the character gets op, but it seemed to go too fast for the explained power system in my eyes. HOWEVER, I now feel it will open up much more, giving the character a real 'video game' start. The humor gives me a good chuckle and laugh from time to time, and seeing how the Mc changes (mentally and physically) could have been executed to an even better degree, but was still satisfying. as for the world, I am VERY satisfied by how much detail is being put into the different animals and species of 'Farleng'. The grammar has gotten better, but I still find minor things here and there. I hope to see some progress and development from our Mc and his companion, and romance would maybe ad a sort of balancing element for the story as a whole. Can't wait to see more. (This novel deserves to be much higher than it should be. It it truly is a *hidden gem* in my eyes) Keep it up author!

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god_of_wheat
god_of_wheatLv4

Meant to say "deserves more recognition" hope it gets more attention later on

lets_get_this_rice
lets_get_this_riceAuthor

Thank you very much! :)) Reviews like this help me improvr, and I feel like the next 200+ chapters are going to be better written with the help of some criticism!

HansTheCool
HansTheCoolLv5

Is the mc op good sir?

lets_get_this_rice:Thank you very much! :)) Reviews like this help me improvr, and I feel like the next 200+ chapters are going to be better written with the help of some criticism!
lets_get_this_rice
lets_get_this_riceAuthor

I can promise you, good sir. He starts off like one of those trucks who usually runs other mc's over, and slowly turns into a train on jet fuel. However, beware that there are a couple of chapters in the start made for character development. (4 ish if I remember correctly) Hope you enjoy the story if choosing to delve deeper!

HansTheCool:Is the mc op good sir?
HansTheCool
HansTheCoolLv5

Thanks for replying

lets_get_this_rice:I can promise you, good sir. He starts off like one of those trucks who usually runs other mc's over, and slowly turns into a train on jet fuel. However, beware that there are a couple of chapters in the start made for character development. (4 ish if I remember correctly) Hope you enjoy the story if choosing to delve deeper!
HansTheCool
HansTheCoolLv5

Thank you replying

lets_get_this_rice:I can promise you, good sir. He starts off like one of those trucks who usually runs other mc's over, and slowly turns into a train on jet fuel. However, beware that there are a couple of chapters in the start made for character development. (4 ish if I remember correctly) Hope you enjoy the story if choosing to delve deeper!
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