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Pommona
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2020-07-06 01:16

As a avid Pokémon fan, I loves stories that have monster element in it. This novel answer that need, however it fail in its trainer element. The author try to make his trainer walk in the unique path. The path that normal trainers choose to avoided or failed midway. But the reason that M.C. manage to success is (in my opinion) not logical. His will power is stronger than 90% of the population (who choose the same technique) - because he want to be a champion and the fear he experience in his childhood. Just 2 of these reasons push him ahead of those 90% who fail midway. Unbelievable. I love that he put a great important to his bird, but the first monster can decided a person’s fate. By choosing an extremely low level monster as his first partner, he jinx himself to be just a low level trainer. And what make me feels complicated is that his family’s future is depend on him! His lovely mother and father’s (who are in debt because the invasion of monster horde) - situation could improve a lot if he choose high grade monster (which is available for him because he is a topper in his class) but no, his foundation is bad, his mana is low, his mana absorption rate is also low and he has to purify his mana manually while the other can do it automatically. Too many set back to the point that I have to drop it. But I have to say that their character’s interaction is pretty good. Except when their are sound effect in the scene. Seriously, the siren sound “SIREN SIREN” is lame

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This story has interesting concepts but, the grammar is really atrocious. There are other stories on this site that are even worse then this, however, I'm not going to be nice because of this. I understand that some people keep saying in the comments that the writing quality gets better at ch 18 or around ch 32. In the end I could not drag my self across the floor to reach such chapters. One of the main points I don't understand about the author is why if he has an editor already, just ask him to redo all your previous chapters. The author is dragging away potential readers due to not editing his starting chapters. Point 2. I feel like I'm reading a children's book due to all the sound effects. These sound effects take away from a story unless a child is reading them because most children don't know what most stuff sound like. That is why most children's books have the cow goes "moo" or the sheep goes "baa". It gives kids a 3 in 1 training. Training their vocals, reading comprehension and their understanding of what stuff sounds like. Point 2b. As an ***** with the understanding of the English language and sounds. I feel offended when I see a written sound effect. I know what a sword sound makes when it hits something with different densities. It just irks me because its like the author is saying "This is what it sound like to me and you should believe me." No... I don't believe sirens go "siren...siren" or swords go "slice" like their talking. Even the sound effects are off putting. Point 3: The cultivation is strange. I understand that being Original in concept is what authors should do. However, the cultivation with the steam punk vib (engine) and cultivation just don't mix well. I like the part about the soul-bonding, but, it could have been better executed. Point 4: The animals are puppets as far as I can tell. The start of the novel it shows the personality of the creatures and that was a good start, however, right as the soul binding was completed It was like the creatures them selves don't have their own thoughts anymore. It is more along the line as the people turn them into puppets then project their emotions into their soul-bonded puppet to be more like the host. Point 5: The MC does not have a solid goal. Yes, he wants to be in that championship thing but that does not make him insane about doing the most efficient cultivation training which most people fail at. The reason I do not believe this is due to the fact he lived a very normal life with his family. No sane person would tarnish such a thing. If the story showed he had a desire to be recognized due to certain bad pasts then I would believe it more. There are other points I could point out. But I don't know if the author can even read English so adding anymore would just be a waste of time for me and the reader of this wall of text.

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