Okey to start of the premise of the story got me interested to check this story out. However the first chapter made me want to drop it like it’s hot. But decided to keep at it since you usually need 30-100 chapters in these kind of stories to get a real opinion. Let’s just say that while the writing did get better it honestly went from horrible to really bad and thats with an editor. The story overall is quite good though the MC and his choices are simply mindboogling. For instance a ton of information, settings and background is like how it is often done forced into us in large quantities but when it comes to the MC all rules and logic has no effect. I could probably go on and on about stuff like this but overall the story is decent but the writing is killing it, being similar to google translate or somthing on top of the fact that some words seems to be there simply to add to word count. I do appreciate that it has gotten better but in almost all the chapters it would seem a simple thing like reading what has been written would fix things. Like how in one of the chapters around ch 20 it is mentioned that Ashlyn is eating her dead parents only for the later part saying she’s eating the same diet as her parents.
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i didn't even get to the first chapter. He already had spelling mistakes in his synopsis! From the first sentence!! Sry but no
I really like this type of story premise. but it seems everyone of the novels with this premise have horrible writing or grammar. it's annoying.
The first paragraph of this had me dying of laughter.
