Daydream_Wanderer
This is how you do a system novel. Very enjoyable and the author does a great job setting up the world and the characters before simply throwing the protagonist into the gaming world. Excellent world building, the author paints a picture so vividly of a fictional society in the near future. The protagonist is also a well-rounded character one can feel sympathy for. One who has had a bit of a rough go, losing his parents and floating through life without any real purpose. I look forward to seeing how he handles the gaming world. The story is also very well written and flows nicely, making for an all round enjoyable reading experience. Great effort!
An enjoyable novel you got here. Writing quality. The narratives were clear and nice. Story development. The introduction of the Second life was in-depth and detailed. Along with the items and skills which explained well. Character design. The characters have their own distinct personalities that make them unique to each other. The world background is well crafted. Overall, this book is a great read and definitely going to stay in my collections. Great work author!
My story is about a VRMMORPG with some common traits, but it also has its own characteristics. Because of this, I thought it necessary to describe some of the game mechanics for the readers do not to feel lost. As a gamer myself, I always have a difficult time understanding when a game novel showed numbers that don't make sense so I may have described a little too much about its details. And for me don't bore people to death, I began revising the first few chapters, trying to increase the writing quality and work more on the characters.
Just caught up to the latest chapter. Can't wait for more. Writing Quality: Some grammar stuff. You can understand what is being said. Nothing too jarring, just needs a couple of passes for refinement/tidying up. Updates: Just caught up, so don't know the schedule. But the author seems to keep the readers in the know with Author's notes. Story Development: Standard gaming stuff. New game comes out, MC and friends start playing, dungeons/quests, meet new friends, repeat, etc. Mostly in-game progress, not much IRL progress except for mandatory logouts/rests. Characters: MC seems good. Has some quirks that his friends understand/playfully use against him. He has a history that I would like to know more of. Roommates need more fleshing out. But that maybe due to the MC not wanting to pry into his friends' personal lives. New set of guildmates have been introduces, will see how they mesh with everyone else. World Background: Standard VRMMORPG. Hyper-Intelligent Learning AI. NPCs that look/act real. Different areas/severs for every nation.