Cloki
First of all, the genre it's not my cup of tea, but I have to admit that is a pleasure to read your story. The descriptions are nicely written, the main lead is expressive and the storyline is addictive. Well done! You don't struggle with the language so it's your advantage over the rest (non-English speakers), use it well! All the best!
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The main character is really sharp, yet not too powerful or clever to be relatable. I find this story easy and enjoyable to read due to the fact that the language flows naturally. The central concept is also very intriguing. Everyone loves an underdog story, because there is room for the MC to progress and grow. Great work!
I have a soft spot for systems, as they take you away from daily life and bring you into a world you can enjoy. This story's writing is well done, the main character seems interesting too. As this is only the beginning, I'm excited to see where it goes. Thanks for the story so far, author! Best of luck to you!
The writing quality in itself is good. You can understand the situation of the main character, even the part at the beginning when he was slowly regaining his senses. Every part after that, the rescue and the fight scene were both nice creating an overall wholesome first chapter. I've yet to read the other chapters but from this point I know that it'll be something epic!
I liked how the heroes portrayed differently rather than just "level-up-and-go-all-out-power" type heroes. But here, the heroes are classified based on their field of mastery, such as being an engineer(I think). Now imagine; the engineering department is vast, then blend it with fantasy's concept of system… you get the creative idea, which is strongly analogous to offensive type, defensive type, and healer type found in RPG elements. Or, a programmer went crazy. The main character is indeed well-written, and so, writing quality. You can understand his thoughts and emotional reactions with other characters as well. It's because the narrative is written in first-person POV, which allows you to have an immersive view inside the MC's head. But, it has the limits of not being an omniscient narrator, which puts the mystery of what's the deal with that shade guy. The world background seems to be in the modern era with the mix of medieval-ish atmosphere where they wore outfits such as robes, shields, and weapons like swords and spears. Do they have guns, too? Overall, a great story! And yes, it's an isekai, but give this a try, you won't regret it!
This is great. A nice first pov that makes sense and you can feel the main character and the others as well, I was surprised by this last one. It's pretty hard to keep those two emotions in check so that it doesn't feel one-dimensional. And then the way that the author presented the world didn't feel like an info dump, but you already figured a lot about it. Keep up the good work.
I read the synopsis, and it intrigues me to give it a go, and better than I expected, The story building is superb, The characters are lifelike especially The Main Characters Characteristics can be relatable to a slightly smart person IRL. not too smart like aka. Albert and not too stupid like aka Karens calling the stores manager.. overall its good 5/5. keep up the great work author! Kudos to you!
Reviewed after chapter 6: The Pros: Great grammar and pace World building is well developed and fused into the story The Cons: Characters seem a bit flat and accepting the story without any doubts or panic Characters who die so far leave you without any emotional attachment like cannon fodder Idiotic level 7 All in all it was entertaining so far.
The protagonist was likeable and has his emotions fleshed out. It was very nice reading this novel as I saw potential in this author's work. The narration was splendidly done for the readers to easily read and has its immersion within it. Its charm was very good as I saw the story development was in a good pacing. Overall, a nice read! Gotta recommend this to others!