Reviews of Canceled book ^_^
Canceled book ^_^
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Just don't give up on both your stories and update frequently. Everything else is already perfectly going on. No suggestions as all have been given already by me. I'm perfectly happy with your stories. Well done. Keep writing, TA my friend. I'll support as much as possible. ❤👌
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Story ain't that great. Who wishes for makin boos powers and turns into a useless blob? And when he wakes up the first thing he wanna do is kill someone. Also when confronted with a criminal he forgets he has powers. Haha. It's not the worst I have ever seen but the others I knew were trash from the beginning. This one is disappointing because you take it serious in the beginning so it can be trash just one chapter later.
What a novel should do my mind novels should First 10 Chapters - Draw the users attention and keep it while introducing basic elements. Basically the equivalent of putting something shiny in someone's face. The first 5 chapter completely failed at this the pre new life content was overly dragged out to the point I felt like I was reading a script for a bad reality tv which was pretty jarring because I went in expecting a fantasy novel the wishes were okay with the more interesting one being the Buu powers this was dragged down by the mood set by the previously mentioned point I ended up stopping at this point because this I just had other thing to read that grab my attention more and not enough room for everything on my time table. Fast forward a month later I rediscovered the novel and gave it another try the latter half of the first ten chapter were much better not enough to be great as some parts felt padded or like filler but did a better job nonetheless. Unfortunately I still had other things to read but seeing the improvement I kept in my library where it eventually got buried under other stories. Some time later I noticed a pattern of the author complaing on certain storys about a choice or something and shortly after that story gaining gaining a clearly alt account review that was negative with very little criticism I just waved it off as a coincidence or the author having similar taste to the alt spammer but an author I know ended up mentioning that someone was using an alt to lower his rating so he went digging and thought it was this author same as me so I went this story reviews and find tons of alts with 5 star reviews so it's most likely the author using them.... or a creepy stalker who knows anyways First 25 chapters - The goal is to introduce and build the groundwork for characters and arcs. Nothing bad to say about the character other than feeling fake and forced sometimes not too bad. The arc set up on the otherhand was done pretty messily the author just tried to introduce too many points at once pretty common mistake among fics about composite universe this massive like marvel massive reveals could happen slightly later making them have more impact while characters were built more as that seems to be this storys strong suit the author doesn't copy and paste characters he make them new and unique while also being recognizable. Like all my reviews at 3.5 star has potential and I suggest you read it yourself as you might feel entirely different to I do. ..... Ned is an absolute chad and is clearly the One Above All in disguise
Brilliant story only issues is with the wishes and my description but loving it non the less. Have it explained why Ben is alive ( because mc was in coma Peter didn't think about earning money to impress mj etc so ben wasn't there to be shot) Have mc show up at Tony starks place turn around and do the classic lines about teaming up Have him show up at furys place and explain about the alien invasion and hydra being alivd Have him save - the punishers family, The ancient one Have him start a company with a co named charity for repairs on destruction of fights Have him recruit the villains before they become villains. Example spiderman homecoming villains easily recruitable Non recruitable villains have him kill for example kingpin - in TV shows there are scenes where his group have meetings about daredevil etc could have mc show up and eliminate them all Wipe out the hand or have the hand fight hydra Have him recruit bullseye before avengers so you can have chapter of him and Hawkeye competing. Can tell I think about this alot
