Ibrex2000
Based on reading the first chapter, I can tell that the plot moving forward will be very interesting, especially if you're into fantasy. Its also cool to see that we both have very similar novels; Teenager dies and gets reborn into another world, angels and demons, etc. The only slight drawback to your novel is your English, but that shouldn't hold you back from your book's potential at all.
This was a real fun read. The protagonist is reincarnated in a strange new land and has to battle through some wild adventures. The fantasy setting, sword-play and venturing gave me some great Legend of Zelda vibes. Moves at a terrific pace and leaves the reader eager to continue. I look forward to seeing where the author takes this story later.
The story was nice! another reincarnation novel! This novel still has room for improvements. There were obvious grammatical errors and typos but don't worry! It was like me when I start! I can only say that either nitpick the typos or hire an editor....you will grow as you have one...well the editor will suggest for the betterment of the novel and your writing style will also improve when the editor will guide you like a mentor....all in all your work has potential when edited! Kudos!
Your story has that fine and dandy vibe on it. Although I got a bit lost in the first chapter, maybe because of the long paragraph and dialogues are chunk instead of separating it. But other than that, I find your character amusing and the setting very alluring. I hope you write for more author! Great job! Keeo up the good work.