LinYang
A short and wonderful story with a high quality. I love the author's writing style, it was impressive. The plot was short, interesting to the point it makes me motivated to finish all seven chapters. The pace is smooth, the quality of writing is great. No grammar errors spotted or anything that I know of. Well done author!
That last chapter... This is a wonderfully narrated story, the plot is beautiful and the whole story is unique and amazing. The Author has a magnificent style of storytelling that evokes emotions. The story is very meaningful and something to learn from. I recommend this story! Well done! And if there is a second part to it, you got a fan here :)
This was a really, really great story. Well, it's not perfect, but it does take you in in a tide of emotions. I loved the colorful way the author wrote it. I could easily imagine the scenarios and if this was an anime, I would imagine just how the scenes would transition out. In fact, I think this can be a really great script for an animated short. I'd help out the author in making one if I knew the people who could help out, but sadly, I don't have the connections. On another note, the pacing was absolutely wonderful, and frankly, it's one of the best I've read in this platform. It's not so often people can read anything as filled with humanity and intrigue as this piece. Go on and read it, and find out why I like it so much. (Note to author: Listed below are a few things you can do to improve the piece: -General grammar: usage of commas, cutting down long sentences, using the right punctuations -Chinese Names Issues: Not all your readers know if a Chinese name is meant for a girl or a boy (and your names were a bit neutral too). I didn't realize which characters were male and female until the later chapters. Also, it's kinda weird how they call each other with their full names. I would think some of them might have nicknames. In fact, adding nicknames might make the story even more believable. (Xiao Huai~ Chang'er~, stuff like that LOL I suck at Chinese). -Time, oh, time: You forget to describe the time aspects more concretely. I was frankly a bit confused about when the explosion would occur. And little things, too, like how they suddenly just jumped from the Hua Residence to the library. Fix it up a bit more for coherence. And... that's about it? Improve it more and it can be a masterpiece. Super great job!)
You, the author, have a clever use of words and the way you move them. The scenery and details flow smoothly elegant, and the characters feel more than human enough. The main character's determinism is well implemented. Some scenes can be confusing at first, due to a little bit of lacking context, (especially the ones involving the fox), and sure sometimes the descriptions overextend a little bit. You also like to use the word "and". But nothing critical nor anything that makes the story tedious nor fall dull and flat. This is a solid, smooth work we're talking about. Well done.
What a masterpiece author. You write so well..I really got hooked....👍👍👍 The characters and situations their struggle to live everything is so good. Your grammar is really good...👍👍 Why this is shory story....When MC got dream and his struggle starts, the fox everything is so good...kudos to author...👏👏👏