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2024-05-07 15:07

I feel like when writing a "tragic" story like this wn you need a few special things. A plot that makes sense and can properly explain why all the world is like that. And a mc who either goes to the dark edgy path and tries to stay away from the cast or an mc who actively tries to do the right thing in a wrong broken world. This novel's mc is somewhere along the middle of that and so far he's pretty unlikeable, emotional but stays away from his past relationships, knows about the future yet keeps doing things that are contrary to his safety and his goals. So here we have a half-baked mc who I can't stand reading, the world has also been largely unexplained with little intrigue and mystery. Most info is just dumped to u with little to no explanation.

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I don't understand what you mean by half-baked. unlikeable I can understand. emotional I can understand that as well because he is 15 with severe trauma. is he contradicting himself? yes, I made his character that way, I won't deny that he is lost with no sense of where he should go or do. and about the world, I will start exploring it more in the next arc. anyway, I won't ask you to continue reading it and wait for the MC to get better or likable. thanks for the review 🙂

aceZ0
aceZ0Lv4

half-baked being this mess of a mc, there are moments where he knows he shouldn't do a thing that will bring him negative reprecussions but yet his emotions gets the better of him and he does it anyway

Noob6_writer9:I don't understand what you mean by half-baked. unlikeable I can understand. emotional I can understand that as well because he is 15 with severe trauma. is he contradicting himself? yes, I made his character that way, I won't deny that he is lost with no sense of where he should go or do. and about the world, I will start exploring it more in the next arc. anyway, I won't ask you to continue reading it and wait for the MC to get better or likable. thanks for the review 🙂
aceZ0
aceZ0Lv4

I appreciate the comment lol. You're writing is really good but the plot development is really messy. I feel like i found this story too early, and that I would've liked it more 3 years from now when there are hundreds of chs and mc already having character development. good luck and best wishes author.

Noob6_writer9:I don't understand what you mean by half-baked. unlikeable I can understand. emotional I can understand that as well because he is 15 with severe trauma. is he contradicting himself? yes, I made his character that way, I won't deny that he is lost with no sense of where he should go or do. and about the world, I will start exploring it more in the next arc. anyway, I won't ask you to continue reading it and wait for the MC to get better or likable. thanks for the review 🙂
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