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t3j45Lv511mth
2024-03-29 06:22

I have been observing that length of each chapter is becoming less and less. Hardly one or two paragraphs of contents. Looks like author is trying to just post as less as possible containt daily so he can increase timeline of posting as long as possible. There is no stability in flow of plot, plot twist can work once a while but just using it again and again and keeping mystery for to long will make people loose interest. Only God Oda can keep mystery alive for long.

HP: Magic Punk (Completed)

kamidemond
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367 Chs

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kamidemondAuthor

Ah sorry sorry but chapters uptoo 150 will be like this becuase they are not about MC but the others, I dont wants to but a lot of information about others. People usually dont care much about it anyways.

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Rizki_CaturiantoLv1

It's a great and interesting Harry Potter fanfiction!! 👍😍 It have a great plot/storyline and good english/translation.. The grammar is good too.. I like that MC/Orion not op from start (he even weaker than other First Year when he go to Hogwarts).. I like his power (absorb other magical power/creature to make him stronger).. I also like his pet/familiar Red, is rare to see others phoenix beside Fawkes, hope to see/read Red more in the future.. The story is interesting too.. To see Merlin memory, magic power level, etc.. I like that he train Rune, Magic Bender, etc,, to supplement/protect himself from others (especially bully like Malfoy and his gang).. What make me dissapointed is MC/Orion as reincarnator have future knowledge, but why he doesn't changed many thing (like troll insident, Hagrid dragon egg, etc)?? I understand if he afraid to change so much, but little is fine I think.. And why he join Gryffindor?? If it just to know about the plot, it's failed, he often forget about important event like troll, etc.. He can go to Ravenclaw (he doesn't interest other house) instead, it will make the story more interesting.. Maybe make Hermione and Rose (I like genderbend Harry) join him in Ravenclaw.. Please make them his love interest 😍 Who is Nick Iron?? Can't wait to see his reveal.. Love your story author san.. Keep up the great work 😁👍😍😍😍

1yr
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TheNAlienLv3

A very good book, I definitely want to see the final of this history. Very stable development, a good updating stability and history progress. The history keep you focused and interested with many novelties more than simply the Harry Potter history to explore.

1yr
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Mamdouh_mohamedLv12

All I'm saying is that the novel is wonderful and no one should listen to the negative comments because they all complain about how quickly the MC gains power. They almost want the MC to become the most powerful magician in the world in twenty chapters.

1yr
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Raptor2244Lv14

Reveal spoiler

1yr
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IgnisPrimusLv14

Extremely childish writing, to the point where Wattpad authors look mature. There's not much more to say because anything wrong with this book can just be chopped up to be a middle schooler's first attempt at writing anything other than his homework.

1yr
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SlothBYnatureLv4

Reveal spoiler

1yr
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Omes_7736Lv1

story is terrible mc spends about 90% of the story fixing his magic even though he was a squib. another brain dead "author". storyline was neither interesting or entertaining straight 1/10 stars.

1yr
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FraisierLv6

Mc is super weak and gets bullied all the time.

1yr
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Drifter_dLv1

You are stealing others' work and making audiobooks out of them, then you are shamelessly posting them on youtube as one of your patreon membership benefits. Bro, don't be so shameless. How could you possibly do that without their permission and earn from their hard work? Such a thief.

1yr
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HumbuubLv4

Thr writing is quite bad, unedited and wasn't proofread. The story ain't enticing either, with confusing timelines. Character Design is annoying, the only redeeming feature is there's a dog. I'm not sure about the updates in the long run, seems good so far. World Background is BS. Vampire wizards? arr you freaking kidding me? If vampires could be wizards then Voldemort could easily solve his immortality problem w/o splitting his soul. Also the most famous curse in HP verse reduced to a magic trick. It's Avada Kedavra, not Avra Kadavra.

1yr
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