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Alfiemooon3hCommentedGreat chapter, if a bit short. It's nice to see Harry teaching, it shows how much work he's invested in himself. Chapters like these are great if it's surrounded by chapters that push the story forward. More than 2 (or 3 If you want to push it) In a row and the story progression stagnates.
Ch 279 Chapter 279: Train Express- Alfiemooon1dReplied to BasedDepartmentHQ
but that's not what it says. he explicitly states here that he's scared of death. which contradicts chapter 1.
Yuji, above all, was still a normal person in both lives. He feared death as much as anyone, and after being given a second chance, the last thing he wanted was to waste it by dying. - Alfiemooon4dCommented
Does it matter how it impacts him? regardless of the outcome, Blaise is gonna hate this mother either way. just knock her out and string her some where and be done with it. if she tries to go anywhere near Tracy, destroy her.
Harry felt the woman shiver in fear. So far, the only reason he hadn't reacted violently was because he didn't know how it would impact Blaise. He really needed to speak to the dark-skinned boy and investigate his mother's claims. - Alfiemooon8dCommented
like everyone said, your other characters are rather boring. if Harry isn't competing there's no real reason to read the rest of the tournament
AN: So, the second task is finally on the horizon... As usual please let me know what you think and if you have any suggestions. - Alfiemooon12dCommented
fillers don't necessarily have to be a bad thing, as long as they add something of substance. This filler however, just felt like you took a few snippets from previous chapters and stitched them together. This chapter might as well not have existed because it's done absolutely nothing for the story, world building, character development etc. it's literally a useless chapter. I don't mean to sound harsh, but a chapter like that coming off a high moment ruins the momentum the story had.
AN: I'll be honest, I'm not entirely sure about this chapter. I decided to make it a bit of a filler after the excitement of the previous few ones and leaving myself more time to plan out the next thing. I have a rough outline ready, but I like to divide the content into chapters early on (If you see filler chapters, then that's probably what I'm doing since it's surprisingly time-consuming, but it saves a ton of time when writing the actual chapter…). As usual, please let me know what you think and if you have any suggestions. - Alfiemooon12dCommented
he's saved all the time though?
Harry wasn't used to being saved by anyone. He had always been on his own and had to deal with his own shit. The only time he remembered anyone truly saving him was when Arcturus opposed Dumbledore to become his guardian, and even then, the Black Patriarch had gained a very talented wizard in his corner. - Alfiemooon12dCommented
in what way has she been obvious??
Speaking of Lily, Harry had many conflicting feelings regarding the woman. From all accounts, she was an unstable woman who was easily capable of cruelty if it suited her needs. However, she was also a genius who obviously cared about Harry. He didn't know if that care was genuine or if she was pretending, hoping to achieve something, but he didn't care. The redhead had saved him from Dumbledore without expecting anything else in return… That alone gave her a measure of trust… - Alfiemooon13dCommented
oh come tf on. how tf does somebody write something this contrived. you might as well have a plane in the sky with a banner trailing behind it, the words "Erin is a Titan shifter" in clear view for all to see. they're making decisions based on pure speculation. There's no evidence whatsoever. Also, erwin wouldn't be looking into grisha's death. That'd be the military police.
"But there might be a singular Titan but much smaller. I want you to take your squad and Levi's squad to check the forest. If you see anything unusual, report to me and don't tell anyone," Erwin ordered with a firm tone, getting nods from both of them. - Alfiemooon13dCommented
that's not what he said
I will tell you the Truth - Alfiemooon13dCommented
she's so out of character 😂
A scowl escaped her mouth; why was it so hard to be a normal girl with a normal family. "Will I ever have anyone in my life who truly cares about me?" She asked herself quietly but did not find any answers. - Alfiemooon13dCommented
no need to repeat.
"Annie, you're not speaking much tonight, are you okay? Is everything alright?" Bertholt, one of the boys who inquired, looked at her with a tinge of anxiety. Annie never really spoke to anybody; Pieck was the only fighter with whom she had a solid friendship, but she wasn't with them. - Alfiemooon13dCommentedCh 1 A Truth of Titans
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keep them coming. we missed you😭
A/N: Hope you enjoyed....peer pressured into releasing chaps...but at least its here! - Alfiemooon21dReplied to King_Gluttony
I can see her being a tentative friend maybe, but nothing really familial. Harry grew up too alone to have that desire.
AN: So I decided to get Harry another type of magic to grow into. I have plans for it to synergize well with the rest of his arsenal. However, I'm not really sure how I handled Lily. He's kinda out of options and scared because of the possibility of Ragnarok, so a tentative alliance would make sense. As usual, please let me know what you think and if you have any suggestions. - Alfiemooon23dReplied to SilentSorcerer
I don't think it's forced at all. the diary is just a plot device used to advance the story. it would be forced if Harry found the dairy lying around on the floor outside his home, the dairy was, however, ingrained with the plot so it flowed pretty normally.
AN: So, I decided to expand a bit on the lore and fill in the gaps I left before. I thought about doing it slowly but tbh considering what I had planned, the story would have progressed very slowly... As usual, please let me know what you think because I'm still kinda doubting my decision... - Alfiemooon23dCommented
reminds me of the fic with Axel Hunt. forgot the name, but the premise is very similar.
'You are hounded by the Light and Dark… But I believe you should, at the very least, understand their nature. It all began with a Kingdom, older than recorded history, yet it might live on in Myth. We do not know its true name, but most people call it Atlantis. It wasn't an island like you imagined, but a true kingdom of magic and might. Its mighty king had two sons who vied for his throne. The younger son craved the throne, and so, he used the forbidden arts to pierce the veil between worlds. He was met with a realm of purity and light, that he claimed as his own, giving him magic beyond his wildest dreams.' - Alfiemooon25dCommented
WHAT?!? That's a great twist
The words they held seemed to shock him, 'Hello young Peverell. You seem to have found my diary just as I arranged for you to do. You have a lot to learn and not enough time to do so. So, let's just get started. - Alfiemooon30dCommentedCh 262 Chapter 262: Raven Soaring
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you said he'd be exploring the outside world 100 chapters ago lol, and he still hasn't yet.
This little Family Arc is about to end and we'll start exploring the world outside and its secrets, including many adventures I've long wanted to explore.