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Yack6
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2023-08-17 03:38

I guess my expectations were too high, the author overstepped with the MC and the comedy, he originally wanted the exchange to be sexual, later regretting it, also From showing many unnecessary comedy scenes and the personality of the MC is practically panicking, regretting, being dense, submissive and among other negative things, he did not learn anything in the past. More than 1000 years of training, his title of god of war is too big for him At the beginning I was fine believing that I was going to improve and everything but apparently it is not going to change.

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Over_The_Moon69
Over_The_Moon69Author

there is a difference between learning for a 1000 years and working with that knowledge in real situations for a 1000 years, but I guess that point just went over your head. it was clearly stated he stayed for 8000 years alone, can you imagine what that is like? People were going mad just after 2 years of lock down.But the main point is that, you don't like the Mc regretting his past decision when it is the most normal thing to do when the past decisions bring up problems for you.Also the Mc isn't submissive to anyone if you read properly, at this point you are just throwing negative words together because of one quality which is his denseness.That is something I agree on but the reason for that supposed denseness has been stated multiple times. But I guess that's too much to ask of you since you guys skip the words most of the times and then complain later.Anyway thanks for the review.

Aaron_Vittore
Aaron_VittoreLv4

I think he means that the overall characteristics the Mc shows are in simple term "cowardly". if it was over xxxx years of anything and they come out of it powerful but also "cowardly" it falls under the suspension of disbelief. it's as if character growth becomes null or resilient to change. it can't be to fast if shown or to slow.take naruto for example. in the 4th war when sasuke shows up and says he wants to be hokage, it feels stupid as if it was a mistranslation, and it comes of as disingenuous instead.The Mc comes off as a powerful hermit in the beginning and after a few things he comes off as a man with no spine and cant make his own decisions with out his whipping land lord approval.

Over_The_Moon69:there is a difference between learning for a 1000 years and working with that knowledge in real situations for a 1000 years, but I guess that point just went over your head. it was clearly stated he stayed for 8000 years alone, can you imagine what that is like? People were going mad just after 2 years of lock down.But the main point is that, you don't like the Mc regretting his past decision when it is the most normal thing to do when the past decisions bring up problems for you.Also the Mc isn't submissive to anyone if you read properly, at this point you are just throwing negative words together because of one quality which is his denseness.That is something I agree on but the reason for that supposed denseness has been stated multiple times. But I guess that's too much to ask of you since you guys skip the words most of the times and then complain later.Anyway thanks for the review.
Over_The_Moon69
Over_The_Moon69Author

then he should mention the Mc being cowardly since that is true and the reason for that is also shown. but being cowardly doesn't mean the Mc is dense or submissive, like where is that coming from? if you read you can see that he can definitely see the signs but as you said he is a coward and is scared of his not going as he thought. though sometimes he ignores the signs and plays off as if he didn't notice them.

Aaron_Vittore:I think he means that the overall characteristics the Mc shows are in simple term "cowardly". if it was over xxxx years of anything and they come out of it powerful but also "cowardly" it falls under the suspension of disbelief. it's as if character growth becomes null or resilient to change. it can't be to fast if shown or to slow.take naruto for example. in the 4th war when sasuke shows up and says he wants to be hokage, it feels stupid as if it was a mistranslation, and it comes of as disingenuous instead.The Mc comes off as a powerful hermit in the beginning and after a few things he comes off as a man with no spine and cant make his own decisions with out his whipping land lord approval.
Aaron_Vittore
Aaron_VittoreLv4

I can see your point but also say he is dense. a stupid kind of dense. and feels self defeating for us the readers you know what I mean?

Over_The_Moon69:then he should mention the Mc being cowardly since that is true and the reason for that is also shown. but being cowardly doesn't mean the Mc is dense or submissive, like where is that coming from? if you read you can see that he can definitely see the signs but as you said he is a coward and is scared of his not going as he thought. though sometimes he ignores the signs and plays off as if he didn't notice them.
PsyLoRD
PsyLoRDLv5

Cowardly can also be seen as submissive. he may have put the 'wrong words' but his review was spot on, MC personality is clearly a problem with how OP he is.

Over_The_Moon69:then he should mention the Mc being cowardly since that is true and the reason for that is also shown. but being cowardly doesn't mean the Mc is dense or submissive, like where is that coming from? if you read you can see that he can definitely see the signs but as you said he is a coward and is scared of his not going as he thought. though sometimes he ignores the signs and plays off as if he didn't notice them.
Over_The_Moon69
Over_The_Moon69Author

Well, just because he is OP doesn't mean that his mental state is perfect, and you can't tell me that he isn't acting appropriately for his character setting. Like the main problem is his indecisiveness and overthinking which are aspects he developed thanks to what he went through in the other world and then being alone for over 8,000 years. That is why I am not denying that isn't dense, he is because he can't make up his mind on whether the clues he is getting are real or if is it just him overthinking. Like his wish is to get himself some lovers, and with his state it is tough. Also, at the moment I am talking about the time in the story this review was written, things have gotten good now since there is progress thanks to Mc meeting the women through the shop, and that has opened a path for his development. And I have not written anything that wasn't supposed to happen, I am trying to correctly convey the characters without making them feel too unrealistic. Like how can a human stay normal after he had lived alone for 8,000 years while running for his life at the start forgetting most of his own memories? It is weird that people expect a normal Mc that has somehow not been affected by any of this.

PsyLoRD:Cowardly can also be seen as submissive. he may have put the 'wrong words' but his review was spot on, MC personality is clearly a problem with how OP he is.
Over_The_Moon69
Over_The_Moon69Author

well, I won't deny that he is dense, it is just not the type of dense you are thinking, he has trouble and acts like he doesn't get it because he is unsure if the other party is actually interested in him. Also, he will not be that way for long but you'll need to wait since something like this can't be changed overnight, it'll take a little time as he meets more people through the shop. Every character that has walked into the shop was chosen with that in mind. All of them have their roles which they play very nicely completing the Mc and pushing him further to improve. if you have been paying attention you could see it clearly. And because of my desire to write a properly developed Mc, it is taking time for me to set things properly. Otherwise, I could just improve him simply and he would not be that dense and would flirt with women, but I wont be happy with that since it would destroy the character that I built and it would also make all of the hardships he went to reach that point useless.

Aaron_Vittore:I can see your point but also say he is dense. a stupid kind of dense. and feels self defeating for us the readers you know what I mean?
PsyLoRD
PsyLoRDLv5

I respect your point, but I can't entirely agree with it. YES, I do think 8kyears of loneliness would undoubtedly mess with someone's head, but it would not be in the way you are portraying him to be, indecisiveness originates from such as a fear of failure and a lack of confidence/information, with his OPness both of them are not really a problem, thus his indecisiveness would be nullified in the first chance he got after the 8kyears of loneliness, just imagine how much HUNGER for everything a man like that would not have, and you tell me, all of that can't make him go past his stupid behavior/fears? that's shallow writing/not understanding the human mind. Also, we are not expecting a 'normal MC' we are expecting a GOOD MC (Not morally speaking) but your MC is pathetic, I have read many novels about broken MCS (for x reasons), and I can tell your MC is lacking. "I am trying to correctly convey the characters without making them feel too unrealistic." That's exactly the problem, you are forcing him so much to be x or y, that he is feeling unrealistic, just try to reflect on that.

Over_The_Moon69:Well, just because he is OP doesn't mean that his mental state is perfect, and you can't tell me that he isn't acting appropriately for his character setting. Like the main problem is his indecisiveness and overthinking which are aspects he developed thanks to what he went through in the other world and then being alone for over 8,000 years. That is why I am not denying that isn't dense, he is because he can't make up his mind on whether the clues he is getting are real or if is it just him overthinking. Like his wish is to get himself some lovers, and with his state it is tough. Also, at the moment I am talking about the time in the story this review was written, things have gotten good now since there is progress thanks to Mc meeting the women through the shop, and that has opened a path for his development. And I have not written anything that wasn't supposed to happen, I am trying to correctly convey the characters without making them feel too unrealistic. Like how can a human stay normal after he had lived alone for 8,000 years while running for his life at the start forgetting most of his own memories? It is weird that people expect a normal Mc that has somehow not been affected by any of this.
Aaron_Vittore
Aaron_VittoreLv4

then why is he so old? I mean this in a suspension of disbelief type of thinking. if he was younger then I don't think people would have trouble with it it. but it is the fact that he has everything that would go against being a "dense coward", such as. fighting experience, power, actual wisdom from living life, how humans are inherently when they get older and care less about things. that is why using a young but powerful character would be better than a 1000 years character.

Over_The_Moon69:well, I won't deny that he is dense, it is just not the type of dense you are thinking, he has trouble and acts like he doesn't get it because he is unsure if the other party is actually interested in him. Also, he will not be that way for long but you'll need to wait since something like this can't be changed overnight, it'll take a little time as he meets more people through the shop. Every character that has walked into the shop was chosen with that in mind. All of them have their roles which they play very nicely completing the Mc and pushing him further to improve. if you have been paying attention you could see it clearly. And because of my desire to write a properly developed Mc, it is taking time for me to set things properly. Otherwise, I could just improve him simply and he would not be that dense and would flirt with women, but I wont be happy with that since it would destroy the character that I built and it would also make all of the hardships he went to reach that point useless.
Over_The_Moon69
Over_The_Moon69Author

he lived alone for 8000 years and just trained, all human interactions he has were from his previous life, most of which are gone, the interactions in the world he was sent to wasn't something he would want to remember because it was just hellish. and then he spent the rest of the time alone training. if readers are batching bout even when the information is given I don't know what to say. it is obvious that age alone doesn't make one smart.

Aaron_Vittore:then why is he so old? I mean this in a suspension of disbelief type of thinking. if he was younger then I don't think people would have trouble with it it. but it is the fact that he has everything that would go against being a "dense coward", such as. fighting experience, power, actual wisdom from living life, how humans are inherently when they get older and care less about things. that is why using a young but powerful character would be better than a 1000 years character.
Aaron_Vittore
Aaron_VittoreLv4

then how mentally weak is the mc that he can kill God's, go through hellish training, but mentally can't talk to woman?the stuff you described would be as if Goku was a shy guy around girls but he isn't, Goku is more of a fish out of water type.your MC is worse than shy, it doesn't read well because of his hellish training that at some point should have mentally toughened him at least a little right? That is why a younger less experienced person would work better.

Over_The_Moon69:he lived alone for 8000 years and just trained, all human interactions he has were from his previous life, most of which are gone, the interactions in the world he was sent to wasn't something he would want to remember because it was just hellish. and then he spent the rest of the time alone training. if readers are batching bout even when the information is given I don't know what to say. it is obvious that age alone doesn't make one smart.
Chummy
ChummyLv13

bro not dense or submissive, you fr? you even read your own book?

Over_The_Moon69:then he should mention the Mc being cowardly since that is true and the reason for that is also shown. but being cowardly doesn't mean the Mc is dense or submissive, like where is that coming from? if you read you can see that he can definitely see the signs but as you said he is a coward and is scared of his not going as he thought. though sometimes he ignores the signs and plays off as if he didn't notice them.
Over_The_Moon69
Over_The_Moon69Author

I wrote it I know what I meant when writing more than you. he hasn't been submissive his loteral job is to help the women who come into the shop if he doesn't tall to them with minimum respect then what else will he do? also he isn't dense, he doesn't take a chance on purpose and overthink everything, I am sure you have read till the latest chapter, akeno had to step up herself to make him look at her feelings because he was ignoring it on the chance that it isn't possible.also this is the second time I am seeing you answer me when you aren't even in the convo, what's up with that?

Chummy:bro not dense or submissive, you fr? you even read your own book?
Chummy
ChummyLv13

I'm will not be like them, writing an essay so I can just prove my point to you and you just brush it off, by saying the same thing over and over like he's not dense and submissive when the reality he really is, then say like staff "it's really important for his character" so you can show his "personality" when all he do are for women not even for himself and still denying that? lot of your readers said the same thing, I would really think if I'm the wrong one here then simply apologize If there's only one reader or some complaining about this but no

Over_The_Moon69:I wrote it I know what I meant when writing more than you. he hasn't been submissive his loteral job is to help the women who come into the shop if he doesn't tall to them with minimum respect then what else will he do? also he isn't dense, he doesn't take a chance on purpose and overthink everything, I am sure you have read till the latest chapter, akeno had to step up herself to make him look at her feelings because he was ignoring it on the chance that it isn't possible.also this is the second time I am seeing you answer me when you aren't even in the convo, what's up with that?
Chummy
ChummyLv13

What I mean you brush it off, yes you answered your readers review, but none of them you listen and still holding to your beliefs that your mc is not japanese mc when almost all your readers call him that And you said in your other comments you didn't want mc personality to be cardboard but how your mc act is like that, I wouldn't even surprised if he wouldn't move if it's not plot or his women ordering and act like pitiful to him so he move Don't tell me the one chapter where he helped other people is mc "Personality" Btw I'm reading japanese novel while reading yours, and guess what? personality of your mc is like japanese mc, honestly I couldn't even tell the difference

Over_The_Moon69:I wrote it I know what I meant when writing more than you. he hasn't been submissive his loteral job is to help the women who come into the shop if he doesn't tall to them with minimum respect then what else will he do? also he isn't dense, he doesn't take a chance on purpose and overthink everything, I am sure you have read till the latest chapter, akeno had to step up herself to make him look at her feelings because he was ignoring it on the chance that it isn't possible.also this is the second time I am seeing you answer me when you aren't even in the convo, what's up with that?
Slothful_Player
Slothful_PlayerLv4

Chummy:What I mean you brush it off, yes you answered your readers review, but none of them you listen and still holding to your beliefs that your mc is not japanese mc when almost all your readers call him that And you said in your other comments you didn't want mc personality to be cardboard but how your mc act is like that, I wouldn't even surprised if he wouldn't move if it's not plot or his women ordering and act like pitiful to him so he move Don't tell me the one chapter where he helped other people is mc "Personality" Btw I'm reading japanese novel while reading yours, and guess what? personality of your mc is like japanese mc, honestly I couldn't even tell the difference
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Slothful_Player
Slothful_PlayerLv4

This comment section is so entertaining

Honoured_Writer
Honoured_WriterLv4

Cook him ma boi

Chummy:What I mean you brush it off, yes you answered your readers review, but none of them you listen and still holding to your beliefs that your mc is not japanese mc when almost all your readers call him that And you said in your other comments you didn't want mc personality to be cardboard but how your mc act is like that, I wouldn't even surprised if he wouldn't move if it's not plot or his women ordering and act like pitiful to him so he move Don't tell me the one chapter where he helped other people is mc "Personality" Btw I'm reading japanese novel while reading yours, and guess what? personality of your mc is like japanese mc, honestly I couldn't even tell the difference
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JustSomeRandomNPC
JustSomeRandomNPCLv4

Let ma boi chummy cook!

Chummy:What I mean you brush it off, yes you answered your readers review, but none of them you listen and still holding to your beliefs that your mc is not japanese mc when almost all your readers call him that And you said in your other comments you didn't want mc personality to be cardboard but how your mc act is like that, I wouldn't even surprised if he wouldn't move if it's not plot or his women ordering and act like pitiful to him so he move Don't tell me the one chapter where he helped other people is mc "Personality" Btw I'm reading japanese novel while reading yours, and guess what? personality of your mc is like japanese mc, honestly I couldn't even tell the difference
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Chummy
ChummyLv13

wow I stand really correctly how your mc wouldn't move without plot or heroines, in jjk arc even I'm wrong and I made mistake reading that he really move, but the villains is still alive, its like he didn't move and just watch

Over_The_Moon69:I wrote it I know what I meant when writing more than you. he hasn't been submissive his loteral job is to help the women who come into the shop if he doesn't tall to them with minimum respect then what else will he do? also he isn't dense, he doesn't take a chance on purpose and overthink everything, I am sure you have read till the latest chapter, akeno had to step up herself to make him look at her feelings because he was ignoring it on the chance that it isn't possible.also this is the second time I am seeing you answer me when you aren't even in the convo, what's up with that?
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