I've been stuck on this book's early chapters for a quite long time already. And i think now is the time for us to part ways. The pros : - The mc's backstory is unknown yet he is likeable and understandable on a certain level. - The world is original. - Some might like the rather slow pace . - The mc's reaction to his reincarnation is really realistic . - A promising plot slowly unravels . - The author 's writing quality is above average( the style is not very eye-catching but it manages to keep you intrigued and there aren't many mistakes ( if any) ). - I don't know the chapters' lenght , but i can tell it must be longer than your average 1000 words on webnovel. The cons : - The characters are bland. The Mc is likeable yet somehow , he is uninteresting enough. If i'm being honest , i simply don't care enough about him , even though i know him( i've read 23 chapters already). I think this comes from two facts : First , the Mc doesn't really have any flaw he should work on( egoism , dishonesty...). Him being insecure makes me empathize with him but that's all. I do not feel really tied to him , nor does he seems realistic , since he has no bad side. And second , the mc's personality is melancholic and cold. Contrary to what people think , writing about a cold mc is really difficult , since it's hard to make him engaging. But not only did the author make him cold , he/she also used an omniscient pov , which further distances readers from the Mc. If only he had funny thoughts despite having a cold demeanor, it would have still been fine. But as i said earlier , he is melancholic. So don't expect rejoicing thoughts from him. On another point , i also don't really like how the Mc acted( in the 23rd chapter ) as though Killing was forced upon him. Emir had a choice. He could have let the hitmen go. So i don't understand why he lamented and acted as if it was forced upon him. If he acts in a certain way , he has to uphold his responsabilities. This all whinning time discredited him highly and it was even the final push for me to definetely stop reading this book. All in all , he is not irritating nor engaging. He is fine and just fine. Now for the side characters... They are forgetable( even the Mc's mother and his sister). - The pace is slow. As i said above , the pace is rather slow. And this together with the characters makes the story feels dragging. - I don't really like the book's general vibe . The book's ambiance is the reflection of the Mc : cold and melancholic. It doesn’t change one bit , and this ends up making the whole reading experience underwhelming. Finally , I pray for your improvement author and hope that my honest review does help you.
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First of all, thank you for the review, I really appreciate it, as much as it killed my mood, kek. I really appreciate you pointing out the mistakes and pros so clearly, so thanks for that. I'll now reply to the cons you mentioned. The MC does have flaws, besides the 'insecurity' you mentioned, he has trust issues, he is jumpy, basically a deranged guy. As you said the story is slow-paced, and that's why these sides of the MC aren't shown so early (though a few glimpses were shown in these chapters that you read), he is a hypocrite too, but that's yet to be seen. The 'funny thoughts' are something he shows the more you read, the earlier chapters of the first volume are melancholy because they had to be, his integration into this world won't be sunshine and rainbows, especially at the end of the volume where everything comes crashing down. Now regarding the side characters (Mainly the family), they are normal people, in a weird set of circumstances, I can only ask you to read more so their personalities would show themselves to you, as I'm not one to write about exaggerated people regardless of how it demerits the novel. Lastly, him killing the hitmen, was it a choice? Yes, he could've not killed them, but the MC is smarter than that, he knew he had to do it, so he did, regardless of what happens to his mental state, his promise to protect his new family grades above everything else. You might not see it as him being forced to do it, but Emir does, it's his obligation, and in his eyes, the hitmen forced him to kill them. And yes the world is seen through the Mc's eyes, so you're correct in saying that it's so cold, expect that to gradually change, I can only ask you to read more (at least until the locked chaps,) and see if it stays the same. Once again, thanks for the long review, I appreciate it. It helped bring out a few points to my attention, and I'll keep them in mind in future chapters.
i was hesitant to start this, but your comment convinced me. hope it will be a fun ride.
GoldenStache:First of all, thank you for the review, I really appreciate it, as much as it killed my mood, kek. I really appreciate you pointing out the mistakes and pros so clearly, so thanks for that. I'll now reply to the cons you mentioned. The MC does have flaws, besides the 'insecurity' you mentioned, he has trust issues, he is jumpy, basically a deranged guy. As you said the story is slow-paced, and that's why these sides of the MC aren't shown so early (though a few glimpses were shown in these chapters that you read), he is a hypocrite too, but that's yet to be seen. The 'funny thoughts' are something he shows the more you read, the earlier chapters of the first volume are melancholy because they had to be, his integration into this world won't be sunshine and rainbows, especially at the end of the volume where everything comes crashing down. Now regarding the side characters (Mainly the family), they are normal people, in a weird set of circumstances, I can only ask you to read more so their personalities would show themselves to you, as I'm not one to write about exaggerated people regardless of how it demerits the novel. Lastly, him killing the hitmen, was it a choice? Yes, he could've not killed them, but the MC is smarter than that, he knew he had to do it, so he did, regardless of what happens to his mental state, his promise to protect his new family grades above everything else. You might not see it as him being forced to do it, but Emir does, it's his obligation, and in his eyes, the hitmen forced him to kill them. And yes the world is seen through the Mc's eyes, so you're correct in saying that it's so cold, expect that to gradually change, I can only ask you to read more (at least until the locked chaps,) and see if it stays the same. Once again, thanks for the long review, I appreciate it. It helped bring out a few points to my attention, and I'll keep them in mind in future chapters.
if you'd like a book with a smart mc that isn't cold hearted, id recommend "lord of the mysteries".
Thanks for the recommandation. However , Lotm requires a level of patience that i don't have yet.😭
Firefoxsamurai:if you'd like a book with a smart mc that isn't cold hearted, id recommend "lord of the mysteries".
thats what i thought as well until i started it, now im in to deep and reading the second book😅
Thefantastictouch:Thanks for the recommandation. However , Lotm requires a level of patience that i don't have yet.😭
Okay i'll add this to my library and try reading it.
Firefoxsamurai:thats what i thought as well until i started it, now im in to deep and reading the second book😅
good luck on your journey friend
Thefantastictouch:Okay i'll add this to my library and try reading it.image
Do it then. Also I agree with the LOTM comment, it's the best novel I ever read, same level as 'mother of learning' you might see the influence of them in my novel, tho don't put your expectations too high, I'm just a newbie.
Firefoxsamurai:i was hesitant to start this, but your comment convinced me. hope it will be a fun ride.
