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"Bassor" resembles a word related to vision in Arabic which means "sight" or "perception." "Rāh," means "path" or "road," in Persian. Or at least that’s what I believe. I’m not Persian so I wouldn’t know.

Mate, delete that one star review, he's got no idea what he's talking about. You're doing very well. Way better than most novels. Congrats on that btw. And as for priv, keep the first tier at one coin, it's an easy way to get priv readers. I recommend that you create new tiers soon, either this month or the start of the next. Keep them cheap, so you could get as many priv readers as possible. You need that in the first three months to max out your novel's features and what not. You can obviously change the pricing later if you want. If you're going to create one, prepare for a mass release, because you don't want to keep the non-priv readers waiting too long, otherwise they might give you one star reviews too.

Now that you say that, I can see it. Most Mafia names are pretty cringe indeed. Maybe its because they're in English, they'd probably sound proper if they were in any other language. As for the dialogue, for me it wasn't just the later chapters, it was from the beginning. It's just, the MC, and those around him, use words unexpected from Mafia men. They sound like robots at times, and say words that only sound right when used in exposition. Also, I can relate with the pressure you're probably going through right now. Got my own contract at seven chaps and had to pump them out quick. I managed until now, but I'm still struggling to keep up. In any case, you took it on the chin pretty well, I appreciate that.

Okay, so far, this one is pretty decent, but I really can't with the dialogue. Most are just too unnatural. Unbearable almost. At times it's good, but in others? Not so much. (Maybe it's just me, I don't know.) A lot of the nicknames are downright cringe, same for how some situations play out. In general, it just feels like a kid dreamed this up, thinking that it was how Mafia bosses acted. But, aside from all of that, the story itself is fun and the writing is better than the average novel on WN. It has mistakes here and there, but those are easily ignored. I can see some obvious effort behind this, which makes me root for the author. Good luck TLDR: It's a fun novel that you shouldn't look too deep into. 3.8/5

Thanks for the gift~!