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Benoit_Valtin
Benoit_ValtinLv111yr
2023-05-24 01:55

sorry but the mc announces too much info that he shouldn't have, and in the life of HP there is no job that you learn like magic even there you have to work so his craft is too much to do directly, I drop the story (chapter 30) it's not consistent enough with the world of HP (and the mc is stupid)

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Ankit_Mourya_1249
Ankit_Mourya_1249Lv4

read ahead it gets better and fanfics are meant to be different from canon. I like the Mc.

Kamikaze_Eagle
Kamikaze_EagleLv4

I'm pretty sure the MC is smarter than you.

Benoit_Valtin
Benoit_ValtinLv11

I appreciate the “almost sure” so much 🤣🙄

Kamikaze_Eagle:I'm pretty sure the MC is smarter than you.
Benoit_Valtin
Benoit_ValtinLv11

sorry for not having responded, so you say it's improving, but brother, it was 30 chapters when I gave up xD it's not nothing how many more chapters I have to wait, and I also have to forget all the inconsistencies what did I quote? continuing a story with so many flaws because it ended up being better is not the right answer.

Ankit_Mourya_1249:read ahead it gets better and fanfics are meant to be different from canon. I like the Mc.
ChikinBorger
ChikinBorgerLv4

"and in the life of HP there is no job that you learn like magic even there you have to work so his craft is too much to do directly" That doesn't make sense. Both in that there is nothing in the books or lore that indicates what I think you're trying to say and in that your wording is very hard to comprehend and borders on nonsensical gibberish.

Benoit_Valtin
Benoit_ValtinLv11

79 people seem to have understood, too bad if that's not your case. good night, or day

ChikinBorger:"and in the life of HP there is no job that you learn like magic even there you have to work so his craft is too much to do directly" That doesn't make sense. Both in that there is nothing in the books or lore that indicates what I think you're trying to say and in that your wording is very hard to comprehend and borders on nonsensical gibberish.
ilove_3260
ilove_3260Lv12

If you don’t like it just say that

Benoit_Valtin:sorry for not having responded, so you say it's improving, but brother, it was 30 chapters when I gave up xD it's not nothing how many more chapters I have to wait, and I also have to forget all the inconsistencies what did I quote? continuing a story with so many flaws because it ended up being better is not the right answer.
unknown_00001
unknown_00001Lv3

hmm you're more incoherent than the fanfic itself dude

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