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  • unknown_00001
    unknown_0000111 hours ago
    Replied to _KaNETO

    author, i'm confused, who is the mc?

  • unknown_00001
    unknown_00001a day ago
    Posted

    I am writing this review now because I think the novel has great potential and the first chapters prove it, however, I will update my review depending on the development of the novel, whether in a good or bad way.

  • unknown_00001
    unknown_0000117 days ago
    Posted

    damn just reading the summary hurts my eyes and I don't understand how you were able to translate that without dying author honestly I give 2⭐️ for what you endured

  • unknown_00001
    unknown_0000120 days ago
    Commented

    wow man this is super good, I want you to improve well, the writing is better than the previous chapter

  • unknown_00001
    unknown_0000121 days ago
    Replied to MIGHTY_ALPIO

    hey man when are you gonna start your Reborn in Novel's Extra as Shadow Monarch fanfiction

  • unknown_00001
    unknown_0000121 days ago
    Commented

    Je ne sais pas si c'est juste moi, mais ce chapitre est trop embarrassant tout comme le prologue, je ne sais pas non plus si tu es nouveau ou non, mais tu dois améliorer ton style d'écriture

  • unknown_00001
    unknown_0000121 days ago
    Posted

    your novel starts well, a typical beginning of an MC who possesses a waste and then becomes stronger, but that's not the problem here, it's in the construction of the world, the development of the story and the characters. 👉🏻 also there is no limit neither for the levels they can reach nor for the restrictions at the portal for those who can enter or and it is very chaotic 👉🏻 another thing that would have been good is the MC class, if you only stuck to the domination class, I mean the story loses its flavor if everything is easy for MC, especially if he can beat someone level 60 or above him without any real challenge, you can tell me that he nerfed the leveling side but he can fight very well, in short what I mean is you could have stuck to the domination class by adding affinities to the class and lowering his strength level too so that at least he can think healthily instead of his stupid and arrogant behavior, something that shows the lack of development of his character other readers may find this novel good , those who are older on the platform will immediately see the flaws in your novel. As for your top 1 status, the other novels that are in the same top 1 category are crap if I may say so.

  • unknown_00001
    unknown_0000123 days ago
    Commented

    the beginning is good, the only problem is the spelling mistakes especially if you use google translate. however there are applications made for that but I don't know if there are free ones (app for spelling), the google translate problem can be avoided if you use punctuation well.

  • unknown_00001
    unknown_000012 months ago
    Replied to ZackDKaizo

    you don't need to apologize, it's just my opinion, others will find it good and others won't, but if you can allow me to suggest an idea to you, given that you are not yet advanced, I think that you are giving him a character development, of course far from his current personality, because I find him to be a true cut of Deku but more optimistic, if you see what I mean there is also the problem of dialogue which are sometimes very kissable, you the fact that the MC reveals all his secrets