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EddictedLv51yr
2023-05-28 03:13

The author tried to write something absolutely amazing but in trying to do so he turned this into a mediocre one. The story seems to be inconsistent and it seems like the author didn't really plan ahead(example - soul sizer points turned from 100 to 1000 just to support the authors new declaration that ouroboros wont let a lesser bloodline exist, and I think the author added this point because he might have thought that soul of light and darkness are too burdensome or redundant or overkill to have). A good world build is necessary to make a good story but overdoing it can also ruin the story. This author overdid to the extent that the story is going at a sluggish pace. Moreover worldbuild generally means describing the cities, environment conditions, their culture, art, architecture, that worlds history etc. but this story's over extensive world build (or gibberish to put it simply) is mostly focused on the unending philosophical pondering of the MC rather than the aspects I stated above

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BRICKTRADERAuthor

Thanks for the review and I really appreciate the time you took to pen your thoughts, it may have been a typo, but soul seizer was always meant to be 1000, and if you read a little further, I hope you would see the reason why I kept the world building vague. I promise it serves a purpose. Hint: Imagine being inside a stuffy room for years only to open the doors to see you are on top of a mountain. For the gibberish musings, I understand I can be a little too enthusiastic when I write about his thought, essentially he is trying to understand his new life and I could easily go the comfortable webnovel path and explain everything in one sentence, but I think that would kill any chance for you ever re-reading this story after its done, (many of my plot point would only be fully appreciated when you read the story one more time–A risky move, but I want to grow as a writer), essentially that's what makes books different from movies or any other entertainment medium. You get to understand a scene in more than three dimension.

The_ColIectorLv4

Well the author did say that stronger bloodlines wouldn’t l weaker bloodlines exist in the same body. Since both bloodlines are powerful, none is able to get rid off the other one.

Gear5thLv12

Bro try reading this novel its freaking good, if you won't like it its ok👍 title: (Naval gacha System: it's time to monopolize the seven seas) 🔥 (coz i am poor & can't support him/her by buying a chapter with a coin) 🥹

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BRICKTRADERAuthor

Hi everyone, Author here. I am not comfortable giving reviews on my own work, it feels a lot like self adulation to me (Which I've always likened to narcissism.) Anyways let's go to the reason why you are here. The book. Er... no, the review for the book. The Primordial Record is not a fast paced book. But because it's a web novel, I tried to skim across overly long descriptions, to make a tighter story. I may have failed, you my dear readers would be the judge of that. Based on the settings of my book, which is Transmigration. The MC is swamped in a flood of deceit and lies. And because I made him overpowered, I had to balance that with really dangerous enemies, that understands the capabilities of the MC and make every confrontation a deadly affair. I abhor weak and stupid antagonist. From the start he would be placed in a unfavorable position and he would need every wit and cunning he possess to win. I would not be leaving obvious hints, I left many Setups and I trust my readers to figure them out as they proceed with the story, for I am a fan of puzzles, and if you stick around long enough, I hope you would be surprised by the Payoffs. The Primordial Record may not be an easy book to read, and I sincerely apologize for that. I left details of certain abilities and the world itself vague, as it is a huge world and I dont like info-dumps. There are many horrifying themes presented inside and spoilers warning. I am willing to kill off characters, if it would serve the story. I hope you enjoy this world. Because ultimately that is the reason I write. For your pleasure. Bricktrader.

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