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Heng_Xiang
Heng_XiangLv41yr
2023-10-12 01:15

The chapters are too wordy. The essence of what the author is trying to convey is lost within irrelevant, long and wordy sentences which could have been phrased in a much better way.

The Primordial Record

BRICKTRADER
4.4
1288 Chs

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Gear5th
Gear5thLv12

Bro try reading this novel its freaking good, if you won't like it its ok👍 title: (Naval gacha System: it's time to monopolize the seven seas) 🔥 i'm just recommending it i just want to support this author just by letting other readers to read it and give it a try 🥰 (coz i can't support him/her by buying a chapter with a coin)😅🥹

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BRICKTRADER
BRICKTRADERAuthor

Hi everyone, Author here. I am not comfortable giving reviews on my own work, it feels a lot like self adulation to me (Which I've always likened to narcissism.) Anyways let's go to the reason why you are here. The book. Er... no, the review for the book. The Primordial Record is not a fast paced book. But because it's a web novel, I tried to skim across overly long descriptions, to make a tighter story. I may have failed, you my dear readers would be the judge of that. Based on the settings of my book, which is Transmigration. The MC is swamped in a flood of deceit and lies. And because I made him overpowered, I had to balance that with really dangerous enemies, that understands the capabilities of the MC and make every confrontation a deadly affair. I abhor weak and stupid antagonist. From the start he would be placed in a unfavorable position and he would need every wit and cunning he possess to win. I would not be leaving obvious hints, I left many Setups and I trust my readers to figure them out as they proceed with the story, for I am a fan of puzzles, and if you stick around long enough, I hope you would be surprised by the Payoffs. The Primordial Record may not be an easy book to read, and I sincerely apologize for that. I left details of certain abilities and the world itself vague, as it is a huge world and I dont like info-dumps. There are many horrifying themes presented inside and spoilers warning. I am willing to kill off characters, if it would serve the story. I hope you enjoy this world. Because ultimately that is the reason I write. For your pleasure. Bricktrader.

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DeepChiken
DeepChikenLv14

Definitely one of the best novels on here, amazing posting speed and unique powersystem. This book has realms of strength that normally would be the end of other books, it gets there pretty fast but doesnt seem rushed. Love it

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Drew_Sansone
Drew_SansoneLv15

Novel starts off in a rush where nothing makes sense really with a lots of twists out of the norm. I stuck with it because of all the recommendations and reviews, and it all ties into this master-crafted story where everything has started tying in. As of chapter 460 I can say I absolutely am more than excited to see where this journey goes.

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Dexter_Sled_1111
Dexter_Sled_1111Lv13

Nigerian authors are very few... it's nice to know we're not alone. Nice story bro.

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lordlighthh
lordlighthhLv4

Details which make no sense. Using words on words, power levels which have never been introduced . Contrasting yourself within the first 14 chapters ( magic can't stay hidden , children show reality bending power) then in the next few chapters oh only noble bloodline can use supernatural . oh legendary get 150 year lifespan , legend is first level but of domain , but in next chapter nop only specific domains can make you live longer .... Ranks have never been introduced, the writing style is annoying and the mystery feels forced instead of having anticipation I am cringing at how hard the author is trying and failing at iy

1yr
OVERKILL
OVERKILLLv14

only read upto 4 chapters because of daily recommendation .too much unnecessary details . boring or my mood is just off. first 3 chapter were about surrounding object like corpse , luxurious doors , big expensive mirror etc. i couldn't focus because situation of MC doesn't seem tiny bit desperate or serious so why useless details .

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eudine
eudineLv13

I love the way you write! The story is well-paced, and I like how the scenes are written and described. Especially how you described what the protagonist was feeling along with the well-written dialogue, this is a good read! Keep it up! ^^

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FF_AIM_BOT
FF_AIM_BOTLv3

worst novel just info dump.i have read 100 plus chps but still just info dump you can't even get the basic outline of the world just don't waste your time like me .

1yr
FatEmperor
FatEmperorLv11

I really want to like it. It has the necessary ingredients, but it falls flat because the chef doesn't know what to do with them. There are so many words in every chapter, but nothing of importance is being said. I read 16 chapters and I've found myself skimming through most of it, as it was mostly pointless nonsense. And when there's suddenly something interesting going on, the POV suddenly switches to some random dude and his sister, or some random dudes drinking and talking about something. Don't know what, I just skipped past the whole thing. I don't think I'll continue reading past the first 20 chapters, unfortunately. It's all a convoluted mess and nothing makes sense. Driving the reader mad with gibberish is a great way for your readers to immerse themselves in your novel, but it's not for me.

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