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A_1_7888Lv31yr
2023-08-16 06:08

I really wish a few things were different. I like this novel, but it sorely lacks detail. Every arc doesn’ get fleshed out enough. Like when first visiting the origin native city I wish it had a few whole chapters on the atmosphere, markets, shops, people and shopping and trading things. Then a whole arc on the different market oppor tunities that the city and the human world that he can use to gain money and trade deals. The worst part of the novel is the mc’s subjects, every single detail that would build up a relationship or positive image of the lord is missing.. instead it’s all the lord is soo nice (just continually says this in differnt ways, instead of mc doing something that would actually make it true) Him selling his perfectly extracted stuff to only one shop was senseless. I really wish it had a arc about shopping around and making trade deals, instead of just one shop and no negotiation. This gets even worse though with the selling of blueprints, which gets worse again with the “negotiation” that happens for the first time. Honestly though it’s a perfect framework to write an amazing book, but it’s missing the details and context… rather just writes summaries for most things.

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A_1_7888Lv3

Or he gave the elves soul traits, but never told us what they were. Or when an army with tier 3s coming he didn’t inquire how much a soul trait could be sold for

HideousGrainAuthor

The problem about details is one particular fact; Most readers on WN hate it when I start fleshing out everything as I desire. The chapters will be twice the length(even though I already write long chapters), and the content won't change a lot. In fact, I will have to write a lot more chapters for the same story, which annoys many readers since they will have to pay a lot more for the details. Of course, it's understandable and I would love to write more details as well. But there is nothing I can do if the market is clearly in favor of fast-pace and less details in exchange for more story.

TsetthLv14

Jeez, this is so true

HideousGrain:The problem about details is one particular fact; Most readers on WN hate it when I start fleshing out everything as I desire. The chapters will be twice the length(even though I already write long chapters), and the content won't change a lot. In fact, I will have to write a lot more chapters for the same story, which annoys many readers since they will have to pay a lot more for the details. Of course, it's understandable and I would love to write more details as well. But there is nothing I can do if the market is clearly in favor of fast-pace and less details in exchange for more story.
BL00DYLv4

xD hahah so you are that kind of author. Having no talent but still trying to profit from young inexperienced people who can't even tell that MC is dumb and then put a blame on readers that the book is bad. No wonder each of your books became trash after 100chapters.

HideousGrain:The problem about details is one particular fact; Most readers on WN hate it when I start fleshing out everything as I desire. The chapters will be twice the length(even though I already write long chapters), and the content won't change a lot. In fact, I will have to write a lot more chapters for the same story, which annoys many readers since they will have to pay a lot more for the details. Of course, it's understandable and I would love to write more details as well. But there is nothing I can do if the market is clearly in favor of fast-pace and less details in exchange for more story.
UalerLv3

Someone was angy

BL00DY:xD hahah so you are that kind of author. Having no talent but still trying to profit from young inexperienced people who can't even tell that MC is dumb and then put a blame on readers that the book is bad. No wonder each of your books became trash after 100chapters.
dipshitLv3

huh? how did you even arrive in that conclusion?. did you even read it properly?

BL00DY:xD hahah so you are that kind of author. Having no talent but still trying to profit from young inexperienced people who can't even tell that MC is dumb and then put a blame on readers that the book is bad. No wonder each of your books became trash after 100chapters.
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NehodeLv2

I don't care about Michael Fang ir his territory. The author didn't manage to make me care about the MC. The story was enjoyable for a while even if it wasn't the greatest but at some point I realized I never was invested in the characters and so I stopped reading after 300 chapters.The author never gives information until it's too late. It's like he didn't have an idea in mind but kept writing and when he made a decision he gave us the information out of the blue.One example is the MC's family. His parents disappeared and we don't know why but we learn hundreds of chapters later the MC knew all along why. It was just never shared with the reader and we thought there was some mystery but no.Another one is the way the author nerfs MC to make him struggle. It was never explained why he was slow in cultivation until the author gave us the information. Information which is widely known and his teachers could have told him but same thing, the information was shared when the author thought about it, it wasn't something secret or anything so why the wait?I feel like the author isn't sure of hiw his story will unfold so he describes nothing.MC made plans with people and he has insightful ideas. We don't know the plan and what MC's ideas are.His territory gets bigger and better but no details about his territory. We don't know how his people live, what's around it and who manage it when MC is away. It should be the maid but she is also busy with fighting monsters. 20000 people in his territory, he is away often and apparently there is no governing body.Too many things are so vague, secondary characters aren't developed and like always, MC has a very short time to save the day. I will remove the novel from my library.

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