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YogsaLv41yr
2023-06-16 14:58

I was really liking the story but I gets downhill very fast after chapter 40. Around chapter 70, author added a forced "face slapping scene" of 5 chapter long. Like why? The most interesting part of the story is the origin expanse. But Author is spending less time on it.

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IseeyouLv15

It’s not forced though? He was getting bullied by the entire school basically and he showed up and got his revenge. Plus he gets tons of good loot for it so it was worth it.

HideousGrainAuthor

Yogsa, it looks like you didn't read the novel thoroughly. That's fine tho. You are free to leave if you don't understand the necessity of certain events, and the meaning of character growth

hero4hireLv11

isnt that exactly why its forced? Author set up the whole scnerio for the sole purpose of 'face slapping' which completely felt out of line from storyline. I mean its his story he can do what he want, he can even wake up tomorrow and give mc laser eyes and monster pp with a ✌️"valid" ✌️ reason but doesnt mean readers are gonna accept it.

Iseeyou:It’s not forced though? He was getting bullied by the entire school basically and he showed up and got his revenge. Plus he gets tons of good loot for it so it was worth it.
IseeyouLv15

Nah, if you look at it like that then every single scenario is forced in every single novel. You seem to be upset about the so called ”face slapping” which is okay but that doesn’t make the novel bad.

hero4hire:isnt that exactly why its forced? Author set up the whole scnerio for the sole purpose of 'face slapping' which completely felt out of line from storyline. I mean its his story he can do what he want, he can even wake up tomorrow and give mc laser eyes and monster pp with a ✌️"valid" ✌️ reason but doesnt mean readers are gonna accept it.
TsetthLv14

Perhaps the word you meant to use isn't 'forced' here, but rather the payoff(via face slap) doesn't seem worth the build-up to you... btw I'm just passing by I haven't read the novel yet...

YogsaLv4

Face slapping is not bad but face slapping that is stretched for several chapter makes the story boring. Like I was hyped that 'now the barrier is gone, how will Mc expand his territory or explore the jungle or what new subject he will summon etc.' but all hype was drowned by the very long scene. I agree those classmate had it coming but I find those hatchlings and war schemes more interesting.And the reason I called it forced because the Mc was more composed and calculative when he killed 7-star hero or destroyed the 1-star territory and here, he was easily triggered when the boy unintentionally fired arrow in his direction. Bro, the elves fired many arrows at you. Why don't you go and fight them if you don't like people firing arrows at you.

Iseeyou:Nah, if you look at it like that then every single scenario is forced in every single novel. You seem to be upset about the so called ”face slapping” which is okay but that doesn’t make the novel bad.
IseeyouLv15

Your right. It definitely could have been done in a better way.

Yogsa:Face slapping is not bad but face slapping that is stretched for several chapter makes the story boring. Like I was hyped that 'now the barrier is gone, how will Mc expand his territory or explore the jungle or what new subject he will summon etc.' but all hype was drowned by the very long scene. I agree those classmate had it coming but I find those hatchlings and war schemes more interesting.And the reason I called it forced because the Mc was more composed and calculative when he killed 7-star hero or destroyed the 1-star territory and here, he was easily triggered when the boy unintentionally fired arrow in his direction. Bro, the elves fired many arrows at you. Why don't you go and fight them if you don't like people firing arrows at you.
ChaossinLv14

Maybe expand your patience a little 🤷‍♂️

Yogsa:Face slapping is not bad but face slapping that is stretched for several chapter makes the story boring. Like I was hyped that 'now the barrier is gone, how will Mc expand his territory or explore the jungle or what new subject he will summon etc.' but all hype was drowned by the very long scene. I agree those classmate had it coming but I find those hatchlings and war schemes more interesting.And the reason I called it forced because the Mc was more composed and calculative when he killed 7-star hero or destroyed the 1-star territory and here, he was easily triggered when the boy unintentionally fired arrow in his direction. Bro, the elves fired many arrows at you. Why don't you go and fight them if you don't like people firing arrows at you.
DaoisttwG3qWLv1

If you were to erase the fillers there would be less than 400chapter! So mean!!! Do you want to make the author unemployed? I'm a fan! He a the best crook ever

BL00DYLv4

This novel is bad and bad reviews are deleted/hidden.

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TheWorthyOneLv14

Understandable why he deleted it

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BL00DYLv4

You dumb?

TheWorthyOne:Understandable why he deleted it
CloudSmokeLv5

You shouldn't delete any review. People should have the freedom to decide what and how they review something just because you get a little upset doesn't mean it's right to remove reviews if you want good reviews and don't want bad reviews. Just write a good story, plain and simple. If you want examples of that, just look around WebNovel.

HideousGrain:Yogsa, it looks like you didn't read the novel thoroughly. That's fine tho. You are free to leave if you don't understand the necessity of certain events, and the meaning of character growth
HideousGrainAuthor

WN deletes most reviews automatically if the reviewer adds certain words/catchphrases. I only delete low-star reviews without like 1-star reviews without any critique. 1-star + emojis is a valid delete imo. if you think differently that's fine tho.

CloudSmoke:You shouldn't delete any review. People should have the freedom to decide what and how they review something just because you get a little upset doesn't mean it's right to remove reviews if you want good reviews and don't want bad reviews. Just write a good story, plain and simple. If you want examples of that, just look around WebNovel.
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BL00DYLv4

xD WN might be automatically deleting some but mostly you can put in 1000 curses and it still wont be deleted. It still doesn't change a fact that you alone are deleting most of reviews below 3stars. What can i do 😌 a trash will be a trash and no matter what I do it won't change itself. Truly a waste(In both senses xd).

HideousGrain:WN deletes most reviews automatically if the reviewer adds certain words/catchphrases. I only delete low-star reviews without like 1-star reviews without any critique. 1-star + emojis is a valid delete imo. if you think differently that's fine tho.
CloudSmokeLv5

You consider it a valid delete, but I don't consider any delete valid. I don't agree with censorship at all and that's what it is it really just censorship. I really don't have that many problems with your story. I think it's a great story. I think it is mostly well written, but there's a pretty severe problem with your main character and his decision-making at least until I get better down the line, but I'm not gonna be here for that, unfortunately

HideousGrain:WN deletes most reviews automatically if the reviewer adds certain words/catchphrases. I only delete low-star reviews without like 1-star reviews without any critique. 1-star + emojis is a valid delete imo. if you think differently that's fine tho.
CloudSmokeLv5

* at least up until where I read it could get better down the line

CloudSmoke:You consider it a valid delete, but I don't consider any delete valid. I don't agree with censorship at all and that's what it is it really just censorship. I really don't have that many problems with your story. I think it's a great story. I think it is mostly well written, but there's a pretty severe problem with your main character and his decision-making at least until I get better down the line, but I'm not gonna be here for that, unfortunately
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NehodeLv2

I don't care about Michael Fang ir his territory. The author didn't manage to make me care about the MC. The story was enjoyable for a while even if it wasn't the greatest but at some point I realized I never was invested in the characters and so I stopped reading after 300 chapters.The author never gives information until it's too late. It's like he didn't have an idea in mind but kept writing and when he made a decision he gave us the information out of the blue.One example is the MC's family. His parents disappeared and we don't know why but we learn hundreds of chapters later the MC knew all along why. It was just never shared with the reader and we thought there was some mystery but no.Another one is the way the author nerfs MC to make him struggle. It was never explained why he was slow in cultivation until the author gave us the information. Information which is widely known and his teachers could have told him but same thing, the information was shared when the author thought about it, it wasn't something secret or anything so why the wait?I feel like the author isn't sure of hiw his story will unfold so he describes nothing.MC made plans with people and he has insightful ideas. We don't know the plan and what MC's ideas are.His territory gets bigger and better but no details about his territory. We don't know how his people live, what's around it and who manage it when MC is away. It should be the maid but she is also busy with fighting monsters. 20000 people in his territory, he is away often and apparently there is no governing body.Too many things are so vague, secondary characters aren't developed and like always, MC has a very short time to save the day. I will remove the novel from my library.

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