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VeganMaster
VeganMasterAuthor2yr
2022-06-22 03:47

Cough cough... The author is here to shamelessly review his own work, nothing to see here, keep scrolling. >.> Btw, Enel's facial expressions are cracked up

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Tommorow
TommorowLv11

Xequalcross
XequalcrossLv4

Yup. There it is.

Tommorow:
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Ryofu
RyofuLv11

#NoHarem or #Harem?

VeganMaster
VeganMasterAuthor

Undecided, but it's most likely a #NoHarem

Ryofu:#NoHarem or #Harem?
BreezyNovels
BreezyNovelsLv5

Whose the Romantic Interest?

VeganMaster:Undecided, but it's most likely a #NoHarem
VeganMaster
VeganMasterAuthor

Still rather undecided, but the story is still rather early. I had plans for Nico Robin, but there are plenty of characters that could work

BreezyNovels:Whose the Romantic Interest?
Ballad
BalladLv5

Robin would work they even have same facial expressions.

VeganMaster:Still rather undecided, but the story is still rather early. I had plans for Nico Robin, but there are plenty of characters that could work
BAD_MAN
BAD_MANLv12

Ballad:Robin would work they even have same facial expressions.
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SufferJustLikeMe
SufferJustLikeMeLv4

Author, I think there is this manga or something that told us about Enel going to the moon(?).

SufferJustLikeMe
SufferJustLikeMeLv4

Are u gonna do something about that or nah?

SufferJustLikeMe:Author, I think there is this manga or something that told us about Enel going to the moon(?).
VeganMaster
VeganMasterAuthor

yeah, it's said that he set off for the moon after Luffy beat him up

SufferJustLikeMe:Author, I think there is this manga or something that told us about Enel going to the moon(?).
Baldysalino
BaldysalinoLv13

Nah, way too many ff with her as fl.

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xlvlx
xlvlxLv4

Lol no way. Every one piece ff has robin and the author says too many boa han as fl when there’s like close to non

Baldysalino:Nah, way too many ff with her as fl.
Baldysalino
BaldysalinoLv13

if you say there's close to none boa fl then you simply haven't read enough one piece ff

xlvlx:Lol no way. Every one piece ff has robin and the author says too many boa han as fl when there’s like close to non
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

Well im fine with either Harem or No harem. Personally the once i want are either Robin or Hancock. As long as its either of thise im good whether its just one of them and its bo harem or both of them and harem.

VeganMaster:Undecided, but it's most likely a #NoHarem
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

Well Nico Robin is great. What other choices are you cobsidering?

VeganMaster:Still rather undecided, but the story is still rather early. I had plans for Nico Robin, but there are plenty of characters that could work
Randomguyno1
Randomguyno1Lv6

Nah there are more ffs with Nami and Robin as FML. There are not many ffs with Hancock as FML.

Baldysalino:Nah, way too many ff with her as fl.
Sticky_Finger
Sticky_FingerLv6

is it a kingdom building ?

VeganMaster
VeganMasterAuthor

I plan to have elements of that sometime later in the story, but rn it's not

Sticky_Finger:is it a kingdom building ?
Venerable_Far
Venerable_FarLv11

robin or yamato are the best female characters in OP

VeganMaster:Still rather undecided, but the story is still rather early. I had plans for Nico Robin, but there are plenty of characters that could work
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VashuRajput269
VashuRajput269Lv14
MLakuru
MLakuruLv4

It's amazing how fanfiction authors can still screw up a story even though they have a complete world and character list that they can copy and take inspiration from the original. You literally have a huge world that you can use for your story but you shrunk it down and half assed it because either you're lazy or you really don't care or try writing a serious story. Lets also not forget how bad of a character you made Enel turn out to be and how overpowered he is. You made any and all forms of conflict obsolete simply because Enel can probably just beat and kill everyone in the story. The characters have had hardly any interactions between each other and there is not depth to any character so far and if there is you did a poor job at it. Simply put, the characters are boring, hollow dolls that I don't care to remember about. The plot is pretty much nonexistent. I truly don't know what or if there are any kind of story being told here. Some nobody gets reborn as Enel. We don't get any sort of development for him so we can't like or care for the character. Not just him(but mostly him) we don't have any plot or story or any details for anything thats going on. You just created some characters and threw them into a poorly made one piece world. I dont know what the goal and motivations of the character are. Whether he has dreams, likes, dislikes, you know core things that make people feel alive? tldr- Nobody gets reborn as Enel in one piece then proceeds to train... and find even better ways to train... Thats it. No one expects fanfiction to be good and your story can be added to the pile of mediocre fics that prove even more that fanfiction authors dont know what they are doing and clearly need to respect the world more. At least your story doesnt have the typical harem, where every girl falls for mc... or it? Wouldnt suprise me if you start thinking with your lower half and turn this into another pokemon collector.

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