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Bob_Uchiha_XD
Bob_Uchiha_XDLv42yr
2022-08-06 08:36

The development of the story revolves around Luffy, he is the main character of the fanfic because the supposed main character is a fanboy of Luffy. In the first few chapters MC meets the "straw hat" crew. Furthermore, he tells them and other characters that he is a reincarnation, specifically stating that this is not his body. Since he met Luffy it could be seen that MC is Luffy's SiMP, which could be considered something... *cough* gay *cough*. MC joins the navy, faking his identity but... Luffy and all his crew know who he is. MC lets Nami go with the sky island gold, tells Robin about the stone; and the worst of all is that MC and author claim that he is a genius.

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VeganMaster
VeganMasterAuthor

How strange... Nothing that you said was actually right. You've either skip-read everything and assumed everything about the story, or deliberately left a misleading review for some reason(most likely cuz you don't like the mc befriending Luffy, I guess)

Hipocrita66
Hipocrita66Lv2

Estas enojado porque es una mala historia o estas envidioso? Y de que tienes tanta envidia. Enserio, se nota el descarado odio que tienes a este Fanfiction, si no hubiera dicho que es una reencarnación como se le explico a Gan Fall, que esperabas que hiciera? Tenia apenas reencarnar .. una secta que pedía sangre, una lucha donde tenia que matar ( donde el tipo solo era un arqueólogo), y pese a lo que pienses, fue un gran comienzo para alguien que por una vez se ve como una persona viva, la cual también lidiaba con los pensamientos de Enel. Ante todo, me disculpo comigo mismo por el tiempo que desperdicie escribiendo esto, porque la gente como tu solo nunca escucha lo que lo dicen los demás. Bajate un cambio, y aprendé a ser feliz, amargado.

Hunter_69
Hunter_69Lv13

disgusting luffy-licking dog. yuck

VeganMaster:How strange... Nothing that you said was actually right. You've either skip-read everything and assumed everything about the story, or deliberately left a misleading review for some reason(most likely cuz you don't like the mc befriending Luffy, I guess)
Nadare17
Nadare17Lv4

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