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Gian_CarpioLv46mth
2024-08-19 19:42

I’m confused about the lack of 1 stars, does author just remove reviews? Fatal flaws of this novel -Author bastardizes the narrative. Alot of the ideas are good but a lot are too drawn out, too skipped, and author LOVES lying as the narrator. Also the writing of the novel is like the author picking the writing style he likes from 1000 different novels and applying it to a certain specific paragraph each time. Author has no consistent style. Am I getting Japanese Beta MC or Xianxia ruthless psycho this chapter? I don’t know! -The amount of times MC bulges his eyes each chapter. Author must have a kink for bulging eyes. -The amount of people who stutter. A trained assassin stuttering one word? Mc stutters a lot too. -The collosal amount of CRINGE. -The amount of chapters wasted for useless events. Why would they even steal food for WHAT? -Author doesnt build on how to do spells. No explanation just heres a fireball.

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Gian_CarpioLv4

What couldve been interesting in this novel: How he develops the quintiple spell and what exactly does it do? Time skipped How he develops the Mana Shock and what did his past life memory help him? Time skipped How he developed his card what materials are they from where did he source it how much mana did he take from the lake? Time skipped The fundamental difference of him having one core and having cores in his brain make him think faster/ smarter etc. Skipped again Having the familiars be something the readers will adore? Skipped they are reduced to numerals! The author seems to like to “surprise” the audience but remember, the main premise is that the MC is a Sage. The premise shouldve been for him to impress the readers with his thought processes and innovations, not to shock the readers! Authors writing style and fantasies conflict with the main premise. The author sacrifices the developmentary phase of his magic. Do we even know how he made a fireball? I don’t think so he just explained SCIENCE not MAGIC. Does the Core colors levels matter? No they are skipped too we don’t know the difference!! Does the core grades matter? No we ALSO don’t know the difference we just know only rainbow ones matter for the plot!

Gian_CarpioLv4

And i assure you author. No reader is SHOCKED by anything so far. They are just annoyed

Gian_Carpio:What couldve been interesting in this novel: How he develops the quintiple spell and what exactly does it do? Time skipped How he develops the Mana Shock and what did his past life memory help him? Time skipped How he developed his card what materials are they from where did he source it how much mana did he take from the lake? Time skipped The fundamental difference of him having one core and having cores in his brain make him think faster/ smarter etc. Skipped again Having the familiars be something the readers will adore? Skipped they are reduced to numerals! The author seems to like to “surprise” the audience but remember, the main premise is that the MC is a Sage. The premise shouldve been for him to impress the readers with his thought processes and innovations, not to shock the readers! Authors writing style and fantasies conflict with the main premise. The author sacrifices the developmentary phase of his magic. Do we even know how he made a fireball? I don’t think so he just explained SCIENCE not MAGIC. Does the Core colors levels matter? No they are skipped too we don’t know the difference!! Does the core grades matter? No we ALSO don’t know the difference we just know only rainbow ones matter for the plot!
MagecrafterAuthor

Duly noted, dear reader. Thanks for pointing out flaws in this novel. I could argue about a few things you have said, but I don't think there's any point. I was a pretty young and inexperienced author when I started Spellcraft, so forgive me if the story isn't to your taste. It gets better for the most part, and the end of Part 1 is actually pretty satisfying. Thanks for your time.

Gian_Carpio:What couldve been interesting in this novel: How he develops the quintiple spell and what exactly does it do? Time skipped How he develops the Mana Shock and what did his past life memory help him? Time skipped How he developed his card what materials are they from where did he source it how much mana did he take from the lake? Time skipped The fundamental difference of him having one core and having cores in his brain make him think faster/ smarter etc. Skipped again Having the familiars be something the readers will adore? Skipped they are reduced to numerals! The author seems to like to “surprise” the audience but remember, the main premise is that the MC is a Sage. The premise shouldve been for him to impress the readers with his thought processes and innovations, not to shock the readers! Authors writing style and fantasies conflict with the main premise. The author sacrifices the developmentary phase of his magic. Do we even know how he made a fireball? I don’t think so he just explained SCIENCE not MAGIC. Does the Core colors levels matter? No they are skipped too we don’t know the difference!! Does the core grades matter? No we ALSO don’t know the difference we just know only rainbow ones matter for the plot!
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After clocking over three hundred chapters, I will be giving my novel a Review. Firstly, I would like to say that while I am the author, my opinions on this book isn’t just based on bias. It’s a wonderful and interesting story. I have received a few criticisms, of which I will be addressing here. As readers, you should also be prepared to see these factors. So that you’re not caught off guard, let me explain a few things. [Sp0iler Alert] *Some things mentioned may contain mild sp0ilers* Firstly; The MC acts like a kid even though he’s supposed to be an old sage internally. Secondly; The Academy Arc makes no sense because of how Mc is treated despite being of nobility Thirdly; Cliche routes like Demons and Academy being implemented Fourthly; The reasons behind some of Mc’s seemingly risky/immature actions Lastly; The story’s progression To answer those major criticisms, I have made this Review. Answer 1: If you’ve ever watched Black Clover, or some similar Anime, you tend to notice some old personalities who act immature at times. An example is Julius Novachrono. Thanks to his love of Magic, and his goofy personality, he acts like a child sometimes. However, no one can deny how epic he is when he needs to be. That’s exactly the same as the MC. If you’re patient enough and just accept this aspect of him, you’ll love his character more He’s meant to be more relatable and expressive. Don’t expect an ‘Ayanokoji’ for the MC He behaves childish sometimes, but he really isn’t. Those who have gone further in the story (especially the third arc) can testify to this. Answer 2: Ainzlark Academy is purely meritocratic Even the Prince of the Kingdom attends, and the only reason he’s regarded well is because of his talent for Magic. The MC’s path to success isn’t known by anyone, so they would naturally ostracize him by their standards But, it isn’t permanent, so please… don’t get too annoyed. Answer 3: This novel may seem cliche from the start, but it’s nothing like that at all. Some argue that the Academy was unnecessary, but that’s a lie. If you read the story well, you’ll understand why I went down that route. As for Demons, it’s not as simple as many works have depicted their existence. Again, you need to read the story to find out. Answer 4: The MC is very smart. If you’ve reached the third arc, you’ll understand this perfectly well. Even from the first arc, you begin to see traces of his intelligence. Not just Magic, but strategy and knowledge in other fields. But, some of his actions may seem a little off. Please do not impulsively judge Many people dropped the book at first arc because they were too stuck up with their belief of the MC Unknown to many, in the third arc, the MC explains the rationale behind his seemingly rash action. Everything the MC does has a reason. I don’t mean he’s perfect and he’s always right. But… he’s not stupid. Answer 5: At some point, I changed the POV. Criticisms appeared because I didn’t focus on the MC for some chapters. But, please understand that he’s not the only important person in the story. Other important characters will be introduced. I certainly hope you enjoy this story. Cheers

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