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shflLv23yr
2022-04-15 17:33

the story really has potential theres no grammar mistakes so its a smooth read, theres actual logic and reasoning behind how he uses his magic and combines spells etc. im writing this review at chap 31 so obviously there hasnt been a lot of progress but i do hope for more interactions with other characters who are also (hopefully) well written. for the other characters i mean not just dickriders also people who dislike him/ have business with him etc. overall grat potential def give it a read and i hope the updates keep coming steady

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Magecrafter
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Thanks a lot for your honest review. I will try my hardest to keep up the quality and do even better.

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shflLv2

yh no problem man but i did have a question though, is there gonna be romance ovbs you didnt put it in the tags so prob not but we can still pray for some romance in the story

Magecrafter:Thanks a lot for your honest review. I will try my hardest to keep up the quality and do even better.
Magecrafter
MagecrafterAuthor

Maybe... haha. Certainly not the cliche or harem trope, but sure... I hope so too.

shfl:yh no problem man but i did have a question though, is there gonna be romance ovbs you didnt put it in the tags so prob not but we can still pray for some romance in the story
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shflLv2

wow i kinda forgot about this story tbh bcs the chaps were priviliged but wow u wrote like alot of chaps good for u :)

Magecrafter:Maybe... haha. Certainly not the cliche or harem trope, but sure... I hope so too.
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After clocking over three hundred chapters, I will be giving my novel a Review. Firstly, I would like to say that while I am the author, my opinions on this book isn’t just based on bias. It’s a wonderful and interesting story. I have received a few criticisms, of which I will be addressing here. As readers, you should also be prepared to see these factors. So that you’re not caught off guard, let me explain a few things. [Sp0iler Alert] *Some things mentioned may contain mild sp0ilers* Firstly; The MC acts like a kid even though he’s supposed to be an old sage internally. Secondly; The Academy Arc makes no sense because of how Mc is treated despite being of nobility Thirdly; Cliche routes like Demons and Academy being implemented Fourthly; The reasons behind some of Mc’s seemingly risky/immature actions Lastly; The story’s progression To answer those major criticisms, I have made this Review. Answer 1: If you’ve ever watched Black Clover, or some similar Anime, you tend to notice some old personalities who act immature at times. An example is Julius Novachrono. Thanks to his love of Magic, and his goofy personality, he acts like a child sometimes. However, no one can deny how epic he is when he needs to be. That’s exactly the same as the MC. If you’re patient enough and just accept this aspect of him, you’ll love his character more He’s meant to be more relatable and expressive. Don’t expect an ‘Ayanokoji’ for the MC He behaves childish sometimes, but he really isn’t. Those who have gone further in the story (especially the third arc) can testify to this. Answer 2: Ainzlark Academy is purely meritocratic Even the Prince of the Kingdom attends, and the only reason he’s regarded well is because of his talent for Magic. The MC’s path to success isn’t known by anyone, so they would naturally ostracize him by their standards But, it isn’t permanent, so please… don’t get too annoyed. Answer 3: This novel may seem cliche from the start, but it’s nothing like that at all. Some argue that the Academy was unnecessary, but that’s a lie. If you read the story well, you’ll understand why I went down that route. As for Demons, it’s not as simple as many works have depicted their existence. Again, you need to read the story to find out. Answer 4: The MC is very smart. If you’ve reached the third arc, you’ll understand this perfectly well. Even from the first arc, you begin to see traces of his intelligence. Not just Magic, but strategy and knowledge in other fields. But, some of his actions may seem a little off. Please do not impulsively judge Many people dropped the book at first arc because they were too stuck up with their belief of the MC Unknown to many, in the third arc, the MC explains the rationale behind his seemingly rash action. Everything the MC does has a reason. I don’t mean he’s perfect and he’s always right. But… he’s not stupid. Answer 5: At some point, I changed the POV. Criticisms appeared because I didn’t focus on the MC for some chapters. But, please understand that he’s not the only important person in the story. Other important characters will be introduced. I certainly hope you enjoy this story. Cheers

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