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FonglettoLv102yr
2022-12-17 17:57

Decent concept, Interesting characters that are mostly fleshed out. It has some of the small issues of a boy with the mind of an old man not acting his age from time to time. However overall does an above average portrayal of this compared to most authors. However things very quickly go down hill because the author decides to do a massive time skip. Removing basically any chance the main character has to grow both in power and emotionally. I stuck with it to around chapter 500 because I genuinely enjoyed the beginning and was excited to see the growing phase. Unfortunately the author never really managed to capture my attention again after this. The writing is not very gripping or suspenseful. Like sure there is "supposedly" some sinister plan going on in the background. But there's no sense of urgency. The villains all fall flat, and the author doesn't really do a very good job at holding your interest. The whole novel reads closer to a slice of life with a harem of underage women than anything else. Overall I think boys aged 15 and under would find enjoyment in this story as it reads more like a harem of underage characters than anything deeper. Overall I'd say great characters and world building but terrible execution. Definitely a below average read.

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MagecrafterAuthor

Thank you for your review Just to clarify a few things, so you and others won't get the wrong idea. This is not a Harem Novel. I made this certain in my review and comments already. Secondly, I bet a lot of readers would argue concerning the gripping effects of the story and villains. There's also the Mac's personality, which is meant to create a comic effect, if nothing else. He eventually gets serious, as you can see. I can see that what got you upset the most was the timeskip, but it was necessary. It's not like you missed a lot, and the MC basically already explained all he did during that period He still has a lot of room to grow, and the story has not gotten to its finale yet. Still, I understand if you feel dissatisfied with the story even though you've come this far. Thank you for reading. Cheers.

FonglettoLv10

It's not a harem novel in the sense that they never really 'seal the deal', but it reads as such in every other possible way. In hindsight my review was too harsh as the beginning was very enjoyable alone and that in itself warrants a higher review. But when you have something you're enjoying and it suddenly changes drastically you tend to focus on the negatives.

Magecrafter:Thank you for your review Just to clarify a few things, so you and others won't get the wrong idea. This is not a Harem Novel. I made this certain in my review and comments already. Secondly, I bet a lot of readers would argue concerning the gripping effects of the story and villains. There's also the Mac's personality, which is meant to create a comic effect, if nothing else. He eventually gets serious, as you can see. I can see that what got you upset the most was the timeskip, but it was necessary. It's not like you missed a lot, and the MC basically already explained all he did during that period He still has a lot of room to grow, and the story has not gotten to its finale yet. Still, I understand if you feel dissatisfied with the story even though you've come this far. Thank you for reading. Cheers.
MagecrafterAuthor

Thank you

Fongletto:It's not a harem novel in the sense that they never really 'seal the deal', but it reads as such in every other possible way. In hindsight my review was too harsh as the beginning was very enjoyable alone and that in itself warrants a higher review. But when you have something you're enjoying and it suddenly changes drastically you tend to focus on the negatives.
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After clocking over three hundred chapters, I will be giving my novel a Review. Firstly, I would like to say that while I am the author, my opinions on this book isn’t just based on bias. It’s a wonderful and interesting story. I have received a few criticisms, of which I will be addressing here. As readers, you should also be prepared to see these factors. So that you’re not caught off guard, let me explain a few things. [Sp0iler Alert] *Some things mentioned may contain mild sp0ilers* Firstly; The MC acts like a kid even though he’s supposed to be an old sage internally. Secondly; The Academy Arc makes no sense because of how Mc is treated despite being of nobility Thirdly; Cliche routes like Demons and Academy being implemented Fourthly; The reasons behind some of Mc’s seemingly risky/immature actions Lastly; The story’s progression To answer those major criticisms, I have made this Review. Answer 1: If you’ve ever watched Black Clover, or some similar Anime, you tend to notice some old personalities who act immature at times. An example is Julius Novachrono. Thanks to his love of Magic, and his goofy personality, he acts like a child sometimes. However, no one can deny how epic he is when he needs to be. That’s exactly the same as the MC. If you’re patient enough and just accept this aspect of him, you’ll love his character more He’s meant to be more relatable and expressive. Don’t expect an ‘Ayanokoji’ for the MC He behaves childish sometimes, but he really isn’t. Those who have gone further in the story (especially the third arc) can testify to this. Answer 2: Ainzlark Academy is purely meritocratic Even the Prince of the Kingdom attends, and the only reason he’s regarded well is because of his talent for Magic. The MC’s path to success isn’t known by anyone, so they would naturally ostracize him by their standards But, it isn’t permanent, so please… don’t get too annoyed. Answer 3: This novel may seem cliche from the start, but it’s nothing like that at all. Some argue that the Academy was unnecessary, but that’s a lie. If you read the story well, you’ll understand why I went down that route. As for Demons, it’s not as simple as many works have depicted their existence. Again, you need to read the story to find out. Answer 4: The MC is very smart. If you’ve reached the third arc, you’ll understand this perfectly well. Even from the first arc, you begin to see traces of his intelligence. Not just Magic, but strategy and knowledge in other fields. But, some of his actions may seem a little off. Please do not impulsively judge Many people dropped the book at first arc because they were too stuck up with their belief of the MC Unknown to many, in the third arc, the MC explains the rationale behind his seemingly rash action. Everything the MC does has a reason. I don’t mean he’s perfect and he’s always right. But… he’s not stupid. Answer 5: At some point, I changed the POV. Criticisms appeared because I didn’t focus on the MC for some chapters. But, please understand that he’s not the only important person in the story. Other important characters will be introduced. I certainly hope you enjoy this story. Cheers

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