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CopyPaste1
CopyPaste1Lv132yr
2022-08-02 00:48

So.. the idea and plot is good, BUT the Mc is to childish and airhead all the time! Sadly the biggest problem is grammar, this story need Edit or a Beta is very hard to read it.

DC: Rose Of Death

VQuintessence
4.7
219 Chs

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JustToMeme
JustToMemeLv4

was it really hard to read? i didnt have too much problems.

2yr
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CopyPaste1
CopyPaste1Lv13

I don't know if can explained it cause my eng is not good ! Anyway my problem is not about grammar errors , but with dialogues and paragraphs and many times i can not understand who is talking cause the way the story is put together is weird . You know some times they talk 2-3 different people in the same paragraph and they have thoughts too and is just somewhat hard cause the author don't know where to stop and start and its like talk only 1 person when there is more. Im sure a good editor can fix this and make this story so much better !

JustToMeme:was it really hard to read? i didnt have too much problems.
2yr
4
JustToMeme
JustToMemeLv4

that's just you, my friend. I

CopyPaste1:I don't know if can explained it cause my eng is not good ! Anyway my problem is not about grammar errors , but with dialogues and paragraphs and many times i can not understand who is talking cause the way the story is put together is weird . You know some times they talk 2-3 different people in the same paragraph and they have thoughts too and is just somewhat hard cause the author don't know where to stop and start and its like talk only 1 person when there is more. Im sure a good editor can fix this and make this story so much better !
2yr
2
DoNt_TrY_mE
DoNt_TrY_mELv11

Nah I can see his point

JustToMeme:that's just you, my friend. I
2yr
6
Drurlulu
DrurluluLv13

I also can't sorry

DoNt_TrY_mE:Nah I can see his point
2yr
DoNt_TrY_mE
DoNt_TrY_mELv11

Well good for you and I don't care

Drurlulu:I also can't sorry
2yr
3
Drurlulu
DrurluluLv13

fair enough

DoNt_TrY_mE:Well good for you and I don't care
2yr
4
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VQuintessence
VQuintessenceAuthor

Please pay attention to the tags before you read. The novel will be mainly adventures, exploring the worlds of DCU and The Witcher. There will be romance on the side, and as you might've noticed from the tags, it's a harem. I have never written one, so I wanted to try it. However, I am not into large harem, so I will make it as small as possible, only including the characters I like, and it will take a while to build the relationships. Also, Ian is basically just a human, he has the death resistance, but it doesn't make him any stronger. The question is, can he gain any other superpower? Well, I'll leave you to it and I hope you enjoy ^-^.

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TreacherousVoid
TreacherousVoidLv13

Its not bad but the MC has no goal or drive in life whatsoever. He wants to find a way to die or whatever but like its so boring reading about someone who doesnt want to better themselves. He knows about the world destroying powers that exist in his backyard and never attempts to train or become stronger or find other ways to use his power. He is also brain dead so that doesnt help. Every chapter i read is only me hoping that sonething will redeem the MC and make this worth while, but so far nothing had happened.

2yr
Poseidonz
PoseidonzLv1

Yeah, I am hooked. Another nice story. The mc appears to be morally grey? Maybe with a slight inclination to evil, not sure yet. And wow, he actually has a brain!! What a miracle! We don't see many nowadays even in high-budget movies. I'm not done just yet, there are only like 10 chapters as of now, so I'm not sure, but the side characters actually have a f*** character! I know right? I was starting to think that characters can only have one dimension! Who knew that there are millions of other dimensions! Anyway, keep up the good work and I will be here to read it... And take my stones.

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Retro_Plaid
Retro_PlaidLv5

Really like the characters personality. Just don’ like depending too much on his lick u know maybe some primordial entity can control it so he should get other superpowers plz

3yr
IwishtoDie22
IwishtoDie22Lv2

What happened man happened mate?, you have written amazing Storys before but this one just feels plain weired, like the character development is wierd, you have a worse story progression than in your other fics, the Grammar is not bad but definitely worse than in your other fics, the describing of actions and places is also weird. This is no hate against you as a writer I love your other stories and all that, and understand that you may want a protagonist with better morals or something like that but this just isn't for me. Take care!

3yr
InfinityAndBeyond
InfinityAndBeyondLv5

Sorry for the late review. This is the best DC ff that I've ever read. The Mc is not evil but also not good, let's say he's in gray. The mc is not a villain, nor a hero, but he's a Thief. I love how this story progress too, the harem is built property, and the romance is here. The Mc is funny and his distractions. The Mc is not OP at the start too, he just cannot die, that's all, and i love how he use this to make it to the top. You all should try this so you can know how great this story is.

2yr
TheWandaShip
TheWandaShipLv14

overall this could be a great fanfic, but the MCs personality and behaviour frustrates me to no end. Doesn't matter if "oh he is numb to blah blah", for me, having an MC that acts the way he does just aint for me (as of chapter 21). Good story though 👍

2yr
BAD_MAN
BAD_MANLv11

Reveal spoiler

3yr
SurprisedPikachu1
SurprisedPikachu1Lv4

well, this is an ok novel for me. the writing is way better than most of fanfics in this site but plot is holding back. First of all there's no tension in the story as there're no risk involved for the mc.We all know he'll just breeze through with his cheat.You can argue other novels are the same but this mc's cheat does not work in a satisfying way. It's just explained as it worked because his cheat.This creates a bland story telling. There's some mystery about the main character and his power that intrigues me but that doesn't work for long. I reached 84 chapters and just reminded me of some wuxia novels with long chapters that feels more and more pointless reading them. I'll recommend this to people as a good slice of life read but not as a good fanfic.

2yr
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