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CopyPaste1Lv132yr
2022-08-01 16:48

So.. the idea and plot is good, BUT the Mc is to childish and airhead all the time! Sadly the biggest problem is grammar, this story need Edit or a Beta is very hard to read it.

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JustToMemeLv4

was it really hard to read? i didnt have too much problems.

CopyPaste1Lv13

I don't know if can explained it cause my eng is not good ! Anyway my problem is not about grammar errors , but with dialogues and paragraphs and many times i can not understand who is talking cause the way the story is put together is weird . You know some times they talk 2-3 different people in the same paragraph and they have thoughts too and is just somewhat hard cause the author don't know where to stop and start and its like talk only 1 person when there is more. Im sure a good editor can fix this and make this story so much better !

JustToMeme:was it really hard to read? i didnt have too much problems.
JustToMemeLv4

that's just you, my friend. I

CopyPaste1:I don't know if can explained it cause my eng is not good ! Anyway my problem is not about grammar errors , but with dialogues and paragraphs and many times i can not understand who is talking cause the way the story is put together is weird . You know some times they talk 2-3 different people in the same paragraph and they have thoughts too and is just somewhat hard cause the author don't know where to stop and start and its like talk only 1 person when there is more. Im sure a good editor can fix this and make this story so much better !
DoNt_TrY_mELv11

Nah I can see his point

JustToMeme:that's just you, my friend. I
DrurluluLv13

I also can't sorry

DoNt_TrY_mE:Nah I can see his point
DoNt_TrY_mELv11

Well good for you and I don't care

Drurlulu:I also can't sorry
DrurluluLv13

fair enough

DoNt_TrY_mE:Well good for you and I don't care
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