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IwishtoDie22
IwishtoDie22Lv22yr
2022-04-13 14:35

What happened man happened mate?, you have written amazing Storys before but this one just feels plain weired, like the character development is wierd, you have a worse story progression than in your other fics, the Grammar is not bad but definitely worse than in your other fics, the describing of actions and places is also weird. This is no hate against you as a writer I love your other stories and all that, and understand that you may want a protagonist with better morals or something like that but this just isn't for me. Take care!

DC: Rose Of Death

VQuintessence
4.7
219 Chs

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VQuintessence
VQuintessenceAuthor

I'd say the grammar is definitely better. I was quite inexperienced in my past story because I am not a native English speaker, but I'm still improving, so I see how you wouldn't find it to your satisfaction. Ian won't have much character development because of what he is, but that's a spoiler, so I can't expand on that. Also, the story progression is slower than the other one and is not as action-packed, but things will pick up soon. Ian also doesn't have many morals if any at all, he might just be worse than Yasuo because of his spontaneous nature, the opportunity just didn't arise for him to show his nature. But I understand that to each their own, and if the story is not to your liking, then It's alright. Take care!

2yr
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IwishtoDie22
IwishtoDie22Lv2

Thanks for not getting mad or anything, you are one of my favorite authors on this site, and I really like all your other stories.

VQuintessence:I'd say the grammar is definitely better. I was quite inexperienced in my past story because I am not a native English speaker, but I'm still improving, so I see how you wouldn't find it to your satisfaction. Ian won't have much character development because of what he is, but that's a spoiler, so I can't expand on that. Also, the story progression is slower than the other one and is not as action-packed, but things will pick up soon. Ian also doesn't have many morals if any at all, he might just be worse than Yasuo because of his spontaneous nature, the opportunity just didn't arise for him to show his nature. But I understand that to each their own, and if the story is not to your liking, then It's alright. Take care!
2yr
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VQuintessence
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Please pay attention to the tags before you read. The novel will be mainly adventures, exploring the worlds of DCU and The Witcher. There will be romance on the side, and as you might've noticed from the tags, it's a harem. I have never written one, so I wanted to try it. However, I am not into large harem, so I will make it as small as possible, only including the characters I like, and it will take a while to build the relationships. Also, Ian is basically just a human, he has the death resistance, but it doesn't make him any stronger. The question is, can he gain any other superpower? Well, I'll leave you to it and I hope you enjoy ^-^.

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TreacherousVoid
TreacherousVoidLv13

Its not bad but the MC has no goal or drive in life whatsoever. He wants to find a way to die or whatever but like its so boring reading about someone who doesnt want to better themselves. He knows about the world destroying powers that exist in his backyard and never attempts to train or become stronger or find other ways to use his power. He is also brain dead so that doesnt help. Every chapter i read is only me hoping that sonething will redeem the MC and make this worth while, but so far nothing had happened.

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Poseidonz
PoseidonzLv1

Yeah, I am hooked. Another nice story. The mc appears to be morally grey? Maybe with a slight inclination to evil, not sure yet. And wow, he actually has a brain!! What a miracle! We don't see many nowadays even in high-budget movies. I'm not done just yet, there are only like 10 chapters as of now, so I'm not sure, but the side characters actually have a f*** character! I know right? I was starting to think that characters can only have one dimension! Who knew that there are millions of other dimensions! Anyway, keep up the good work and I will be here to read it... And take my stones.

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Retro_Plaid
Retro_PlaidLv4

Really like the characters personality. Just don’ like depending too much on his lick u know maybe some primordial entity can control it so he should get other superpowers plz

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InfinityAndBeyondLv5

Sorry for the late review. This is the best DC ff that I've ever read. The Mc is not evil but also not good, let's say he's in gray. The mc is not a villain, nor a hero, but he's a Thief. I love how this story progress too, the harem is built property, and the romance is here. The Mc is funny and his distractions. The Mc is not OP at the start too, he just cannot die, that's all, and i love how he use this to make it to the top. You all should try this so you can know how great this story is.

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CopyPaste1
CopyPaste1Lv13

So.. the idea and plot is good, BUT the Mc is to childish and airhead all the time! Sadly the biggest problem is grammar, this story need Edit or a Beta is very hard to read it.

2yr
TheWandaShip
TheWandaShipLv14

overall this could be a great fanfic, but the MCs personality and behaviour frustrates me to no end. Doesn't matter if "oh he is numb to blah blah", for me, having an MC that acts the way he does just aint for me (as of chapter 21). Good story though 👍

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BAD_MAN
BAD_MANLv10

Reveal spoiler

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SurprisedPikachu1
SurprisedPikachu1Lv4

well, this is an ok novel for me. the writing is way better than most of fanfics in this site but plot is holding back. First of all there's no tension in the story as there're no risk involved for the mc.We all know he'll just breeze through with his cheat.You can argue other novels are the same but this mc's cheat does not work in a satisfying way. It's just explained as it worked because his cheat.This creates a bland story telling. There's some mystery about the main character and his power that intrigues me but that doesn't work for long. I reached 84 chapters and just reminded me of some wuxia novels with long chapters that feels more and more pointless reading them. I'll recommend this to people as a good slice of life read but not as a good fanfic.

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