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SurprisedPikachu1Lv42yr
2022-10-05 07:39

well, this is an ok novel for me. the writing is way better than most of fanfics in this site but plot is holding back. First of all there's no tension in the story as there're no risk involved for the mc.We all know he'll just breeze through with his cheat.You can argue other novels are the same but this mc's cheat does not work in a satisfying way. It's just explained as it worked because his cheat.This creates a bland story telling. There's some mystery about the main character and his power that intrigues me but that doesn't work for long. I reached 84 chapters and just reminded me of some wuxia novels with long chapters that feels more and more pointless reading them. I'll recommend this to people as a good slice of life read but not as a good fanfic.

DC: Rose Of Death

VQuintessence
4.7
219 Chs

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VQuintessenceAuthor

Yeah, I agree that I failed in that regard. I wanted to show his powers in a different light that would create tension, but well, certain powers are very hard to work with. I will do better in my next novel and thanks for the review!

2yr
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SurprisedPikachu1Lv4

it's still in my reading list,keep it up

VQuintessence:Yeah, I agree that I failed in that regard. I wanted to show his powers in a different light that would create tension, but well, certain powers are very hard to work with. I will do better in my next novel and thanks for the review!
2yr
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Novel_Manga_2624Lv4

Porque você não escreve um livro parecido com minha tres esposas são vampiras ele é bem interessante por causa das energias diferentes , você poderia usar chakra para os humanos , youki para yokai no Japão mana para bruxas , runas qualquer coseguiria usar com qualquer energia .

VQuintessence:Yeah, I agree that I failed in that regard. I wanted to show his powers in a different light that would create tension, but well, certain powers are very hard to work with. I will do better in my next novel and thanks for the review!
2yr
Novel_Manga_2624Lv4

Os caçadores usariam chacra ou touki junto com energia da fé , use sua imaginação faça o mc conseguir estudar quanquer tipo de energia que nem o ian so que em vês de cajado ele usa o corpo , claro tem que ter linhagens que nem no livro minhas tres eposas são vampiras

VQuintessence:Yeah, I agree that I failed in that regard. I wanted to show his powers in a different light that would create tension, but well, certain powers are very hard to work with. I will do better in my next novel and thanks for the review!
2yr
Novel_Manga_2624Lv4

Use as energias de dxd , naruto , blech, herry potter,

VQuintessence:Yeah, I agree that I failed in that regard. I wanted to show his powers in a different light that would create tension, but well, certain powers are very hard to work with. I will do better in my next novel and thanks for the review!
2yr
Novel_Manga_2624Lv4

Seria bom se o mc tivesse uma abilidade de tecnomante , você poderia usar ciência para quando ele for usar algum poder elemental ou tecnas ele conseguir fazer algumas coisas foras do comum , tipo o poder de manipulação espacial deveria ser raro mas o mc com ciência e seus poderes conseguir fazer a mesma coisa que um motor de dobra .

VQuintessence:Yeah, I agree that I failed in that regard. I wanted to show his powers in a different light that would create tension, but well, certain powers are very hard to work with. I will do better in my next novel and thanks for the review!
2yr
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VQuintessenceAuthor

Please pay attention to the tags before you read. The novel will be mainly adventures, exploring the worlds of DCU and The Witcher. There will be romance on the side, and as you might've noticed from the tags, it's a harem. I have never written one, so I wanted to try it. However, I am not into large harem, so I will make it as small as possible, only including the characters I like, and it will take a while to build the relationships. Also, Ian is basically just a human, he has the death resistance, but it doesn't make him any stronger. The question is, can he gain any other superpower? Well, I'll leave you to it and I hope you enjoy ^-^.

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TreacherousVoidLv13

Its not bad but the MC has no goal or drive in life whatsoever. He wants to find a way to die or whatever but like its so boring reading about someone who doesnt want to better themselves. He knows about the world destroying powers that exist in his backyard and never attempts to train or become stronger or find other ways to use his power. He is also brain dead so that doesnt help. Every chapter i read is only me hoping that sonething will redeem the MC and make this worth while, but so far nothing had happened.

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PoseidonzLv1

Yeah, I am hooked. Another nice story. The mc appears to be morally grey? Maybe with a slight inclination to evil, not sure yet. And wow, he actually has a brain!! What a miracle! We don't see many nowadays even in high-budget movies. I'm not done just yet, there are only like 10 chapters as of now, so I'm not sure, but the side characters actually have a f*** character! I know right? I was starting to think that characters can only have one dimension! Who knew that there are millions of other dimensions! Anyway, keep up the good work and I will be here to read it... And take my stones.

3yr
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Retro_PlaidLv4

Really like the characters personality. Just don’ like depending too much on his lick u know maybe some primordial entity can control it so he should get other superpowers plz

2yr
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IwishtoDie22Lv2

What happened man happened mate?, you have written amazing Storys before but this one just feels plain weired, like the character development is wierd, you have a worse story progression than in your other fics, the Grammar is not bad but definitely worse than in your other fics, the describing of actions and places is also weird. This is no hate against you as a writer I love your other stories and all that, and understand that you may want a protagonist with better morals or something like that but this just isn't for me. Take care!

2yr
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InfinityAndBeyondLv5

Sorry for the late review. This is the best DC ff that I've ever read. The Mc is not evil but also not good, let's say he's in gray. The mc is not a villain, nor a hero, but he's a Thief. I love how this story progress too, the harem is built property, and the romance is here. The Mc is funny and his distractions. The Mc is not OP at the start too, he just cannot die, that's all, and i love how he use this to make it to the top. You all should try this so you can know how great this story is.

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CopyPaste1Lv13

So.. the idea and plot is good, BUT the Mc is to childish and airhead all the time! Sadly the biggest problem is grammar, this story need Edit or a Beta is very hard to read it.

2yr
11
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TheWandaShipLv14

overall this could be a great fanfic, but the MCs personality and behaviour frustrates me to no end. Doesn't matter if "oh he is numb to blah blah", for me, having an MC that acts the way he does just aint for me (as of chapter 21). Good story though 👍

2yr
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BAD_MANLv10

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