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SurprisedPikachu1Lv42yr
2022-10-05 07:39

well, this is an ok novel for me. the writing is way better than most of fanfics in this site but plot is holding back. First of all there's no tension in the story as there're no risk involved for the mc.We all know he'll just breeze through with his cheat.You can argue other novels are the same but this mc's cheat does not work in a satisfying way. It's just explained as it worked because his cheat.This creates a bland story telling. There's some mystery about the main character and his power that intrigues me but that doesn't work for long. I reached 84 chapters and just reminded me of some wuxia novels with long chapters that feels more and more pointless reading them. I'll recommend this to people as a good slice of life read but not as a good fanfic.

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VQuintessenceAuthor

Yeah, I agree that I failed in that regard. I wanted to show his powers in a different light that would create tension, but well, certain powers are very hard to work with. I will do better in my next novel and thanks for the review!

SurprisedPikachu1Lv4

it's still in my reading list,keep it up

VQuintessence:Yeah, I agree that I failed in that regard. I wanted to show his powers in a different light that would create tension, but well, certain powers are very hard to work with. I will do better in my next novel and thanks for the review!
Novel_Manga_2624Lv4

Porque você não escreve um livro parecido com minha tres esposas são vampiras ele é bem interessante por causa das energias diferentes , você poderia usar chakra para os humanos , youki para yokai no Japão mana para bruxas , runas qualquer coseguiria usar com qualquer energia .

VQuintessence:Yeah, I agree that I failed in that regard. I wanted to show his powers in a different light that would create tension, but well, certain powers are very hard to work with. I will do better in my next novel and thanks for the review!
Novel_Manga_2624Lv4

Os caçadores usariam chacra ou touki junto com energia da fé , use sua imaginação faça o mc conseguir estudar quanquer tipo de energia que nem o ian so que em vês de cajado ele usa o corpo , claro tem que ter linhagens que nem no livro minhas tres eposas são vampiras

VQuintessence:Yeah, I agree that I failed in that regard. I wanted to show his powers in a different light that would create tension, but well, certain powers are very hard to work with. I will do better in my next novel and thanks for the review!
Novel_Manga_2624Lv4

Use as energias de dxd , naruto , blech, herry potter,

VQuintessence:Yeah, I agree that I failed in that regard. I wanted to show his powers in a different light that would create tension, but well, certain powers are very hard to work with. I will do better in my next novel and thanks for the review!
Novel_Manga_2624Lv4

Seria bom se o mc tivesse uma abilidade de tecnomante , você poderia usar ciência para quando ele for usar algum poder elemental ou tecnas ele conseguir fazer algumas coisas foras do comum , tipo o poder de manipulação espacial deveria ser raro mas o mc com ciência e seus poderes conseguir fazer a mesma coisa que um motor de dobra .

VQuintessence:Yeah, I agree that I failed in that regard. I wanted to show his powers in a different light that would create tension, but well, certain powers are very hard to work with. I will do better in my next novel and thanks for the review!
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