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CopyPaste1Lv133yr
2021-11-28 07:13

i dont know how people give so high rate to this! every chapter has so many plot holes and a lot of things have zero logic! .. .. .... .. ..

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thelightedghost
thelightedghostAuthor

For example ? Can you please let me know. I will try to change if there are any big plot holes

Damian0481
Damian0481Lv13

at least explain what plot holes and zero logic

FanfictionLover
FanfictionLoverLv3

At least point out these so-called plot holes so the author could improve. Not everyone could just start off writing wonderful stories on their first try, second try or even third try, they have to learn too. But how could the author improve if you just complain like that?

Audio_Coon
Audio_CoonLv3

you, sir, deserve an award XD

FanfictionLover:At least point out these so-called plot holes so the author could improve. Not everyone could just start off writing wonderful stories on their first try, second try or even third try, they have to learn too. But how could the author improve if you just complain like that?
D1cky_101
D1cky_101Lv14

Well your story doesnt have that much plot hole you are just lack character development and the pace of your story is to fast so that make all your character is feel empty me as a reader doesnt feel attachment with the character(google translate)

thelightedghost:For example ? Can you please let me know. I will try to change if there are any big plot holes
thelightedghost
thelightedghostAuthor

I understand. But there will enough growth. As time goes by. I have tried giving the MC enough time for a proper growth in future chapters 😁

D1cky_101:Well your story doesnt have that much plot hole you are just lack character development and the pace of your story is to fast so that make all your character is feel empty me as a reader doesnt feel attachment with the character(google translate)
The_Apex
The_ApexLv12

hm can make bruce find cure for tony's poison instead of relying on his dads past project to find a new element i mean they r one of the brightest minds of their worlds

thelightedghost:I understand. But there will enough growth. As time goes by. I have tried giving the MC enough time for a proper growth in future chapters 😁
lok_98
lok_98Lv4

finally someone noticed that...I was feeling I am the only one who noticed that.

thelightedghost
thelightedghostAuthor

Notice what? Plot holes?

lok_98:finally someone noticed that...I was feeling I am the only one who noticed that.
lok_98
lok_98Lv4

yep but mostly logic holes

thelightedghost:Notice what? Plot holes?
thelightedghost
thelightedghostAuthor

example?

lok_98:yep but mostly logic holes
lok_98
lok_98Lv4

some logic holes like how his input is golden in the post production process,his dad accepting that his normal son suddenly become a superb story creator, no in depth characterization and your stance on the technology advancement of the world is fluctuating.sometimes the technology is not developed and suddenly the technology is developed....I couldn't stand after sixth chapter....I don't know how to describe it but it's feel people are too passive or too accepting of the mc who was just a normal boy just a day before......and this creates logic holes.yeah this is fanfic so we should not expect much logic but still some of the reaction of people and his dad reaction to mc is plain weird.

thelightedghost:example?
Madison_Anderson_7528
Madison_Anderson_7528Lv15

There were two plot holes that I saw. 1. someone mentioned it before, people are way to passive from the things he does. He is a whole child, not a teenager, a child and he made a whole movie and no one questioned it. He had a whole movie planned from start to finish and no one questioned it. He could have made a children's book and then have it adapt to being a movie. Him showing his dad the book and his dad saying this would be a good movie would be better. 2. He is a child (I honestly believe the first mistake was making him a child). Barely in I believe middle school and had him (who showed no signs of having at least above average intelligence) talk to an adult about business like he was a diplomat. 3. I wasn't gonna add this but his dad or at least his nanny is pretty involved with his life. And they didn't question anything. If my child starts acting like this and I see a huge jump in maturity or even the way he talks, im taking that child to a hospital or a church. 4. I know i said two, but if you had made him an adult with a degree or even a college student majoring in this degree; you could have closed over a lot of plot holes

thelightedghost
thelightedghostAuthor

True I made him kind of young which was little off for my part as I wanted MC to be young during the first Avengers movie. But the thing is when I made the novel I thought more from a wuxia point of view as such 11 year old being smart is kind of normal. But as the story went on I shifted to more western style writing. I know it's off putting and I apologize for that. Though I hope you will still like the story

Madison_Anderson_7528:There were two plot holes that I saw. 1. someone mentioned it before, people are way to passive from the things he does. He is a whole child, not a teenager, a child and he made a whole movie and no one questioned it. He had a whole movie planned from start to finish and no one questioned it. He could have made a children's book and then have it adapt to being a movie. Him showing his dad the book and his dad saying this would be a good movie would be better. 2. He is a child (I honestly believe the first mistake was making him a child). Barely in I believe middle school and had him (who showed no signs of having at least above average intelligence) talk to an adult about business like he was a diplomat. 3. I wasn't gonna add this but his dad or at least his nanny is pretty involved with his life. And they didn't question anything. If my child starts acting like this and I see a huge jump in maturity or even the way he talks, im taking that child to a hospital or a church. 4. I know i said two, but if you had made him an adult with a degree or even a college student majoring in this degree; you could have closed over a lot of plot holes
MAIDENLESS
MAIDENLESSLv1

even with those plot holes the story is still good

thelightedghost:True I made him kind of young which was little off for my part as I wanted MC to be young during the first Avengers movie. But the thing is when I made the novel I thought more from a wuxia point of view as such 11 year old being smart is kind of normal. But as the story went on I shifted to more western style writing. I know it's off putting and I apologize for that. Though I hope you will still like the story
_EMI_
_EMI_Lv4

I'm one of those people who gave it 5 stars, but I have to agree with this review, because the plot holes are really too many to count. Still though, even now as the story has progressed quite a bit from when I wrote my review, I would now give it 3 stars at a minimum. Mostly because despite all its flaws, the story is enjoyable. Isn't that what's most important?

_EMI_
_EMI_Lv4

Yes, I believe that would be a more fitting term here.

lok_98:yep but mostly logic holes
Darwin111111
Darwin111111Lv4

you just covered my complaint XD. Plus the girlfriend is basically a forced extra. If you wanted a girlfriend, inventing one wasn't too much. She didn't have to be a comic book character or etc.

D1cky_101:Well your story doesnt have that much plot hole you are just lack character development and the pace of your story is to fast so that make all your character is feel empty me as a reader doesnt feel attachment with the character(google translate)
TMFT
TMFTLv2

Seems pretty normal for a world that get attacked by dimension being on a daily basis

Madison_Anderson_7528:There were two plot holes that I saw. 1. someone mentioned it before, people are way to passive from the things he does. He is a whole child, not a teenager, a child and he made a whole movie and no one questioned it. He had a whole movie planned from start to finish and no one questioned it. He could have made a children's book and then have it adapt to being a movie. Him showing his dad the book and his dad saying this would be a good movie would be better. 2. He is a child (I honestly believe the first mistake was making him a child). Barely in I believe middle school and had him (who showed no signs of having at least above average intelligence) talk to an adult about business like he was a diplomat. 3. I wasn't gonna add this but his dad or at least his nanny is pretty involved with his life. And they didn't question anything. If my child starts acting like this and I see a huge jump in maturity or even the way he talks, im taking that child to a hospital or a church. 4. I know i said two, but if you had made him an adult with a degree or even a college student majoring in this degree; you could have closed over a lot of plot holes
Joshua_4190
Joshua_4190Lv3

It might be late but, my own problem is about the girlfriend part:it was kind of forced to me and the second was about her becoming a lantern like one of the green guy has a plan to tie mc to oa and then suddenly the girlfriend gets the ring. Apart from this the story is good for me I have no major problems keep it up🙂🙂🙂

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