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Astralek
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2022-11-22 09:15

Definitely a waste of time. The protagonist is so rediculously arrogant and whiny at the beginning that it was unsufferable. There is a million ways he could have rapidly improved his strength, such as going to the wilderness to hunt animal souls or sneaking into prisons and eating the souls of death row prisoners. Instead, he decided to go 'save' Masaki by kidnapping her for 6 to 7 years under the guise that he killed her when he is literally a bug that can easily be crushed to death by any random mob. 2.8/5 stars.

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Ryughaa
RyughaaLv14

I do agree

Amazing_Gamer_8441
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Why would he ever know where a death row prison is. No normal person just googles the location of death row prisons and memorizes that. He also has no reason to know where the wilderness is. People don't just know that.

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InGlorious
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I usually don't write a review because they mostly get deleted but I still decided to drop a review for this fic... This fic really needs a review which pointed out it faults. I am trying to help you out as this is a good fanfic. If you ignore this or delete this, I won't mind. Writing Quality- 4 stars Your paragraphs are huge. Please don't write such huge paragraphs. It gets really annoying to read but aside that, everything is fine. Story Development- 3 stars There are is a lot of mess you have have made in the story but you still trying to force the plot to continue on its path. Character Design- 2 stars You main character is a controversy. I won't go into the mess about anti-hero. He said that he wanted to go unnoticed by Aizen and the goes to Hueco Mundo,that is Aizen's backyard. I understand that the system is hiding his presence so I will leave that aside. He said that he didn't want to change the timeline but he goes and saves Ichigo's mother. With Yhwach's broken ability known as Almighty, there is no way that he wouldn't notice that. Even if system helps to hide the woman, saving Ichigo's mom means that Isshin Kurosaki won't get back his powers. In the canon he only got back his Soul Reaper powers when his wife died. And there is also the fact that the MC killed Aizen's pet project to save Ichigo's mom. I bet the system can't hide that. So, you have already changed the plot so much that you simply can't continue with the same timeline. Updating Stanility- 5 stars World Background- 5 stars That's my review. As I said previously, I don't mind if you delete this but it will do you good if you consider the things I have just mentioned...

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