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2021-11-12 02:09

honestly, pretty frickin good the writing quality- I don't really have a master degree in English but I don't see any flaws so 5 stars updates- really good, getting updated a couple times a day 5 stars story development- the story develops really well there wasn't really any arcs so I cant say about the future but for now 5 stars character design- first of all mama mia those are some good characters the OC's are well done especially the MC they feel like how real people talk react and think world background- ...its bleach

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Prognastat
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Yeah can’t really take credit for the world and non OC characters, but thanks for the positive reception on my stuff too!

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InGlorious
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I usually don't write a review because they mostly get deleted but I still decided to drop a review for this fic... This fic really needs a review which pointed out it faults. I am trying to help you out as this is a good fanfic. If you ignore this or delete this, I won't mind. Writing Quality- 4 stars Your paragraphs are huge. Please don't write such huge paragraphs. It gets really annoying to read but aside that, everything is fine. Story Development- 3 stars There are is a lot of mess you have have made in the story but you still trying to force the plot to continue on its path. Character Design- 2 stars You main character is a controversy. I won't go into the mess about anti-hero. He said that he wanted to go unnoticed by Aizen and the goes to Hueco Mundo,that is Aizen's backyard. I understand that the system is hiding his presence so I will leave that aside. He said that he didn't want to change the timeline but he goes and saves Ichigo's mother. With Yhwach's broken ability known as Almighty, there is no way that he wouldn't notice that. Even if system helps to hide the woman, saving Ichigo's mom means that Isshin Kurosaki won't get back his powers. In the canon he only got back his Soul Reaper powers when his wife died. And there is also the fact that the MC killed Aizen's pet project to save Ichigo's mom. I bet the system can't hide that. So, you have already changed the plot so much that you simply can't continue with the same timeline. Updating Stanility- 5 stars World Background- 5 stars That's my review. As I said previously, I don't mind if you delete this but it will do you good if you consider the things I have just mentioned...

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