Item: Reborn in bleach as a hollow with a system
Rating: 3.4
Author: Tandoris

TandorisLv43yr

2021-11-16 00:59

Alright, review, so : -Writing Quality 3/5 Writing is ok, not fantastic but not unreadable. -Stability of Updates 5/5 Nothing to say here, update are often Story Development 2/5 Imo, the story doesn't make sense. Like, he got some cool stat with system but he is the only one with stat at the moment so... Great? I mean it's cool to see that he got 35 in dext and 20 in constitution but is that a lot? Can we have like , i don't know, the arrancar/espada stat to have a comparison? Maybe i read too fast but i can't remember any other stat except a the start when the system said that standart humans have 1 in all stat. The story in himself is ok, but a lot of his action doesn't make sense imo. He don't want to endanger his family but stay in the house forever , don't want to alert Aizen/Yhwach but decide to save Ichigo's mom, then go to Hueco Mundo (aka Aizen's turf) , don't want to alert shinigami but kill every hollow he detect , don't want to change the plot yet go kill Grand Fischer who is litteraly Aizen's experimentation and one of the Arrancar prototype with the hogyoku later in the manga.... Do i need to continue? Character Design 3/5 Nothing special, the mc isn't badly written, but nothing exceptionnal , the only other character (that we see talking at this point) are Masaki and his sister (MC's sister) who are kind of the same even if the sister feel at least a bit humain and not just an NPC World Background 4/5 World background is bleach so great but i don't give 5 cuz it's more repetition of what bleach is than new place, etc... In conclusion, a lot of good idea, but a bad execution.

Reborn in bleach as a hollow with a system

Prognastat

4.5

134 Chs

Liked by 32 people

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S3ntinelLv15

Can you recommend novels ? Because imo this novel is really good

3yr

TandorisLv4

Wich type of novel are you searching for? Any favorite universe/world?

S3ntinel:Can you recommend novels ? Because imo this novel is really good

3yr

S3ntinelLv15

Tbh I don’t Care if the novel is good xD

Tandoris:Wich type of novel are you searching for? Any favorite universe/world?

3yr

TandorisLv4

lol alright prepare yourself : On Webnovel: -Born with an Innate Technique in jujutsu kaisen (jjk) -Pokemon: Master of tactics (pokemon) -Dragonborn Saga (skyrim) -King of The Dead (DC) -One Piece: The legend of Johnny Silverhand (OP) -The Tale Of Loki (Marvel) -HP: A Magical Journey (HP) -Winter Comes (Game of Thrones) -The Player? Surviving in Terraria as the only existence (Terraria) -Hunter X Hunter: Grounded (HxH) -Avatar: Awakened Gamer (ATLA) -Stacking The Deck (Yugioh GX) On Fanfictoin.net : -Mason Aves: The Wizard (HP) -Chaos Effect (yu-gi-oh) -Rough Human Touch (Halo) -Mass Effect: Into the Breach (Mass effect) -Inane Ramblings of an Orgrimmar Orc (Wow) -Borne Of Caution (pokemon) -Game of Shadows (Naruto) Kiri Shinobi with Demigod Powers! SI (Naruto + Percy jackson and Olympian) -Blue Flame (MHA) Reincarnated Into the World of Bleach (Bleach) ALL the ff are Si/isekai/reincarnation (more or less the same imo), cuz it's my favorite kind Hope you find something you like, have a nice day :p

S3ntinel:Tbh I don’t Care if the novel is good xD

3yr

CharreosLv3

you my friend have an exquisite taste

Tandoris:lol alright prepare yourself : On Webnovel: -Born with an Innate Technique in jujutsu kaisen (jjk) -Pokemon: Master of tactics (pokemon) -Dragonborn Saga (skyrim) -King of The Dead (DC) -One Piece: The legend of Johnny Silverhand (OP) -The Tale Of Loki (Marvel) -HP: A Magical Journey (HP) -Winter Comes (Game of Thrones) -The Player? Surviving in Terraria as the only existence (Terraria) -Hunter X Hunter: Grounded (HxH) -Avatar: Awakened Gamer (ATLA) -Stacking The Deck (Yugioh GX) On Fanfictoin.net : -Mason Aves: The Wizard (HP) -Chaos Effect (yu-gi-oh) -Rough Human Touch (Halo) -Mass Effect: Into the Breach (Mass effect) -Inane Ramblings of an Orgrimmar Orc (Wow) -Borne Of Caution (pokemon) -Game of Shadows (Naruto) Kiri Shinobi with Demigod Powers! SI (Naruto + Percy jackson and Olympian) -Blue Flame (MHA) Reincarnated Into the World of Bleach (Bleach) ALL the ff are Si/isekai/reincarnation (more or less the same imo), cuz it's my favorite kind Hope you find something you like, have a nice day :p

3yr

TandorisLv4

Haha , thx :D

Charreos:you my friend have an exquisite taste

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Dao_Of_PatienceLv14

Leaving a comment to look at the list

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Voidz_ZeroLv14

A fellow terraria enjoyer…

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TandorisLv4

calamity forever

Voidz_Zero:A fellow terraria enjoyer…

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darkthunder_xdLv1

Well time to check these out

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TandorisLv4

have fun!

darkthunder_xd:Well time to check these out

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Supper_megaLv4

thanks

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Other Reviews

_oinkchanLv5

Mc's character is perfect. Not too manipulative nor too goody shoes. I like his interactions with his family and Hollow species seems to have immense potential. In all this is a good fanfic even more because there are no good nowadays.

3yr

CharreosLv3

honestly, pretty frickin good the writing quality- I don't really have a master degree in English but I don't see any flaws so 5 stars updates- really good, getting updated a couple times a day 5 stars story development- the story develops really well there wasn't really any arcs so I cant say about the future but for now 5 stars character design- first of all mama mia those are some good characters the OC's are well done especially the MC they feel like how real people talk react and think world background- ...its bleach

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InGloriousLv4

I usually don't write a review because they mostly get deleted but I still decided to drop a review for this fic... This fic really needs a review which pointed out it faults. I am trying to help you out as this is a good fanfic. If you ignore this or delete this, I won't mind. Writing Quality- 4 stars Your paragraphs are huge. Please don't write such huge paragraphs. It gets really annoying to read but aside that, everything is fine. Story Development- 3 stars There are is a lot of mess you have have made in the story but you still trying to force the plot to continue on its path. Character Design- 2 stars You main character is a controversy. I won't go into the mess about anti-hero. He said that he wanted to go unnoticed by Aizen and the goes to Hueco Mundo,that is Aizen's backyard. I understand that the system is hiding his presence so I will leave that aside. He said that he didn't want to change the timeline but he goes and saves Ichigo's mother. With Yhwach's broken ability known as Almighty, there is no way that he wouldn't notice that. Even if system helps to hide the woman, saving Ichigo's mom means that Isshin Kurosaki won't get back his powers. In the canon he only got back his Soul Reaper powers when his wife died. And there is also the fact that the MC killed Aizen's pet project to save Ichigo's mom. I bet the system can't hide that. So, you have already changed the plot so much that you simply can't continue with the same timeline. Updating Stanility- 5 stars World Background- 5 stars That's my review. As I said previously, I don't mind if you delete this but it will do you good if you consider the things I have just mentioned...

3yr

St_PatLv4

This fanfic is tagged wrong. This fanfic has no Anti hero development in story and the character of the MC is exactly opposite. If anyone wants to read this fanfic due to its ‘Anti-Hero’ tag, then don’t even bother to read it. I was attracted to this fanfic because of its Anti hero tag and it being Bleach fanfic which is rare, but i had to drop reading this fanfic because there is nothing Antihero in this fanfic. MC is too much of a ‘Good Boy’.

3yr

Kurdi123Lv11

Saving Masaki is a Brainless logic move... (Masaki is Ichigo's mom that was killed by a hollow as Ichigo was younger) And I almost had hope for your novel

3yr

EverythingonurmindLv4

its decent but there are useless and braindead decisions as well which doesn't make sense (my guess is that its a way of self insertion for author perhaps) so if you don't like useless decisions then I guess this ain't for you. peace ✌

3yr

eQzyLv1

Saving Ichigo's mother stupidly killed the desire to read. How is she better or worse than thousands and millions of other people? Because she's the mother of the anime's protagonist? Take such a risk, move to another city, follow the Ichigo family to save one person! I'm outraged! Written well, but here I go.

2yr

PrognastatAuthor

Shameless author self review. Just wanted to say this is my first attempt at a fanfic, hopefully you like it. If you have any tips or feedback feel free to let me know as I would love to improve my writing.

3yr

AstralekLv2

Definitely a waste of time. The protagonist is so rediculously arrogant and whiny at the beginning that it was unsufferable. There is a million ways he could have rapidly improved his strength, such as going to the wilderness to hunt animal souls or sneaking into prisons and eating the souls of death row prisoners. Instead, he decided to go 'save' Masaki by kidnapping her for 6 to 7 years under the guise that he killed her when he is literally a bug that can easily be crushed to death by any random mob. 2.8/5 stars.

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