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Prognastat
PrognastatAuthor3yr
2021-11-08 10:45

Shameless author self review. Just wanted to say this is my first attempt at a fanfic, hopefully you like it. If you have any tips or feedback feel free to let me know as I would love to improve my writing.

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Ryofu
RyofuLv11

#NoHarem or #Harem ?

ABananaStoleMyDog
ABananaStoleMyDogLv13

Just a suggestion, you might want to shorten the length of your paragraphs as some of them are way to long.

EnderPL
EnderPLLv6

Romance ?

Prognastat
PrognastatAuthor

I think I’ll be including one eventually, but keep in mind MC is a hollow. Romance is pretty much off the table until he is capable of becoming a Vasto Lorde/Arrancar.

EnderPL:Romance ?
EnderPL
EnderPLLv6

Thanks, thats true. But...

Prognastat:I think I’ll be including one eventually, but keep in mind MC is a hollow. Romance is pretty much off the table until he is capable of becoming a Vasto Lorde/Arrancar.
EnderPL
EnderPLLv6

Btw, can you write the condition to evolve, we can see him grow stronger but is the condition to evolution a lvl? Spiritual power? Stats? We don’t know what and how much. Great story btw.

Prognastat:I think I’ll be including one eventually, but keep in mind MC is a hollow. Romance is pretty much off the table until he is capable of becoming a Vasto Lorde/Arrancar.
Prognastat
PrognastatAuthor

He can probably actualy already evolve at this point. According to lore hundreds of hollow combine to form a Gillian and MC his already consimed like 800+ so even if we assume hundreds could even mean 999 he is already pushing the limit. MC is having his system deliberately surpress his evolution though so he can remain on earth and make sure canon happens the way it was supposed to at least upto the point where Aizen gets the Hogyoku and betrays Soul Society.

EnderPL:Btw, can you write the condition to evolve, we can see him grow stronger but is the condition to evolution a lvl? Spiritual power? Stats? We don’t know what and how much. Great story btw.
PUERKO_Senpai
PUERKO_SenpaiLv4

author-dono it is possible the MC has a harem and that the sister is part of it. (sorry for the spam)

Shira_ori
Shira_oriLv14

After the mc attains vasto lorde or arrancar form and can start a romantic relationship would it be possible for it to be no harem?

Prognastat:I think I’ll be including one eventually, but keep in mind MC is a hollow. Romance is pretty much off the table until he is capable of becoming a Vasto Lorde/Arrancar.
Tog_Python
Tog_PythonLv4

Is it Dropped plz dont

Tog_Python
Tog_PythonLv4

MakE the relationship between him and nel

Prognastat:He can probably actualy already evolve at this point. According to lore hundreds of hollow combine to form a Gillian and MC his already consimed like 800+ so even if we assume hundreds could even mean 999 he is already pushing the limit. MC is having his system deliberately surpress his evolution though so he can remain on earth and make sure canon happens the way it was supposed to at least upto the point where Aizen gets the Hogyoku and betrays Soul Society.
TFH
TFHLv6

Author? Hârêm? No Hârêm? Personally, i like Nelliel Tu Odelschwanck, Tier Harribel and dont ask me why, but i liked Yin and Yang from the bleach movie. So these 4 for MC.

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InGlorious
InGloriousLv4

I usually don't write a review because they mostly get deleted but I still decided to drop a review for this fic... This fic really needs a review which pointed out it faults. I am trying to help you out as this is a good fanfic. If you ignore this or delete this, I won't mind. Writing Quality- 4 stars Your paragraphs are huge. Please don't write such huge paragraphs. It gets really annoying to read but aside that, everything is fine. Story Development- 3 stars There are is a lot of mess you have have made in the story but you still trying to force the plot to continue on its path. Character Design- 2 stars You main character is a controversy. I won't go into the mess about anti-hero. He said that he wanted to go unnoticed by Aizen and the goes to Hueco Mundo,that is Aizen's backyard. I understand that the system is hiding his presence so I will leave that aside. He said that he didn't want to change the timeline but he goes and saves Ichigo's mother. With Yhwach's broken ability known as Almighty, there is no way that he wouldn't notice that. Even if system helps to hide the woman, saving Ichigo's mom means that Isshin Kurosaki won't get back his powers. In the canon he only got back his Soul Reaper powers when his wife died. And there is also the fact that the MC killed Aizen's pet project to save Ichigo's mom. I bet the system can't hide that. So, you have already changed the plot so much that you simply can't continue with the same timeline. Updating Stanility- 5 stars World Background- 5 stars That's my review. As I said previously, I don't mind if you delete this but it will do you good if you consider the things I have just mentioned...

Tandoris
TandorisLv3
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