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Random_exe
Random_exeLv131yr
2023-06-30 23:44

i am disappointed to be honest , but yh here we go : - as of right now updates seems ok -decent writing quality could use some improvements but good enough to be considered GOOD in webnovel . - nothing much to say about WB as it is a fancfic except some major/minor things like there being quite a few senju clan members in the village and some new wind jutsu i guess idk if there's more as i stopped reading pretty early in the genin arc or either i dont temember atm. - Now CD and SD , its terrible imo , like mc is a paranoid , cowardly , robotlike mf , i couldnt relate to nor could i get my self to like him no matter how i tried , let me give you an example , he is above average and i trying to not show his above average abilities as not to get danzo attention … like mate you are an orphane civilian with above average skills , nobody cares about yooh also he is stupid to think he could deceive experienceed NINJAs with his little acts , but do you know whats worst ? It actually bloody works on even the hokage supposedly the best shinobi there , like this is ridiculous to the highest degree . i just couldnt get my self to read past this nonsense , but if you dont mind any of this stated above then you would probably enjoy the fiction , yikes i guess really liked the story idea huh cant believe i spent a whole day reading , was so frustrated i hit the gym before writting this comment 💀💀

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Lord_Azathoth
Lord_AzathothLv4

Thanks

Random_exe
Random_exeLv13

you’re welcome

Lord_Azathoth:Thanks
bibeklama
bibeklamaLv13

Interesting_Okay
Interesting_OkayLv1

Read Naruto's light novels and about will of fire and you'll understand why it works.

dustdweller
dustdwellerLv2

umm we get to know that the hokage pretty much knows 90% of his antics, but kind of develops a close relationship with him.

Random_exe
Random_exeLv13

Oh thats nice to know , didn’t read that far then, from where i stopped it just felt like alot of plot holes , but still there is his horrendous personality that is enough to keep me from going back to reading this

dustdweller:umm we get to know that the hokage pretty much knows 90% of his antics, but kind of develops a close relationship with him.
Akamigaku
AkamigakuLv3

What chapter did you stop? He gets "better" after 250-300ish chapters.

Random_exe:Oh thats nice to know , didn’t read that far then, from where i stopped it just felt like alot of plot holes , but still there is his horrendous personality that is enough to keep me from going back to reading this
Aliop
AliopLv3

He is able to fool hiruzen bcz hiruzen does not expect a child to think in a mature way esp a orphan child he thinks he is just a greedy kid due to being an orphan

Aliop
AliopLv3

And I guess you have never read naruto because danzo,s root is filled with orphans and people with no political backing which fujin was so ofc he should stay on guard Danzo uses and manipulates mainly orphan for his causes especially war orphans like fuujin

Aliop
AliopLv3

It is completely logical and better than 99℅ of naruto webnovels which write pure smut or overpowered mc with cheats or just a discontinued web novel after few chapters so pls....

Aliop
AliopLv3

It was already perfect it just became better

Akamigaku:What chapter did you stop? He gets "better" after 250-300ish chapters.
Aliop
AliopLv3

Ppl who write hate comments because of his personality never had to work for something in real life and are kids do you really think you should waste time and not do something make yourself powerful enough to survive especially that u have been reborn and have no cheats you are just a no named orphan so if you die nobody cares and if you become a shinobi you would die if you are only a jounin or below s rank bcz of third shinobi war . It is not as easy as it looks to become strong naruto did not become strong just by dancing and passing his times behind the scenes in the naruto world he worked for his base strength and upped his mental fortitude to fight against kirana and use his chakra So fuujin with no cheats had to work insanely hard to achieve the power he has now in the web novel The naruto was not fully displayed and the depths of each and every moment was lost in the theme of naruto Actually the author is ingenious for coming up with this and provides a logical and better version of naruto with less potholes

Random_exe
Random_exeLv13

Thanks for your feedback. I can tell this fanfiction has influenced you on a very deep emotional lvl. So, good for you. I myself am not really interested enough to go back and reread the story just to refute your points whether they are about the ff or they about my personal life.

Aliop:Ppl who write hate comments because of his personality never had to work for something in real life and are kids do you really think you should waste time and not do something make yourself powerful enough to survive especially that u have been reborn and have no cheats you are just a no named orphan so if you die nobody cares and if you become a shinobi you would die if you are only a jounin or below s rank bcz of third shinobi war . It is not as easy as it looks to become strong naruto did not become strong just by dancing and passing his times behind the scenes in the naruto world he worked for his base strength and upped his mental fortitude to fight against kirana and use his chakra So fuujin with no cheats had to work insanely hard to achieve the power he has now in the web novel The naruto was not fully displayed and the depths of each and every moment was lost in the theme of naruto Actually the author is ingenious for coming up with this and provides a logical and better version of naruto with less potholes
Zombeater
ZombeaterLv11

Its actually really good, especially his interaction with the canon characters. Out of the 5 naruto fanfiction novel I have read, I'd rate this at the top 1. The other 4 didn't have this level of smart schemer mc, and greatly mirrors the personality of the other canon characters, and dont forget about how epicly written the fight scenes are.

Random_exe:Thanks for your feedback. I can tell this fanfiction has influenced you on a very deep emotional lvl. So, good for you. I myself am not really interested enough to go back and reread the story just to refute your points whether they are about the ff or they about my personal life.
THII_EXTERNAL
THII_EXTERNALLv2

You can't relate to everyone just enjoy the show dude

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Serenity7Seven
Serenity7SevenLv2

I read till chapter 127ish and in my opinion this is the best fanfic of naruto I've read so far. The MC has no cheats, but trains like there's no tomorrow and is cautious, which I think is another good point of this novel. It worth noting that he is an anti-hero type. He is no psychopath/sociopath/evil and he is also no saint/hero/happy-go-lucky type person(which in my opinion is very good, as I'm sick tired of reading about those.) This novel is for those that like or at least can manage training arcs. There is a lot of it, especially in the beginning when he is in the academy. Make no mistake though, the novel NEVER got boring! The training arcs were actually my favorite arcs so far. In fact, for me, the fact that the MC depends on himself for power-ups(at least as far as I have read) instead of seeking external sources of strenght(like a zero-tails, for example), or random lucky encounters, is something I enjoy very much. There is no sudden power-ups, or cheats. There is a little bit of comedy, especially in the interactions with Hiruzen, but just a little. This novel also explore the possibilities of wind style ninjutsus, beyond what the likes of temari, or even danzo, could ever hope to show in canon. Most importantly, at least as far as I could tell, there was no logical jumps anywhere. It's all very neat and creative, without making the reader feel alienated or flabbergasted in anyway. (Just the fact that there is no system granting him haki, or random space-type powers or whatever powers that do not fit at all in the universe is already fantastic to be honest...it's also why I started disliking fanfics with systems.) Oh and the pace so far is very good as well, at least for people like me that enjoy long stories with lots of adventures/training... though the adventure part happens later in the novel. Still, its awesome. It's a bit like a slice of life type novel, but faster and with a few time skips. I certainly enjoyed the pace very much. Btw, about stability of updates, I have no clue. I'm the type of reader that waits for hundreds of chapters to be released before I start reading a story. So yea. OH, and there was no romance in the novel so far. In summary, hopefully this novel will be 1k chapters long!

Interesting_Okay
Interesting_OkayLv1

This fanfiction is a refreshing gem in the sea of isekai stories. The protagonist's journey into the Naruto world is a breath of fresh air as he navigates without the crutch of overpowered abilities. The author's commitment to realism shines through the protagonist's hard work and meticulous approach, adding a layer of believability often absent in similar tales. What truly sets this fanfic apart is the meticulous attention given to the Naruto world. Unlike other fics where the universe is a mere backdrop, here, every nuance is explored. The story doesn't revolve solely around the protagonist; it weaves seamlessly into the existing narrative, showcasing a deep respect for the source material. The absence of overpowered tropes is a welcome surprise. The protagonist's struggles and triumphs feel earned, creating a more engaging and relatable narrative. The injection of humor further elevates the story, offering moments of levity amid the challenges. Moreover, the author's incorporation of psychology, ranks, and politics adds layers of complexity, transforming the narrative into a well-rounded exploration of the Naruto world. This fanfic doesn't just retell a tale; it enriches and expands upon the established lore. In essence, this fanfiction stands out as a masterpiece, blending a well-crafted protagonist, a respectful treatment of the source material, and a narrative that seamlessly integrates humor, psychology, and political intrigue. It's a captivating journey that sets a high bar for fanfiction in the Naruto universe. I hope you read this masterpiece ;)

SpackRox
SpackRoxLv13

At Chapter 23 This is a very good Naruto fanfiction. The writing quality is very good. The sentences are well structured and easy to understand and the grammar is also very good. The chapters are also quite long which is even better. The story is developing very well and is focused on the MC. There is almost no inconsistency in the story so far and the MC is developing at a very reasonable pace for someone having future knowledge of the Naruto world. So far there have been very few characters which have been focused upon other than the MC, with them being his Academy Sensei and the Third Hokage. This aspect is very good as I don't want to read more about characters other than the MC, other than their interaction with the MC and their perception of the MC and his actions. And while the story may feel somewhat slow to others, I enjoy reading about how the MC trains and plans for the future. This will lay a very good groundwork for future development of the story. The MC has a calm and rational personality and thoroughly plans his course of action, such as he follows a very well hashed out training plan. He is not OP from the start and does not have any cheats like a system or wishes from GOD or ROB, which makes this fic even better. There has been a lack of good naruto fanfictions such as this one which does not have any cheats and where the MC is also calm and rational without being an anti-hero or an outright villain. The MC is also not arrogant even though he has been at the top of his class for 2 years and though he is cautious to not gain any unwanted attention from Danzo, he doesn't portray himself as weak. So overall I am very satisfied with this fanfic and looking forward to new chapters. I also hope that the author completes this fanfic. Kudos to the author.

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