Story is well written with few fillers, but its weakness is MC who is hypocrite , guillable , patsy and tbh dumb. He saves random youths even without knowing if he would be able to kill those beasts( he has been mistreated his whole life and bullied so his feelings in a dog eat dog world make no sense), ends up trusting a family enough to show his eyes , even after being warned by someone few minutes ago , which he known for no more than for few minutes . He knows he is an extra but still thinks them of as family, naively tells his discovery to his teacher which he should not and tries some experiment on his second soul bond while he could have waited to find one with better potential.... Taking undue risk. At the end , someone like him wouldn't survive in real world, and his actions scream plot armour Author says it again and again that he is mature but in reality he is emotional mess without much rationality to back his actions. Read but don't waste your spirit stones or pass on it as his character growth stops at chapter 10.
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To be honest, I don´t really think you´ve read everything intently...The MC is 13 years old and lost his mother a few years before that, which should be clear. He saved the youth´s because he wasn´t sure if he could face beasts head-on but assassinating is something completely different, right? You already said that he was bullied and so on, but he ends up trusting the ONLY one that didn´t treat him badly (Greg). Is attaching yourself to someone reliable that bad?!?. Seeking protection because he is weak is the same... He even helped him, turning his school-life into a better situation by preventing anyone from bullying him...He was warned about his eyes, but why the hell should he care? His eyes are obvious(golden) and not something easy to hide if Jason wants to live comfortable... Revealing his eyes to the Fler´s could have been a bad choice, but that´s not instantly dumb (in my opinion). The only thing I agree with you is Jason´s idiotic idea to experiment with his second soulbond.. He could have waited and he acted too impatient, but everything about that is character growth... Thanks for your review, but I don´t really think that you should be able to tell if there will be character growth or not if you just don´t get it. (Shallow character growth with him befriending Greg and Malia, but who am I to tell you that...]
He lost his mother few years ago ... but has he not been treated as trash for his life ? He should be bitter instead of being whiteknight warrior , why should he care about opinions of others..... that guy mistakenly pressured MC enough to scare shit out of him and is it not common sense that they might try to manipulate him or capture him ? I have a gut feeling you should pick this one then shows eyes..... Every chapter their is paragraph dedicated to praise his intelligence and maturity but everything he has done which includes trusting a random family about his unique pet ( who can evolve beyond his limit)which was not needed. If he is so smart , did he not consider that his pet or he might end up as guinea pig in some lab ? Greg's sister was hostile to him initially. At the end, he acts as if he is protected by plot armour not as someone cautious would. He himself experimented on his soul bound but criticises sacrificing one while also going on killing spree.... Perhaps I am incapable of understanding his character but from what I do his character is flawed
His Character is definitely flawed and I don´t want to deny that. In the end, I probably did a few mistakes in assessing a perfect character, but he is mature for his age and intelligent, even though he acts like a child with a naive main characteristic(which is not that good considering that humanity is trash) His naivety was planned but writing that he was mature and intelligent too many times was most likely the biggest mistake. Please bear my mistake and consider that I wrote the first 60 chapters without any writing experience(To that time I hadn´t even released a single chapter yet) Thanks for your critique and after rereading my own reply, I´m a little bit ashamed because it was more offensive than I wanted it to be. I hope you didn´t take it to heart. <3
lordlighthh:He lost his mother few years ago ... but has he not been treated as trash for his life ? He should be bitter instead of being whiteknight warrior , why should he care about opinions of others..... that guy mistakenly pressured MC enough to scare shit out of him and is it not common sense that they might try to manipulate him or capture him ? I have a gut feeling you should pick this one then shows eyes..... Every chapter their is paragraph dedicated to praise his intelligence and maturity but everything he has done which includes trusting a random family about his unique pet ( who can evolve beyond his limit)which was not needed. If he is so smart , did he not consider that his pet or he might end up as guinea pig in some lab ? Greg's sister was hostile to him initially. At the end, he acts as if he is protected by plot armour not as someone cautious would. He himself experimented on his soul bound but criticises sacrificing one while also going on killing spree.... Perhaps I am incapable of understanding his character but from what I do his character is flawed
@lordlighthh you are right in the mc being praised a lit more than needed, but for his personality you eventually need to take into consideration that he's a kid and wont easily turn into a cold apathetic mc(terrible mc characteristics), him being naive is "logically" a problem but if the mc keeps monologuing himself and being pragmatic and having barely any emotions he will come off as a seasoned veteran who has everything under control, the mc trusting people and making mistakes is somwthing normal for his age and something i would rather let go rather than make the story very pragmatic, atleast early on when everyone around him is weak, we still dont know how his personality turns out when he grows up, he could become colder, become sarcastic, become like a "kiba" and become a casanova who sleeps around but doesn't do relationships. The mc definately needs to stop reacting negatively to the dog eat dog philosophy, and the killing intent,(of his teacher this chapter) you need to realize author this is not a transmigrated from earth mc, he lives in that world, which has been that way, his acceptance for dog eat dog isnt supposed to be low, their race has carved out a living that way, he should very easily embrace it, rather than being uncomfortable and wanting to fix the human race. Eventually you will also have to have him experience losses of oppurtunities, treasures and other things than letting him get everything like some son of heaven, so he can't be jealous and upset and mopey for long anyway so i say let the kid rock his emotions in his childhood arc✌️
The problem is that MC's mother is murdered, and just because MC is compensated for acting normally, not insisting on finding out who the killer is, MC only has a glimpse of thinking about finding the killer. like him mother is less important in him life, like an ordinary friend then killed and only a cursory thought about finding out who the killer is, or compensation is more important than his mother's life.
HideousGrain:His Character is definitely flawed and I don´t want to deny that. In the end, I probably did a few mistakes in assessing a perfect character, but he is mature for his age and intelligent, even though he acts like a child with a naive main characteristic(which is not that good considering that humanity is trash) His naivety was planned but writing that he was mature and intelligent too many times was most likely the biggest mistake. Please bear my mistake and consider that I wrote the first 60 chapters without any writing experience(To that time I hadn´t even released a single chapter yet) Thanks for your critique and after rereading my own reply, I´m a little bit ashamed because it was more offensive than I wanted it to be. I hope you didn´t take it to heart. <3
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Pu_Lau:The problem is that MC's mother is murdered, and just because MC is compensated for acting normally, not insisting on finding out who the killer is, MC only has a glimpse of thinking about finding the killer. like him mother is less important in him life, like an ordinary friend then killed and only a cursory thought about finding out who the killer is, or compensation is more important than his mother's life.
The MC tries to avoid thinking too much about his mother because he wouldn't be able to do anything if his mind would be too distracted by the thought of his mother. Even if he asked the Cerus-family who murdered his mother, it would create a negative effect on his mana absorption because of the constant distraction. Furthermore, the Cerus-family would most likely try to avoid answering him because they don't want to offend the opposite heir.
Pu_Lau:The problem is that MC's mother is murdered, and just because MC is compensated for acting normally, not insisting on finding out who the killer is, MC only has a glimpse of thinking about finding the killer. like him mother is less important in him life, like an ordinary friend then killed and only a cursory thought about finding out who the killer is, or compensation is more important than his mother's life.
This is not reasonable. Who would stop thinking about such a matter simply because they can't do anything about it just yet? This is not something you can consciously think or not and its not something you can ignore just because you want to either.
HideousGrain:The MC tries to avoid thinking too much about his mother because he wouldn't be able to do anything if his mind would be too distracted by the thought of his mother. Even if he asked the Cerus-family who murdered his mother, it would create a negative effect on his mana absorption because of the constant distraction. Furthermore, the Cerus-family would most likely try to avoid answering him because they don't want to offend the opposite heir.
That's true and it's not like he completely forgets her, right? The only thing the reader knows is the fact, that he occasionally thinks about her while trying to ease everything by comforting himself in any way. Trying to distract himself and not thinking about her is not the main goal, while our naive Mc's thought "is my mother's murder at least regretting it?" is hypocritical, which does not mean he never cared about her. Everyone behaves differently while thinking about their dead relatives. While some go insane with the thought of killing, others are eerie silent, while their core is boiling. Meanwhile, others are traumatized and behave completely out of ordinary. There are still other solutions to take on someones death, but I alraedy noticed that my description about our Mc's mothers death could have been better
smoker:This is not reasonable. Who would stop thinking about such a matter simply because they can't do anything about it just yet? This is not something you can consciously think or not and its not something you can ignore just because you want to either.
The author is just stupid
Your book is too damn slow even with 2 soul bound his power or whatever is 10.3 after 100 or so chapters the Mc's character Is flawed no doubt, it builds character but his growth is to miniscule like everyone in this world is stronger even farmers hence he trains almost everyday. Ru telling us he's gonna catch up to people with 200 or more at this rate. Your killing your fan and readers atleast do a timeskips I don't want to read 50more chapters of this level. Then there's the killing intent pure plot armor is supposed to make him stronger??? Nah, Tge abyss technique now that was some good writing.
HideousGrain:The MC tries to avoid thinking too much about his mother because he wouldn't be able to do anything if his mind would be too distracted by the thought of his mother. Even if he asked the Cerus-family who murdered his mother, it would create a negative effect on his mana absorption because of the constant distraction. Furthermore, the Cerus-family would most likely try to avoid answering him because they don't want to offend the opposite heir.
I don't really thing that this novel is so extremely slow if you consider his situation. In the end, he gained his eyesight only a few months ago while the same happened with his soul awakening. If the chapters are interesting, why shouldn't he be "weaker" than others? Furthermore he is not that weak anymore if you read until the last chapter :)
TheAncientOnell:Your book is too damn slow even with 2 soul bound his power or whatever is 10.3 after 100 or so chapters the Mc's character Is flawed no doubt, it builds character but his growth is to miniscule like everyone in this world is stronger even farmers hence he trains almost everyday. Ru telling us he's gonna catch up to people with 200 or more at this rate. Your killing your fan and readers atleast do a timeskips I don't want to read 50more chapters of this level. Then there's the killing intent pure plot armor is supposed to make him stronger??? Nah, Tge abyss technique now that was some good writing.
Agreed. This was pretty much my impression as well, he actually started as mature (for his age, 13) and after 10 he digressed to an idiot (for age 8) and seemed to stay that way. To be fair I just could not read past chapter 19.
wow you must have not read the tounament/earth dragon arc because that entire section of about 50 chapters is all filler, but I cant mistake you for that. Otherwise I agree with your assessment, and what the author really needs to do is take a break because i think its grinding him down and making him release subpar content.
Yup, he did catch up. He did it way too quickly though
TheAncientOnell:Your book is too damn slow even with 2 soul bound his power or whatever is 10.3 after 100 or so chapters the Mc's character Is flawed no doubt, it builds character but his growth is to miniscule like everyone in this world is stronger even farmers hence he trains almost everyday. Ru telling us he's gonna catch up to people with 200 or more at this rate. Your killing your fan and readers atleast do a timeskips I don't want to read 50more chapters of this level. Then there's the killing intent pure plot armor is supposed to make him stronger??? Nah, Tge abyss technique now that was some good writing.
Frankly, just imagining any person or the majority if they go through a great torment and it can be said that his mother was killed and abused, he will almost deviate and will become cold towards others and alienation from society and introversion. This is something inevitable only in your mind, you as an author, you will find this what will happen and do you think that 13 years is young and immature? This logic is only in our world so that those in the 13th year can be excused, but even in our world you find mature people even at their young age because of poverty or mistreatment, where it is possible because of a lack of study that he goes out to work and is responsible before the time and this we live with. As for your saying that MC is still young, this is not logical Just justify yourself frankly, and as I said in a cruel world, even ours, it cannot be said that Sen's logic justifies the matter.
HideousGrain:To be honest, I don´t really think you´ve read everything intently...The MC is 13 years old and lost his mother a few years before that, which should be clear. He saved the youth´s because he wasn´t sure if he could face beasts head-on but assassinating is something completely different, right? You already said that he was bullied and so on, but he ends up trusting the ONLY one that didn´t treat him badly (Greg). Is attaching yourself to someone reliable that bad?!?. Seeking protection because he is weak is the same... He even helped him, turning his school-life into a better situation by preventing anyone from bullying him...He was warned about his eyes, but why the hell should he care? His eyes are obvious(golden) and not something easy to hide if Jason wants to live comfortable... Revealing his eyes to the Fler´s could have been a bad choice, but that´s not instantly dumb (in my opinion). The only thing I agree with you is Jason´s idiotic idea to experiment with his second soulbond.. He could have waited and he acted too impatient, but everything about that is character growth... Thanks for your review, but I don´t really think that you should be able to tell if there will be character growth or not if you just don´t get it. (Shallow character growth with him befriending Greg and Malia, but who am I to tell you that...]
Thanks for the heads up. Already feel like facepalming after reading about it.
Dude are you new in writing novels?
HideousGrain:To be honest, I don´t really think you´ve read everything intently...The MC is 13 years old and lost his mother a few years before that, which should be clear. He saved the youth´s because he wasn´t sure if he could face beasts head-on but assassinating is something completely different, right? You already said that he was bullied and so on, but he ends up trusting the ONLY one that didn´t treat him badly (Greg). Is attaching yourself to someone reliable that bad?!?. Seeking protection because he is weak is the same... He even helped him, turning his school-life into a better situation by preventing anyone from bullying him...He was warned about his eyes, but why the hell should he care? His eyes are obvious(golden) and not something easy to hide if Jason wants to live comfortable... Revealing his eyes to the Fler´s could have been a bad choice, but that´s not instantly dumb (in my opinion). The only thing I agree with you is Jason´s idiotic idea to experiment with his second soulbond.. He could have waited and he acted too impatient, but everything about that is character growth... Thanks for your review, but I don´t really think that you should be able to tell if there will be character growth or not if you just don´t get it. (Shallow character growth with him befriending Greg and Malia, but who am I to tell you that...]
these guys love one-dimensional edge lords and will force these characters in every novel they see be it logical or not, don't try to debate with them
HideousGrain:His Character is definitely flawed and I don´t want to deny that. In the end, I probably did a few mistakes in assessing a perfect character, but he is mature for his age and intelligent, even though he acts like a child with a naive main characteristic(which is not that good considering that humanity is trash) His naivety was planned but writing that he was mature and intelligent too many times was most likely the biggest mistake. Please bear my mistake and consider that I wrote the first 60 chapters without any writing experience(To that time I hadn´t even released a single chapter yet) Thanks for your critique and after rereading my own reply, I´m a little bit ashamed because it was more offensive than I wanted it to be. I hope you didn´t take it to heart. <3
