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Stealth95Lv154yr
2021-02-13 15:38

Despite the fact that I like the story there are many glaring issues. The cultivation system doesn’t make sense. You can either be a martial artist, a mage, or both. In order to increase your rank you must open up meridians which there are nine of. However if you practice both then you need to share so the ratio becomes 5/4 which means you are weaker than a pure mage and martial artist when instead you should be stronger so the concept doesn’t make sense. Instead it should be different concepts such as using dark energy to increase bodily functions, and strength for martial artists and for mages they could convert that energy into mana which is stored somewhere in the body. The author also creates these “spaces” that are very confusing and quite frankly shouldn’t exist.

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Stealth95Lv15

The AI is pointless as you can just change that to talent plus it’s unnecessary. There’s mention of 3D virtual system which doesn’t make any sense. Virtual means not realistic and on the computer/internet but in one chapter the author writes that In order to fly the plane they must travel through 3D virtual world which doesn’t make any sense and there’s no point of it just fly normally.

Stealth95Lv15

The mc family is poor so how is it that he suddenly pulls out a sword randomly and starts flying on it. It’s so random that it doesn’t make sense. I mean if he had it earlier then he could just use it against the assassin. Not to mention that he picks a spear later on even though he has a sword and states that he liked using swords. I understand that the author is thinking as he goes but because of that it doesn’t make much sense. He should’ve got the sword later on not when his family is still poor and uses it just to see his future gf.

Stealth95Lv15

Overall I like the story but the cultivation system needs to be redone, the virtual system/world needs to go, and fix the random stuff from happening that ruins the flow of the story. After those changes this can be a great story to read.

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Stealth95:Overall I like the story but the cultivation system needs to be redone, the virtual system/world needs to go, and fix the random stuff from happening that ruins the flow of the story. After those changes this can be a great story to read.
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