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EtherealStar
EtherealStarLv154yr
2021-04-10 18:06

two main problems. First is the level of writing quality. English doesn't seems to be his native langue and even for me an french with a not that good level of English grammar, it sting my eyes... The second one is the chaotic amount of techniques. He have so much bloodlines, cultivations techniques, talents at the same time. When you mix both it's very difficult to understand and follow the story.

Magic and Martial War God

Sabin_Subedi_Fei
4.3
273 Chs

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Sabin_Subedi_Fei
Sabin_Subedi_FeiAuthor

For the first problem, I am sorry. I am trying my best to improve but caught up with my studies and uploading chapters. I was not able to fix it As for the second problem, I'll slowly explain everything as the chapter progresses. A human is not complete with errors, so as a cultivator, he will learn and fix his error. Thank you very much for your honest review. I hope you'll be together with him on his long journey.

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EtherealStar
EtherealStarLv15

In the end I'm still reading it. I can see an improvement of the writing quality with time. But still too much thing left and right to remember. keep it up!

Sabin_Subedi_Fei:For the first problem, I am sorry. I am trying my best to improve but caught up with my studies and uploading chapters. I was not able to fix it As for the second problem, I'll slowly explain everything as the chapter progresses. A human is not complete with errors, so as a cultivator, he will learn and fix his error. Thank you very much for your honest review. I hope you'll be together with him on his long journey.
4yr
Sabin_Subedi_Fei
Sabin_Subedi_FeiAuthor

Try until the free chapters, if you still think it's not worth it, then you can stop. And thank you for your honest criticism.

EtherealStar:In the end I'm still reading it. I can see an improvement of the writing quality with time. But still too much thing left and right to remember. keep it up!
4yr
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