Stealth95

Include romance in the story. It was done really well this chapter. I really enjoy reading well rounded stories that include multiple tags. This story in particular is more realistic and takes the perspective of a guy and his day to day because of that romance should be included as it is part of everyone’s life.

Include the romance it was done really well in this chapter.

There are so many grammar mistakes, besides people in rl don’t talk like that.

Needs work. The way it’s written makes it seem as if the family was safe from the fire and fled the city but at the end it says he is looking for his family’s killers. Who lived and who died? It’s also confusing when the sister went missing.

It’s too soon to pick since most of these characters haven’t been introduced into the story yet. Right now jean is in the lead just based on the cosmic connection, although I wouldn’t mind Natasha winning since he might be able to heal her physically and mentally plus they both use martial arts.

Ryuu is overrated in my opinion. Tiona would be better plus they both like combat.

Tsubaki 100%

Haxorus

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