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EnderPL
EnderPLLv64yr
2020-06-24 00:15

If you want to know how stupid the story can get and how contradicting the Mc can be then this is a story for you. Writing quality is good, can’t say anything about it. I don’t know about stability so I gave 5 Story development, now here we go. The story with nice potential like other hundred of similar ones in Danmachi world. But really nothing special. Would be good if author would keep it on logic level but the behavior in the story is so fake and the storyline is just overflowing with stupidity. Mc gets the godes to sleep with him after 5 minutes conversation on their first time meeting. The Mc wants to join her family but decides to go with Loki and there is no explanation why! Well like most shiit in this story it “works because it works” Would not recommend it to anyone who actually looks for something interesting.

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watashiwavdesu
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Thank you! I am in an editing phase to correct that part and explain why the Loki familia > Hestia familia for him. He didn't get to "sleep" with Hestia in the true meaning, but it's fine in this way! He joined Loki because he want power, and alone he knows he couldn't handle to the the "Captain" like Bell. He wanted to be more powerful. I will correct this mess as I'm doing right now,so idk, if you want remain the story in the library for when I finished editing otherwise you can just ignore my novel :) Hope you will find the ones you think are interesting!

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