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HornyBoi
HornyBoiLv44yr
2020-03-09 18:38

Well, the grammar is good and all. And there's the good chapter update. But I can't help but be ticked off by the MC's pathetic mentality. I guess, it can't be helped if he was new to all of this. But, breaking down just because of a few words. Yes, the way he respond to Light really destroyed my patience. The people of Uruk were said thay if they were to fight they will die no matter what they do and they still fought. Leonidas was sent an oracle by the gods that he will not return alive and he still fought. Illya experienced all of that but still strengthened her resolve to fight. Emiya Shirou who just admire Kiritsugu sent himself to hell to helo others. Compared to them, who was struck by the cruel reality, and breaking is justified. But, just by imagining? Ugh, no matter how you imagine you cannot break down. Even those who break down due to nightmares needs horrifying experience to have those nightmares. But him? Even, Yun Che took almost 1000+ chapters to have a mental break down, you know.

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watashiwavdesu
watashiwavdesuAuthor

We're talking about someone's that days ago was peacefully leaving on Earth. You're attached to the personality of someone that lived their entire life knowing something like this could happen in a world where magic is spread. I don't know, make the thing real is so stupid? At least give him some days to understand that he isn't on Earth anymore, that he has to fight if he wants to live another day to bring food in his mouth. That's one hell of a shift to me...

HornyBoi
HornyBoiLv4

Please, a certain college graduate from a society which is FAR MORE PEACEFUL than Earth was exposed to people being blown up by gun. There's also certain students have their memories reverted to their normal days thrown into school-killing game show. You say he needs to adapt, but Amano did it much better than him. You can say that he's pathetic since he cried but Ethan didn't but Amano is much more NORMAL than Ethan. You've exposed his weakness with words but it can be more effective if you let him experience some darkness. And, just because he didn't cried is praiseworthy. Acting tough even though you're as weak as hell is much worse than crying. 'Cause crying shows that you're letting out those unbearable emotions stabilizing yourself and can strengthen your resolve. What I mean, is just you break down Ethan in a wrong way and wrong timing.

watashiwavdesu:We're talking about someone's that days ago was peacefully leaving on Earth. You're attached to the personality of someone that lived their entire life knowing something like this could happen in a world where magic is spread. I don't know, make the thing real is so stupid? At least give him some days to understand that he isn't on Earth anymore, that he has to fight if he wants to live another day to bring food in his mouth. That's one hell of a shift to me...
HornyBoi
HornyBoiLv4

I got too hot-headed and said too much. I apologize for that but I'm not gonna take back what I've said about the way you broke the MC and with him being pathetic. Getting power means getting authority and girls? That's just way too idealistic. And saying that he came from a peaceful world is not gonna cut it. There are pragmatists in our age that lived the same way as he did but not gonna react the same way he did. Character building means the character is growing by adapting to the changes to their surroundings and learning to it. He's just being idealistic by thinking that power can solve all of his problems and guarantee him a happy life. Power chains you to the harbor called battle unable to leave it. And as long as you have power, indeed others will fear you, but there are also others that will continue to attempt to eliminate and scheme behind the scences due to the threat you pose in them. Yes, you might be safe because you got power, but living with those kind of risks in your every-day life can plant the seed of fear in your heart. And, as far as I can see on the level of MC's mentality it's either he lose something in the pointless struggle towards stronger mentality, "miraculously" prevent that, or take back what he have lost due to some whim of fate. The first is quite good but the second and third is going to be forced thus making them taste bland. An overwhelming idealistic MC, this might be reason why I'm pissed off. I have nothing against this novel, so once again let me apologize.

watashiwavdesu:We're talking about someone's that days ago was peacefully leaving on Earth. You're attached to the personality of someone that lived their entire life knowing something like this could happen in a world where magic is spread. I don't know, make the thing real is so stupid? At least give him some days to understand that he isn't on Earth anymore, that he has to fight if he wants to live another day to bring food in his mouth. That's one hell of a shift to me...
watashiwavdesu
watashiwavdesuAuthor

Don't apologize, it isn't necessary. Character 'building' well, who said the Mc needs to start with the right mentality? I mean, being so smart to think ahead that much isn't in his style, at least for now. Gaining wisdom, he will understand how the world truly works. Interacting with the slaves will be a good start, right now, he believes the world around him isn't that difficult to manage because he has a girl next to him. Although it's a bad way to view things and you can call the Mc pathetic, I know it myself, it isn't necessary to remind it to me cause after some events he will understand... My suggestion is to follow the flow of the story and wait for a change. Btw, ๐Ÿช, take it.

HornyBoi:I got too hot-headed and said too much. I apologize for that but I'm not gonna take back what I've said about the way you broke the MC and with him being pathetic. Getting power means getting authority and girls? That's just way too idealistic. And saying that he came from a peaceful world is not gonna cut it. There are pragmatists in our age that lived the same way as he did but not gonna react the same way he did. Character building means the character is growing by adapting to the changes to their surroundings and learning to it. He's just being idealistic by thinking that power can solve all of his problems and guarantee him a happy life. Power chains you to the harbor called battle unable to leave it. And as long as you have power, indeed others will fear you, but there are also others that will continue to attempt to eliminate and scheme behind the scences due to the threat you pose in them. Yes, you might be safe because you got power, but living with those kind of risks in your every-day life can plant the seed of fear in your heart. And, as far as I can see on the level of MC's mentality it's either he lose something in the pointless struggle towards stronger mentality, "miraculously" prevent that, or take back what he have lost due to some whim of fate. The first is quite good but the second and third is going to be forced thus making them taste bland. An overwhelming idealistic MC, this might be reason why I'm pissed off. I have nothing against this novel, so once again let me apologize.
HornyBoi
HornyBoiLv4

I really apologize, though. Though, let me take back what I've said about the grammar. I didn't notice till now so I rated it with 4-stars, but it should be 3 at best.

watashiwavdesu:Don't apologize, it isn't necessary. Character 'building' well, who said the Mc needs to start with the right mentality? I mean, being so smart to think ahead that much isn't in his style, at least for now. Gaining wisdom, he will understand how the world truly works. Interacting with the slaves will be a good start, right now, he believes the world around him isn't that difficult to manage because he has a girl next to him. Although it's a bad way to view things and you can call the Mc pathetic, I know it myself, it isn't necessary to remind it to me cause after some events he will understand... My suggestion is to follow the flow of the story and wait for a change. Btw, ๐Ÿช, take it.
watashiwavdesu
watashiwavdesuAuthor

๐Ÿคญ You're so funny my god! By the way, I want to see your comments in fan fiction where grammar is even worse. Pay me english lessons if you want to see a better grammar cause nobody pays me to do this. I would like to remember that I am using hours that won't pay me anything. If you think my grammar is so bad then do me a big favor, don't read this novel and go somewhere else! Honestly, I don't need someone that remembers me things I know myself. So, find your own way.

HornyBoi:I really apologize, though. Though, let me take back what I've said about the grammar. I didn't notice till now so I rated it with 4-stars, but it should be 3 at best.
HornyBoi
HornyBoiLv4

I apologize if I offended you. I'll just saying my opinion. Feel free to say anything to me since that is your opinion too.

watashiwavdesu:๐Ÿคญ You're so funny my god! By the way, I want to see your comments in fan fiction where grammar is even worse. Pay me english lessons if you want to see a better grammar cause nobody pays me to do this. I would like to remember that I am using hours that won't pay me anything. If you think my grammar is so bad then do me a big favor, don't read this novel and go somewhere else! Honestly, I don't need someone that remembers me things I know myself. So, find your own way.
watashiwavdesu
watashiwavdesuAuthor

I aplogize too but the way you put things was really offensive. Say that my grammar is 'bad' was enough๐Ÿ˜…

HornyBoi:I apologize if I offended you. I'll just saying my opinion. Feel free to say anything to me since that is your opinion too.
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