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Arunavazael
ArunavazaelLv65yr
2020-03-14 17:08

First of all I don't mean to be mean to this novel. This is my honest review about the Novel. - The writing quality is average - Update is O.K I guess - The story is rather shallow in first few chapter doesn't know about 10 and beyond. I simply dropped it at chapter 9. The reason I dropped reading this novel because MC which I will explain it on next segment. - Character : Now this is the real deal . I warn you oh potential reader, you might feel yourself really frustrated on how MC mentality. MC mentality is like women changing clothes, fast and keep changing. To sum up MC is childish --> retard -->> mental breakdown + mental handicapped (almost) -->> happy go lucky -->> Asshole+retard. -World background , well it's standard Danmachi background without much description but yeah simple. Once again, please prepare yourself when reading the first 10 chapters. Some of you would like this novel , some of you would definitely dislike it and the rest here for passing time.

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watashiwavdesu
watashiwavdesuAuthor

You're right, I'll probably need to change things a bit in the first chapters but, making a review with just 9 chapters is your average review๐Ÿ˜‚ My suggestion is to be serious because thinking my whole novel is just the first 9 chapters is simply ridicolous. Anyways, thanks for the review. I'll try to change things when I have time.

Arunavazael
ArunavazaelLv6

Don't get me wrong. I don't insulting or lowering your novel. It's my impression of the nine first chapter. I do really wish to read more but as I listed there, I simply don't have a courage to read anymore. Indeed 9 chapters can't represent the whole story but the first Impression is needed. Of course I hope the story get better coz I've almost don't any material to read anymore and forced me to read mtl and raws. Although I don't have intention to read but at least your novel still sitting on my library collection. Who know maybe I will read it again someday and maybe change my Impression but not now or next few days .... or weeks.

watashiwavdesu:You're right, I'll probably need to change things a bit in the first chapters but, making a review with just 9 chapters is your average review๐Ÿ˜‚ My suggestion is to be serious because thinking my whole novel is just the first 9 chapters is simply ridicolous. Anyways, thanks for the review. I'll try to change things when I have time.
watashiwavdesu
watashiwavdesuAuthor

My novel will be there when you'll feel reading it again. Have a good life, fellow reader.

Arunavazael:Don't get me wrong. I don't insulting or lowering your novel. It's my impression of the nine first chapter. I do really wish to read more but as I listed there, I simply don't have a courage to read anymore. Indeed 9 chapters can't represent the whole story but the first Impression is needed. Of course I hope the story get better coz I've almost don't any material to read anymore and forced me to read mtl and raws. Although I don't have intention to read but at least your novel still sitting on my library collection. Who know maybe I will read it again someday and maybe change my Impression but not now or next few days .... or weeks.
Xenotrap
XenotrapLv5

An actual civil discussion on the internet?What a miracle.

watashiwavdesu:My novel will be there when you'll feel reading it again. Have a good life, fellow reader.
BlurryHamster
BlurryHamsterLv4

Impossible! o.o

Xenotrap:An actual civil discussion on the internet?What a miracle.
Alusec_BR1
Alusec_BR1Lv10

I was already preparing the popcorn for the swearing and huge texts

Xenotrap:An actual civil discussion on the internet?What a miracle.
Man_of_culture_69
Man_of_culture_69Lv3

Same

Alusec_BR1:I was already preparing the popcorn for the swearing and huge texts
Autistically
AutisticallyLv13

Xenotrap:An actual civil discussion on the internet?What a miracle.
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