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LunaSkylair
LunaSkylairLv44yr
2020-02-11 21:58

I Think this book have a lot of potential, the sex scene between Qienta and Ethan excited me a lot. The updates are fast and long, with good grammar, Ethan is an unstable protagonist but i hope you will actually manage to develop his personality further. His training at the start wasn't too much enjoyable but, after that, it's a pleasant book to read so...good work and don't drop it Author, we all want updates

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watashiwavdesu
watashiwavdesuAuthor

* inhales * * exhails * yes, thank you for your review๐Ÿ˜ค the training part..what about it?i think it's normal? The sex scene between Qienta and Ethan. It's obiviously the fact that Qienta is a waifu the fact that made that scene "good"๐Ÿ˜ค

Hentai_Senchou
Hentai_SenchouLv6

On the other review you said he only has Ais in his harem?

watashiwavdesu:* inhales * * exhails * yes, thank you for your review๐Ÿ˜ค the training part..what about it?i think it's normal? The sex scene between Qienta and Ethan. It's obiviously the fact that Qienta is a waifu the fact that made that scene "good"๐Ÿ˜ค
watashiwavdesu
watashiwavdesuAuthor

If you read the story further, you will know what I meant

Hentai_Senchou:On the other review you said he only has Ais in his harem?
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