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2023-03-11 16:02

Started reading this because someone said it was one of the few good harems, I made it 2 chapters in before I dropped. The grammar is horrible. It's like it was written by a 10 year old with English as a second language. Keeps referencing some other FF as if we're supposed to read the authors mind and just know what it is. Really, really, really bad.

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AsianLadyBoy
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I love this fanfic. For those of you guys that are hesitating because it has NTR in the description, don't. Like the author said the girls don't f*** the other guys, so it's not that bad. Think of this fanfic as an alternate reality/alternate universe. In the original they lived happily ever after, and in this one they just didn't. If you don't want to hate the original girls, then you should probably not read it because you will. The MC will rebuild his Harem with different women from different worlds. As he trains to get stronger and stronger. The only thing I don't like about the novel. Is when he goes to different worlds, it just takes too got dam long. I understand that the author is trying to build relationships with the future harem members. And like the author said, hes trying not to make it look like the MC is a Pokemon Master. That's just throwing poke balls at the women in capturing them. It's just that he's in a different world chapter after chapter after chapter. Overtime it just doesn't feel like a DxD fanfic anymore. As soon as he starts traveling to different worlds, he goes to one world after another and never really goes back. The author was doing a good job at throwing in dialogue of the DxD world. Like updating us on what was going on with in the DxD world with the MC's disappearance. But so far it seems like he's just hasn't done it since the past couple chapters, and it has sort of lost the DxD fanfic Vibe for me. For me personally I would love less erotic chapters like describing how they're having *** for a whole two chapters. And have less chapters of each World he's traveling to. And throw in more information on whats going on in the DxD world. Another thing is that I don't like that the other DxD characters know about what happened and they hate what the girls did to the MC. But they don't want to punish the girls because they don't want them to suffer, punish them a little bit. Like make the angle a fallen angle. That would have been great. But not much punishment has happened, which is BS in my book. But other than that I love it.

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