The True Inheritor of Hashirama's Legacy

Story well reaten and with a fantastic character design, if you read a little of it I'm sure you will amaze yourself. Actually I'm just here to motivate de auctor to continue the stability of updates. Really good job with the fanfic man!!!

The execution is quite unique and very entertaining so I'll just say this: "The blood of the First Lies in your roots So now quench your thirst For negotiations are moot" Pls keep entertaining me with your writing

Overall I genuinely enjoy this novel I dont think being not picky is fair to the author who has put in so much effort especially when there are so many parts I like Thank you for your efforts

There are times when the story that you like, become the story that you dislike because of the idealist of author want to force some plot he want... Example: The Last of Us 2 And this story It become annoying when author nerfed the MC just because he want to write bull**** rivalry... Moreover the rival is random OC, we don't care about him, and it's make the story less enjoyable. Good Rivalry needs some build up, and not randomly he is as strong as the MC, altho you write some reason why he is that strong, that just become like your unneeded reasoning for that forced plot. IMHO, rivalry plot is not gonna works in fanfics, because majority of the reader doesn't care for the rival. That will be different in original novel.because you can build up the rival, but in this story... No... I don't think it'll works... You just make many of your reader feel irritated if you forced it... Will still read it but let's see... Maybe I will drop it if some forced plot that's make me feel uncomfortable still happen... Oh, forgot to say, I recently always commented something like this when do review Please thinking about what kind of feeling you want to deliver to reader, do you want the reader feel blood pumping while reading your story, feeling relaxed, feeling sadness, or feeling happy, you should incorporate it to the plot... Think if you write this chapter will the reader feeling what I want they to felt, if I write this paragraph, will the reader feel what I want they to felt, etc... So the story you make will not become random plot without feeling, and also not triggered your reader

I do not see a lot of grammar mistakes so that part is good but others?? Ohh boi, where do i even start. First, Tsunade only left Konoha nearing the end of second war because Dan die near the end of the third the reason being she is still there in konoha during Anko's cursed mark sealing flashback helping Anko with Hiruzen. Do u remember who is the same generation as Anko if not earlier? Kakashi and bunch meaning she still there during third war. So your baseless bashing of her in last few chapters left a bad taste. Yes Nawaki may died during the Second but not Dan. Also that means Tsunade is also at Konoha during Mito funeral, i mean seriously, u r forcing Tsunade who loves her grandparents way too much too out of character. Lastly, really, i mean really of all female character u chose Kushina, make no mistake, i like her and all but this also botched the canon future and i can not see the good point about it. Just way too idealistic. Plot armor is only in moderation plus doing your research about characters before u write them. Uzushiokagure case is a curious one since Kishi left a black hole in that plot in any case Hiruzen is the best military leader since he won two wars with scheming and all but he is a joke during peace time, i mean he won the second war when he do not have many SS class shinobi with him iirc only him and sakumo since the sannin were still young during that time only at the end they fought Hanzo and became famous and during the third war he prolonged the fight to nuture Minato and BOOM. He may have profitted from Uzushiogakure and Iwa, Kumo, Kiri war i do not see him selling info about the seals. Those three village only aim at Uzumaki clan because they want their bloodline and seal technique and being eliminating one of Konoha's main ally is a huge bonus to that. If Hiruzen knew about it quicker he can two pronged the villages and won it rather than prolonging it at the cost of its many shinobi lives.

Well, since this is my novel, I shall be giving my five stars. I won't write anything too much boring for you to read. If you have a doubt, reply to me on this. I will check it out and reply to you soon enough.

First, I have to say that this story has a decent grammar, alongside the similarly-decent pacing/structure. Nonetheless, the clarity could indeed be somewhat better, honestly speaking! Currently, my biggest problem with this story is actually the author's relatively weak comprehension of the English language itself; So, let me explain now what I mean by that: He likes to write many glaring awkward sentences in a paragraph, and it's not just one or two sentences, here and there, - the entire chapters are filled with them, to be honest! It simply doesn't 'flow' well with the native speakers, such as myself, as it really takes away from the overall immersion, and the readability, of the entire story we're supposed to read here! Therefore, even though he has a nice vocabulary, and writes in a grammatically correct way, it still doesn't feel authentic to an English native speaker, who likes to read with care and doesn't just skim over the words, looking for wish fulfillment moments, Basically, even though it's not exactly on the "Engrish" level of writing, so to speak, it's really coming close to that, in fact! However, if you're in a similar bracket as the author, regarding your English grasp levels, then I guess that this won't be much of a problem for you, in the end! As for general writing; It has some nice ideas, but it also appears quite unrealistic, most of the time (this could also maybe attributed to the previous point). TL/DR: If you're an English native, I genuinely recommend staying off this story in the future!

How the hell is this rated soo high baffles me and here i thought only chinese novel use this bs 5 star bots i guess even here in fanfiction we can someone uses it🤦‍♂️🤦‍♂️

Tbh i was expecting more from a novel with nearly perfect rate score .

One of the most entertaining and different naruto fanfic I've read on Web novel. The mc is likeable and the story is progressing very well. The only problem I've found in reading this story is waiting for each chapter to come out because most chapters are ending with great cliffhangers😂. Definitely a great story and I would definitely recommend it.

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I totally support this story, all I hope is that you give the Mc a little more neurons and do a little more op on mokkuton. Another matter of paramount importance is that somehow it also has mikoto would already be great to see an itachi even more op-ranging than it was in the original series.

Wow.

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So many OP fics are trash, how you made a good one will baffle me for ages to come, thanks for making a story like this and I’ll Be readint some more of your work

After you kill madara and kaguya you should try to make your own version of boruto (no I'm not talking about making araki have a son and then make him the protagonist, cuz it would be stupid as he still have much to do and I wouldn't like him to become a kage only to end up becoming a absent husband and father cough ,"naruto" I'm talking about exploring the existence of the other õtsutsuki like momoshiki, urashiki and ishiki and maybe even where they come from . I even have an idea about how he could discover then. You could make Sasuke and boruto come to his world as a parallel during the time travel arc making a extremely interesting crossover, and maybe even have him visiting the canon world as i think it would be fun (specially natuto and boruto reaction over his parallel step-father/grandfather) .

Probably one of the best written story on this site. Chapters are decent length and actually contains substance unlike some other author who goes by the name of Gh**t*z.

По началу, читая этот фик, я думал что он будет обыденный ничего свежего, все по старому и нудному т. к первые главы говорили об этом ( хотя были предпосылки на что-то годное ). И автор сделал все как я и хотел, тут всего в достатке-идеальный баланс. А что насчет грамматики и частоты выхода глав, ну это просто космос (по сравнению с тем что я повидал). Советую всем этот замечательный фанфик, читается на одном дыхании. Не зря потратите время + время препровождение будет незаметным. Как говорится, в целом никто не уйдет недовольным!

Its a very good novel. Im still reading it compared to the other fanfics of naruto. Love the authors passion, ideas and the way the story is going. Hope you dont drop it until quantity gets over quality.

This is obviously good. I’ve been looking for a fanfiction where main character has Mokuton. It’s my favorite in the Naruto world. The fact that Kushina is a love interest is even better. Only concern I have is that you don’t nerf or even down play MCs power.